Woods

I walk towards the woods green and deep Once inside I find it hard to sleep What an illusion the woods do give of being green and being neat Since deep inside animals sleep waiting till night that's when they eat I lie and I watch see shadows in the dark My mind becomes fuzzy my body scared I see a large -- large bear standing in the night He approaches my tent from the right grips my shoulder rolls me over my eyes blur with fright the bear growls It's just me son it's daddy

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Date: 8/26/2008 1:26:00 PM

Love the surprise ending! This poem is visually interesting too. Thank you for sharing this story with us and for taking time to comment on my poem. Keep on writing! Karen

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/26/2008 9:35:00 AM

Hi again Tony! The only way I know to thank someone for their comments is to either click on BLOGS...at the top of the Home page of Poetry Soup.(Tho not everyone has a blog,including me). Otherwise, the only other way I know is to click on their names under your own poem (where the comments are) and their poems will come up. Then, you can comment on any one of their poems, and also give your thanks.Do I make any sense?? If I didn't explain myself well...don't be afraid to ask again! Carrie

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/26/2008 5:54:00 AM

What a cute surprise ending!! Loved this! We have always loved camping, so I can picture this happening with our son! Nice writing!!..Oh yes, to answer your question (the comment on my poem)...you can write to other soup members, by commenting on their poems. It will show up under their poems, but not under yours. I usually correspond by commenting on their latest poem, but any of theirs will do. It won't show up on your own page..just theirs. It's nice to have you here Keep writing!..Carrie

Marilyn Hernandez

Date: 8/26/2008 12:10:00 AM

Awww! this was so adorable! It sure makes me nostalgic too... I can't wait to get out of NYC! I really do miss the calm of the woods...as long as I don't run into any bears! Anyway, this was a very sweet write! Keep up the good work!