Woebegone

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Sadness in
   his downcast eyes;
      in tears,
         devastated.

His four-legged friend,
   birthday gift,
      deceased;
         just buried.

Poor child,
   woebegone.
      He still can't
         believe his dog died;

keeps asking Mom and Dad
   "Why?"
       "Is he coming back?"


                (Yalto)

"Yalto" is a form invented by yours truly
 line 1-15: 3,4,2,4,5,3,2,3,2,3,3,5,6,1,5 syllables
Date written: 07/19/2020

Submitted for...
July Na Or Hm Poetry Contest (Winner: 1st Place)
Sponsored by: Constance La France 
Date written: 07/28/2020

Received an N/A in....
STRAND COMPLETELY NEW (11)any theme any form poetry contest
Judged 7/19/2020

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Aditi Mishra

Date: 8/1/2020 8:43:00 PM

Edward this is such an honest portrayal of innocent emotions my friend. I could feel the sadness melting my heart. I love the themes reflected in your poems. Keep writing and inspiring. Congratulations on your win :)

Edward Ibeh
Date: 8/2/2020 6:15:00 AM

Thank you so much, Aditi:-) I'm glad this poem resonated with you. Have a glorious day, my friend!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/29/2020 9:39:00 PM

So sad, Edward. Having lost dearly loved pets - members of our family - this poems brings back that heartbreak especially seen through the eyes of a child. Congratulations on your win! Blessings to you!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/30/2020 3:40:00 AM

Losing a member of the family, even if it's a pet, is devastating. Thanks for the visit and congrats, Sam:-)

Constance La France

Date: 7/29/2020 5:39:00 PM

Edward, congratulations on your win in my NA/HM contest for July with this excellent write, a FAV for me _Constance

Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/30/2020 3:34:00 AM

Many thanks for my placement, Constance:-) Thanks for faving this poem as well, my friend!

John Watt

Date: 7/29/2020 1:51:00 PM

Nice to see a win for this heartbreaking Yalto, Edward. Never say never! Congratulations, my friend.

Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/30/2020 3:27:00 AM

Thank you so much, John:-)

Jenna Logan

Date: 7/29/2020 1:08:00 PM

I felt your lines so deeply, Edward. I've lost several pups and a devoted kitty. I'll not have another because it's too hard to bear the sorrow. Your write deserved so much more than an N/A, and now you have it!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/30/2020 3:29:00 AM

I can't imagine the pain and sorrow of losing so many beloved pets, Jenna. I appreciate the kind words, my friend!