Rhona Mcferran Poet Rhyme

Words I Cannot Say

Words I cannot say-
within ricochet
ugly scenes replay
Distress!

Words I cannot say-
heavy stowaways
within spirit weigh
Depress.

Words I cannot say-
shades of yesterday
games I used to play
Regress...

Words I cannot say-
sins of youth repay
bars of iron gray
Oppress!

Words I cannot say-
inner self betray
secrets on display
(Undress.)

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(Although I listed this as "Rhyme" it is actually my first attempt at a French Lai poem.)

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Arturo Michael March 15, 2019 at 12:42 AM I like it...a sweet flair somewhere underlying... Rhona Mcferran March 15, 2019 at 10:48 PM Thank you so much- glad you liked it! ;)

Jennifer Proxenos February 21, 2019 at 12:50 PM Impressive poetry Rhona - never tried this form of poetry - doubt I could but appreciate yours - an excellent write - best for a win. Poetry hugs, Jennifer. Rhona Mcferran February 22, 2019 at 12:08 PM Thank you so much!! Poetry hugs to you, too! ;)

Andrea Dietrich February 13, 2019 at 7:28 PM by the way, I have a poem with a title very similar to this one but the topic is very different!! Rhona Mcferran February 13, 2019 at 8:01 PM Will have to look that up when I get a chance!

Andrea Dietrich February 13, 2019 at 7:27 PM I hope this one wins. I put in a lame offering so I doubt it for myself!! Rhona Mcferran February 13, 2019 at 8:00 PM Thank you! (...and I'm sure yours was fine, we're just always harder on our own work!) ;)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart February 11, 2019 at 2:17 PM Gorgeous composition, and your first with this form no less, I'm wholly impressed! I love it, a fave. xomo Rhona Mcferran February 11, 2019 at 4:53 PM Aaaww, thanks Mo!! So glad you liked it! ;)

M. L. Kiser February 9, 2019 at 2:24 PM We all have secrets; it's no crime but, there are things we need to say; it's important that they are said. A well-penned poem, indeed and for a first, French Lai, well done! Rhona Mcferran February 11, 2019 at 12:17 PM Thank you so much, ML!! (And my apologies for not replying sooner!)

Silent One February 9, 2019 at 6:03 AM French Lai? Now that sounds so cool... I like the flow to this... I believe we all hold onto words we cannot to say... the important thing is to say what is vital and needs to be heard... before it is too late.. Rhona Mcferran February 9, 2019 at 11:21 AM Thank you! ...And yes, I couldn't agree more (about saying what is vitally important before it's too late)! ;)

Andrea Dietrich February 8, 2019 at 7:08 PM I really like this form. You know what, it would work for that contest on repeated lines since the first part is always repeated. SO NICE! Rhona Mcferran February 8, 2019 at 8:04 PM Thanks so much! I've been so busy lately I hadn't been keeping up with the contests... but I looked up the one you mentioned and threw this in the ring! ;) Glad you liked it!!

Caren Krutsinger February 7, 2019 at 10:21 PM Your French Lai poem is wonderfully done, of course. I am so GLAD to see you have written a new poem, and this one is fantastic, my Soul Sister. Bravo! Rhona Mcferran February 8, 2019 at 4:46 AM Thank you, my friend! I'm trying to get my writing muse back to work again, but she has been cantankerous lately! ;)

Michelle Faulkner February 7, 2019 at 9:51 PM You have a mesmerizing flow here, something about this is so satisfying, like scratching an itch! Rhona Mcferran February 8, 2019 at 4:45 AM Thank you so much- glad you found it that satisfying! ;)