Vijay Pandit Poet Villanelle

Within the Fog Distant Mountains Strain

“Within the fog the distant mountains strain
Bruised in shades lavender and forest green
Each angle decomposing ~  ~  ~ in the rain”

While dreary dawn, dazed, awakens in pain
Trapping blushed morning in languid ravine
Within the fog the distant mountains strain

Darkened is design sketched on golden plane
Shadowed is rosy grin of once pristine scene
Each  angle  decomposing ~  ~  ~ in  the  rain

While crystal skyline drenches in cloudy reign
Blurring scarlet arc decaying in fading sheen
Within the fog the distant mountains strain

Stellar stage is roiled in motifs of graying stain
Splintered are dim-beams upon ashen sateen
Each  angle  decomposing ~  ~  ~ in  the  rain

Though hope gleams as winds start to wane
Lifting purpled amethyst zeal, as yet unseen,
Within the fog the distant mountains strain
Each  angle  decomposing ~  ~  ~ in  the  rain

May 6, 2021
Placed 1st: Choose your form poetry contest
Stanza chosen : option 1
Sponsor: Joseph May

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Sara Kendrick April 20, 2022 at 11:39 AM Very descriptive and creative work. These are not so easy to write. You did okay with it. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Valsa George March 20, 2022 at 2:55 AM Wonderful imagery, Vijay ! I always feel that villanelle is a difficult form, that I haven't so far attempted to do ! Feel great admiration since you have done it with such perfection !

Jan Allison May 18, 2021 at 2:47 PM what super imagery Vijay, many congrats on your win:-) hug jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 17, 2021 at 2:34 PM Congrats for your well deserved win, Vijay.

Alexis Y. May 16, 2021 at 4:45 PM WoW! Vijay, I see congratulations are in order. You took the chosen stanza and penned a poetic masterpiece. Your imagery and content was amazing, as usual. Well done:-) Alexis

Beryl Edmonds May 15, 2021 at 7:09 AM A brilliant Villanelle Vijay, excellent use of the selected verse also. Congratulations on the win… Belle Vijay Pandit May 15, 2021 at 8:20 AM Thank you Belle--much appreciate.

Joseph May May 14, 2021 at 5:57 AM Well written Vijay, Congrats on your win.. Vijay Pandit May 14, 2021 at 6:05 AM Thank you Joseph--much appreciate.

Juliet Ligon May 13, 2021 at 9:07 AM I love your chosen quote and the picturesque poem you created. Congratulations! (A fav for me.) Vijay Pandit May 14, 2021 at 6:05 AM So special to receive your FAVE Juliet. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks.

Gordon Mcconnell May 11, 2021 at 2:27 PM Such a beautiful piece Vijay, so original and well crafted too. So full of nature and it's pictures of nature so encapturing. Blessings always,Gordon Vijay Pandit May 14, 2021 at 6:04 AM Thank you Gordon. Much appreciate your visit and comments.

Andrea Dietrich May 10, 2021 at 4:13 PM what a beautiful way to use those repeating lines of the verse provided. You did this so well! Vijay Pandit May 11, 2021 at 4:44 AM Thank you Andrea. Much appreciate your kind remarks.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 10, 2021 at 3:08 AM - I could write a whole page to say how beautiful this is, Vijay - Anyone who does not agree .... can keep quiet :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit May 10, 2021 at 4:37 AM Happy to see you again Anne-Lise. Many thanks for your cheerful comments. Stay well--best wishes!

Mystic Rose Rose May 8, 2021 at 1:58 PM Your poetry always contains so much beautiful colors. I enjoyed your arrangement today, Have a great weekend dear friend :) Vijay Pandit May 10, 2021 at 4:35 AM Glad you stopped by my friend with your beautiful comments. Always a joy when you visit. Many thanks, Vienna.

Connie Marcum Wong May 7, 2021 at 3:37 PM I would not want to be Joseph judging this contest. I think I would divide the winners into the four groups of the poetry forms he allowed us to choose from. Judging is going to be a nightmare! Your poem is pristine Vijay! I hope it wins big! Blessings Connie Vijay Pandit May 8, 2021 at 5:34 AM Much appreciate Connie your visit and comments. Many thanks for stopping by with your kind remarks.

Janice Canerdy May 7, 2021 at 7:22 AM Vividly descriptive of the disintegration of a beautiful scene in nature, Vijay. Janice Vijay Pandit May 7, 2021 at 12:00 PM Much appreciate --thank you Janice. Glad you could visit with your kind remarks.

Supraja Kannan May 7, 2021 at 2:09 AM What a great imagery!!! Loved the spectacular scenes throughout... Beautiful Villanelle... No doubt, a winner for sure... Vijay Pandit May 7, 2021 at 5:08 AM Much appreciate your vote of confidence. Thanks for stopping by with your lovely comments, Supraja.

Vijay Galia May 7, 2021 at 12:24 AM Simply Superb, As always!! I wish to write neatly, just like you Vijayji.. Vijay Pandit May 7, 2021 at 5:06 AM Glad you could stop by with your lovely comments--much appreciate--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole May 6, 2021 at 8:23 PM "Each angle decomposing ~ ~ ~ in the rain, distant mountains strain" This thought wraps softly around me, reminding me, that I must continue to reach for my destination. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit May 7, 2021 at 5:06 AM Glad to read your feedback as always, Brandy. Much appreciate your kind remarks--many thanks.

Tom Cunningham May 6, 2021 at 7:20 AM Excellent villanelle Vijay with superb imagery. Good luck in the contest but don't think you'll need it. Hope your week is going well. Tom Vijay Pandit May 6, 2021 at 12:41 PM Thank you Tom for your cheerful comments--always a joy when you visit. Many many thanks.

Victor Buhagiar May 6, 2021 at 7:04 AM You gave me a less o on how to write a villanelle. So many images in a rain forest. Definitely a fave and a winner. Vijay Pandit May 6, 2021 at 12:40 PM Your FAVE is a special treat, Victor. Much appreciate your kind feedback--many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.

Heidi Sands May 6, 2021 at 6:50 AM This is excellent Vijay. It reminds me of the fog I saw around the mountains yesterday. You have written this form beautifully :) Vijay Pandit May 6, 2021 at 12:39 PM You probably see the fogged mountains like this frequently. Much appreciate your supportive comments, Heidi--many thanks.

Regina Mcintosh May 6, 2021 at 6:07 AM Lovely writing.. a blessing to read. I enjoyed and hope you're a winner. God bless you my friend. Love, Gina Vijay Pandit May 6, 2021 at 12:37 PM Thanks Gina--much appreciate your kind remarks and good wishes.

Daniel Turner May 6, 2021 at 5:40 AM Wow, Vijay. This is so good. I can imagine looking through the fog at hazy objects and see the red sun without it hurting my eyes. i see mountains everyday but I especially love looking at then when they are partially covered by a cloud or in the early morning low hanging clouds. Exception writing. Really nice:) Vijay Pandit May 6, 2021 at 12:36 PM I am so glad you could visit with your delightful comments. Much appreciate your feedback, Daniel. Many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis May 6, 2021 at 5:38 AM Enchanting imagery gracefully dancing in poetic rain, my dearest, Vingay. Bewitching verses, my friend. Good luck with the contest. Blessings. Vijay Pandit May 6, 2021 at 12:35 PM Much appreciate my friend you visit and comments. Many thanks for the kind remarks.