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Within the Fog Distant Mountains Strain

“Within the fog the distant mountains strain Bruised in shades lavender and forest green Each angle decomposing ~ ~ ~ in the rain” While dreary dawn, dazed, awakens in pain Trapping blushed morning in languid ravine Within the fog the distant mountains strain Darkened is design sketched on golden plane Shadowed is rosy grin of once pristine scene Each angle decomposing ~ ~ ~ in the rain While crystal skyline drenches in cloudy reign Blurring scarlet arc decaying in fading sheen Within the fog the distant mountains strain Stellar stage is roiled in motifs of graying stain Splintered are dim-beams upon ashen sateen Each angle decomposing ~ ~ ~ in the rain Though hope gleams as winds start to wane Lifting purpled amethyst zeal, as yet unseen, Within the fog the distant mountains strain Each angle decomposing ~ ~ ~ in the rain May 6, 2021 Placed 1st: Choose your form poetry contest Stanza chosen : option 1 Sponsor: Joseph May

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/20/2022 11:39:00 AM

Very descriptive and creative work. These are not so easy to write. You did okay with it. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Valsa George

Date: 3/20/2022 2:55:00 AM

Wonderful imagery, Vijay ! I always feel that villanelle is a difficult form, that I haven't so far attempted to do ! Feel great admiration since you have done it with such perfection !

Jan Allison

Date: 5/18/2021 2:47:00 PM

what super imagery Vijay, many congrats on your win:-) hug jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/17/2021 2:34:00 PM

Congrats for your well deserved win, Vijay.

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/16/2021 4:45:00 PM

WoW! Vijay, I see congratulations are in order. You took the chosen stanza and penned a poetic masterpiece. Your imagery and content was amazing, as usual. Well done:-) Alexis

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 5/15/2021 7:09:00 AM

A brilliant Villanelle Vijay, excellent use of the selected verse also. Congratulations on the win… Belle

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/15/2021 8:20:00 AM

Thank you Belle--much appreciate.

Joseph May

Date: 5/14/2021 5:57:00 AM

Well written Vijay, Congrats on your win..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/14/2021 6:05:00 AM

Thank you Joseph--much appreciate.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/13/2021 9:07:00 AM

I love your chosen quote and the picturesque poem you created. Congratulations! (A fav for me.)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/14/2021 6:05:00 AM

So special to receive your FAVE Juliet. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 5/11/2021 2:27:00 PM

Such a beautiful piece Vijay, so original and well crafted too. So full of nature and it's pictures of nature so encapturing. Blessings always,Gordon

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/14/2021 6:04:00 AM

Thank you Gordon. Much appreciate your visit and comments.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/10/2021 4:13:00 PM

what a beautiful way to use those repeating lines of the verse provided. You did this so well!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/11/2021 4:44:00 AM

Thank you Andrea. Much appreciate your kind remarks.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/10/2021 3:08:00 AM

- I could write a whole page to say how beautiful this is, Vijay - Anyone who does not agree .... can keep quiet :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/10/2021 4:37:00 AM

Happy to see you again Anne-Lise. Many thanks for your cheerful comments. Stay well--best wishes!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/8/2021 1:58:00 PM

Your poetry always contains so much beautiful colors. I enjoyed your arrangement today, Have a great weekend dear friend :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/10/2021 4:35:00 AM

Glad you stopped by my friend with your beautiful comments. Always a joy when you visit. Many thanks, Vienna.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/7/2021 3:37:00 PM

I would not want to be Joseph judging this contest. I think I would divide the winners into the four groups of the poetry forms he allowed us to choose from. Judging is going to be a nightmare! Your poem is pristine Vijay! I hope it wins big! Blessings Connie

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/8/2021 5:34:00 AM

Much appreciate Connie your visit and comments. Many thanks for stopping by with your kind remarks.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/7/2021 7:22:00 AM

Vividly descriptive of the disintegration of a beautiful scene in nature, Vijay. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/7/2021 12:00:00 PM

Much appreciate --thank you Janice. Glad you could visit with your kind remarks.

Supraja Kannan

Date: 5/7/2021 2:09:00 AM

What a great imagery!!! Loved the spectacular scenes throughout... Beautiful Villanelle... No doubt, a winner for sure...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/7/2021 5:08:00 AM

Much appreciate your vote of confidence. Thanks for stopping by with your lovely comments, Supraja.

Vijay Galia

Date: 5/7/2021 12:24:00 AM

Simply Superb, As always!! I wish to write neatly, just like you Vijayji..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/7/2021 5:06:00 AM

Glad you could stop by with your lovely comments--much appreciate--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/6/2021 8:23:00 PM

"Each angle decomposing ~ ~ ~ in the rain, distant mountains strain" This thought wraps softly around me, reminding me, that I must continue to reach for my destination. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/7/2021 5:06:00 AM

Glad to read your feedback as always, Brandy. Much appreciate your kind remarks--many thanks.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/6/2021 7:20:00 AM

Excellent villanelle Vijay with superb imagery. Good luck in the contest but don't think you'll need it. Hope your week is going well. Tom

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/6/2021 12:41:00 PM

Thank you Tom for your cheerful comments--always a joy when you visit. Many many thanks.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/6/2021 7:04:00 AM

You gave me a less o on how to write a villanelle. So many images in a rain forest. Definitely a fave and a winner.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/6/2021 12:40:00 PM

Your FAVE is a special treat, Victor. Much appreciate your kind feedback--many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/6/2021 6:50:00 AM

This is excellent Vijay. It reminds me of the fog I saw around the mountains yesterday. You have written this form beautifully :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/6/2021 12:39:00 PM

You probably see the fogged mountains like this frequently. Much appreciate your supportive comments, Heidi--many thanks.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/6/2021 6:07:00 AM

Lovely writing.. a blessing to read. I enjoyed and hope you're a winner. God bless you my friend. Love, Gina

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/6/2021 12:37:00 PM

Thanks Gina--much appreciate your kind remarks and good wishes.

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/6/2021 5:40:00 AM

Wow, Vijay. This is so good. I can imagine looking through the fog at hazy objects and see the red sun without it hurting my eyes. i see mountains everyday but I especially love looking at then when they are partially covered by a cloud or in the early morning low hanging clouds. Exception writing. Really nice:)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/6/2021 12:36:00 PM

I am so glad you could visit with your delightful comments. Much appreciate your feedback, Daniel. Many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/6/2021 5:38:00 AM

Enchanting imagery gracefully dancing in poetic rain, my dearest, Vingay. Bewitching verses, my friend. Good luck with the contest. Blessings.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/6/2021 12:35:00 PM

Much appreciate my friend you visit and comments. Many thanks for the kind remarks.