With Hands That Weep

It was a liquid wall – a wave so exceptionally massive
Foreboding and catching unawares, tossing into passive
Submission of bodily functions violently shaken
White noise crashing through sandy pores
Tearing fingers along broken bottles to
Billions of bubbles bursting between salty motes
Sucking hideous gulps of brine in lung full rotes

Where serenity hides amongst coral flutes
To seek you out and shove you deep
As a soul is crossed and taken by reap
With hands that weep
Across a soundless plain
Devoid of pleasure, yet not of pain

A journey through light, a glittering void
Filled with those seeking past and present
Where worlds collide to anoint a soul
Before the hands of time; and
Commit to dust, a body belonging
To the ordinary world

Where loved ones drip upon a wasted shore
To hunch and punch
A chest that’s cold to disbelief at
Eyes that speak through windowless souls
Of a place that’s reached beyond
The hands that scream and weep

Over a body that belonged to the ordinary world





Anthony Slausen’s Poetry Contest – Near Death Experience
24 Oct 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 12/6/2014 11:00:00 AM
I give this a very healthy super 7 my friend. Flow, rhythm and message stirred the mind to ponder the darkness beyond and the blessings of life in the here and now. Good luck in the contest...
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Mark Trichet
Date: 12/10/2014 1:58:00 AM
Hey Robert, thanks for kind words
Date: 11/6/2014 6:14:00 AM
such vivid imagery I found this so chilling to read mark many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/5/2014 11:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Mark. To bad you had to kill him off.
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Date: 10/26/2014 12:01:00 PM
oh my gosh, what brilliant writing this. I had to read it twice to make sure I got it, but it has to be someone that is rescued from a drowning. So sad. So well described!! I thought the person died, but because the contest is called near death, it could be that he lives!!! a SEVEN
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Mark Trichet
Date: 10/26/2014 5:55:00 PM
Why thanks Andrea, your comments truly mean a lot to me. I did "kill" him off in the end...although it is a near death experience, I guess he just got a little to near to it! :) (Entirely fictional) Thanks for the 7!!
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