Wizard - Slipping Away

>center>Sadly I sensed his heart slipping away.
Head on my pillow,
I dwelled in a dreamscape of denial,
muffling all thoughts of losing him
until I woke in my bed alone.

Draping across my shoulders
the old sweater he’d left behind,
his scent provided comfort.
But then I paused and realized
I was still at the edge of denial. 
*Words used for Andrea and Susan’s contest: slipping, pillow, dwelled, denial, muffling, woke, draping, paused, edge
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Merryman Avatar
December 27, 2011 at 7:22 PM
Such a sad situation. Great poem. Congrats on your win, Carolyn. Kim
Knop Avatar
December 27, 2011 at 3:17 AM
My congrats on your win, too, dear Carolyn! Nicely penned! Loved the read this morning. Take good care!...Love, Gert
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December 24, 2011 at 5:46 AM
Nicely penned. Loved and enjoyed it. Congratulation on your win. Thanks, bl
Poet Avatar
December 23, 2011 at 10:50 AM
Congrats Carolyn on your win !I loved it first time around.
Aul Avatar
December 22, 2011 at 11:12 AM
Congrats on your win... Have a Merry Christmas........George
Quigley Avatar
December 22, 2011 at 8:50 AM
Carolyn. This has such a melancholy feel to it. Really enjoyed the read. Congratulations
Brown Avatar
December 22, 2011 at 6:44 AM
Congratulations on your super placement in Andrea's "Word Wizard's" challenge Carolyn. Love, Carol
Dietrich Avatar
December 22, 2011 at 12:48 AM
VERY well done, Carolyn. Susan and I really enjoyed this one. Congrats on your third place win.
Horne Avatar
December 20, 2011 at 2:04 PM
Yes, it truly must have been unbearable for you, love. Beautiful but sad write
Dufresne Avatar
December 19, 2011 at 6:22 AM
Well done my gifted friend! Ir's bound to do well in the contest. I found this contest inspiring somehow and seemed to get the creative juices flowing. Put a trickle of muse back in my dry spell. I wrote one for it but missed the deadline. That's okay it was a lot of fun and will enjoy reading everyone's entrees. Nicely done miss Carolyn. Merry Christmas and God bless you a bunch!
Austin Avatar
December 17, 2011 at 12:56 PM
Sad. Waking from a sad dream to a reality just as sad. Fine work. Love ya. daver
Freeman Avatar
December 17, 2011 at 12:27 PM
As if in the act of keeping Carolyn your center is recorded with your poem. Smile. Very good expression of heart felt times, my dear. Agape, Moses
Poet Avatar
December 17, 2011 at 7:39 AM
A very touching write Carolyn.You have put the centering sign wrong here.Best wishes for the contest.
Kapoor Avatar
December 17, 2011 at 4:29 AM
Extremely beautiful write my friend. What a sad lovely Poem you have created and have weaved the words so nicely. My good wishes for your contest entry and thank you for your comments on my Blog. You can still hear the song " A Song for You"as its Video is also on the Pub and the Poem on PS. Hope you are enjoying the winter’s warms and must be busy for the approaching Xmas. Merry Christmas my dear friend. Love and best wishes...Ravindra….Carolyn Devonshire
Butterfly Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 3:37 PM
A sad but lovely poem Carolyn. Thank you for my placement in your contest called Your Christmas Miracle.
Horsman Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 3:17 PM
Oh boy, sorry Oh girl, excellent entry for the contest, read some really good ones, this also one of the best. harry
Andresen Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 2:25 PM
You do it again Carolyn.....BEAUTIFUL ! x-x-x-x-x-x for the Contest Carolyn! Love Anne-Lise
Lane Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 2:24 PM
I am so sorry.
Haick Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 1:22 PM
I love this, Seafaress...you' ve penned a beautiful poem from those words.. My best wishes for a big win in Andrea's contest. Love, Annalise
Maverick Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 1:05 PM
This write makes your loss plain Carolyn, my senses respond in sympathy..
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