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With a Keener Edge

Here from the ledge looking into the liquid silence across the abyss of time the eye for detail is sharply seen clear from this plateau, giving new edge to a life spanning out flat, as a cord where the view is worn but, tautly keen with insight Spliced are the wires that stretch out below me according to colors red joined to red blue joined to blue some which have tangled mixing the hues changing the views from where I once stood wedged deep in the canyons looking up Into two directions, we reached for the sun flapping our wings running from truth swimming with fear the closer we veered A view of the ordinary became the exception my eyes ever arching to reach for the stars by far, without reason while seasons were passing and strange as it seems I learned to stop grasping for what was unreasonable I learned to grab on, holding on tight to that which had meaning than ever before Here from the ledge looking into the dust across the abyss of time that has passed My eye for detail is honed sharp and keen seen from the years, giving new edge to a life spanning out flat, as a cord where the view may be worn but, sought.... perhaps taut........ with new insight ___________________________________________________________ In Another Time Contest Sponsor Ir0nic ZiNk

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Date: 9/27/2013 8:30:00 PM
another nice winning poem... good night Carrie... xox..Linda
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Date: 9/25/2013 12:07:00 PM
I can really relate well to the feelings that you expressed here, of how we see ourselves over time. I also liked the flow of the words in this poem. A very enjoyable read. Great work, Carrie! Congratulations on your win, as well!...Thank you so much for the nice comments! :)
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Date: 9/25/2013 8:08:00 AM
Way to go Carrie, another excellent piece. Congrats.
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Date: 9/24/2013 4:50:00 PM
An excellent approach to this contest and best one I saw yet. Congrats, Carrie.
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Date: 9/24/2013 12:27:00 PM
beautiful awakening done in such an eloquent yet grounded manner... sweet congrats on your win, carrie... :) huggs
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Date: 9/24/2013 11:11:00 AM
Love this Carrie, we all need to cling to the meaningful things and with life so busy we tend to forget what is important. Lovely poem and I love this imagery. Congratulations on your win ;) *hugs*
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Date: 9/24/2013 9:52:00 AM
another magnificent write flowing from your pen,,,,congrats on your win! :)
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Date: 9/24/2013 9:06:00 AM
Carrie! This writing placed 5th in my contest. I was genuinely stunned to discover you wrote this. A great song "Ready to Fall" from one of my fav bands, Rise Against, played loudly in my head as I read this. The blend of risk & self-identity was so powerfully done. You had me good with the ending. =D
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Date: 9/11/2013 3:08:00 PM
Awesome! What a great poem!! Betty
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