Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen Poet Free verse

Without a Moment's Notice

Without a Moment's Notice

Thirst was writhing within.
Muscles were cramped beyond strengthening.
Gurgling of the last drop down the drain
Resounded again and again.
Be still, my mind, this drought is not forever.
The flood was turned off in an instant.
Without a moment’s notice –

Dryness parched my last hope.
Angry eyes increasingly twitched.
Recollections became clogged with sap.
Booming lost mental reigns cried.
Quiet, remaining tears seeking forever.
Hope gasped, submerged the next second.
Suffering, needing love’s liquor –

And then, you entered the room.
Statuesquely standing, exuding strength,
Rippling since the first smile, life restrained.
Receiving fresh moisture, thoughts sighed.
Trusting without reason, dreams flourished near.
You, my uplifting, with love’s deluge, quenched me.
Without a moment’s notice –

Poetic Vehicles: Alliteration, metaphor, assonance, personification, and ambiguity

© Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
May 26, 2010
Poetic Form: Free Verse

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Carol Sunshine Brown August 23, 2010 at 5:27 AM Congratulations on your win Dane Ann in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Free Verse Jewels of the Crown". Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire August 22, 2010 at 3:09 PM Congratulations on your win, Dane Ann. Well done! Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta August 21, 2010 at 5:36 PM Congrats on your 2nd place win, Dane

Kabuteng P.Ink K. August 21, 2010 at 9:59 AM Hi Dane :) Super congrats on your awesome win with this-- enjoyed this one the first time around as well as re-reading this now :) --nikko :)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 21, 2010 at 7:05 AM Congrats Dane Ann on your big win in Debbie's contest with this brilliant write.. enjoy ..ciao.. luv.

John Rhinem May 26, 2010 at 7:35 AM Smile, what a lovely and wonderful write this is here dear Dane Ann; flowing and vibrantly pretty colours; acknowledging within a hearts precious tribute, your love and perhaps gratefulness, for this man, the man of your life! Smile, "Excellent Poetry" dear lady! "Love & Warmth To You & Yours Always," John! ~ Bye:)

Scarlett Sepulvado Anderson May 26, 2010 at 6:58 AM Wow! what a moment. I like the way you captured that special moment. very visual write. Thanks for sharing. Have a great day! Scarlett

Poet Destroyer A May 26, 2010 at 4:43 AM well done, a nice moment enjoyed,..p.d.

Anthony Nutter May 26, 2010 at 3:23 AM Your talent and unique style are captured in this wonderful write. Excellent piece.

Dr.Ram Mehta May 26, 2010 at 3:10 AM Nice thoughts on love and thirst for it

Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 26, 2010 at 2:02 AM This is really beautiful Dane-Ann :) Your reference to thirst here works so well with love, enjoyed this write :) & I hope you are doing well :) thanks for all your comments :)