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October 16, 2024

Song In Memory Of A Legendary Personality (From his Sweetheart)

Goodbye, Legend! It's too hard to bear, It's too hard to live, Without You !! Today sky is crying, so does the ocean, Temple bells are ringing the saddest tune! Nothing will be same without you, Without you, Without You!! Raindrops are whispering our story, Dewdrops are quivering on Lotus leaves, I can't let you go, Darling ~ I haven't told you how I feel, How do I bear the emptiness, Teach me the way you lived! Nothing will be same without you, Without You, Without You !!

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Valsa George

Date: 11/4/2024 9:33:00 PM

Dear Mala, this is so touching. If converted into music, this will serve as excellent lyrics and can be sung with the accompaniment of musical instruments. Enjoyed this highly emotive poem.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/5/2024 5:18:00 AM

Dear Valsa, I wrote this short poem thinking it could be turned into a song. I felt very emotional after the demise of Ratan Tata, who I used to respect as a great individual. I also heard that as a young man he was about to marry someone, and it did not work for family reasons, and he stayed single for the rest of his life. This story about his loss touched me very much. I don't know anyone who would be able to add music to it. I will be looking for a composer. Thank you so much - for the inspiration.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/4/2024 8:44:00 AM

What a wonderful yet sad love write. Great Ending.... Have a blessed day writing away.............

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/5/2024 5:29:00 AM

Dear Paula, Thank you so much. I am not as good as you commenting on poems...but I always read your poems, and very thankful to the support I receive. Love ~

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/28/2024 8:42:00 AM

It makes a beautiful but sad song, He must have loved her so very much that he wrote with a broken heart. You depict his love and loss so soulfully with your wonderful lyrics. Hugs Jennifer.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/5/2024 5:27:00 AM

Thank you, Dear Jennifer. This is a poem about a great man from India, who passed away recently. What we know about his personal life is that when young, he was about to marry someone, but in the end it did not work out because of family reasons. He stayed single his whole life, and dedicated his enormous wealth to the needs of the poor. An amazing life! I am wondering if I can find someone to add music to the lyrics! Love~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/19/2024 11:06:00 AM

Ahh so melancholy. I don't know the song you mention but I love your own lyrics

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/5/2024 5:22:00 AM

Thank you, Dear Andrea. I wrote this poem about a wonderful leader in India who recently passed away. His life was exemplary, but he stayed single and devoted his life for the needy.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/16/2024 9:39:00 PM

This made me tear up dear mala, how poignant and heart wrenching! I can’t imagine how it must feel like to lose their beloved like this. So tragic. I love especially the lines “ Today sky is crying, so does the ocean, Temple bells are ringing the saddest tune! Nothing will be same without you, Without you, Without You!!” heart wrenching sigh! I felt this deeply! Sending you light always

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 10/17/2024 8:15:00 AM

Dear Empress, I am so glad you read this one! Very recently one of Indian leaders passed away - a humanitarian, philanthropist, a visionary. He was the richest industrialist, but totally humble and kind. He was single, never married. Recently he candidly talked about his life and love. His story moved me so much I wanted to write a simple song. Don’t know if this poem sounds like a song-material! Thank you for reading. Love ~ My Sweet and Talented Friend!