Wishes

Solid in nature But dripping with irony Like ice Cold and stiff But once grazed by doubt Leaks away Never to be sustained A Warmth like blood A taste Sharp and sour Spoiled rotten To be reached again Incessantly craved

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Sami Al-Khalili

Date: 8/9/2024 10:14:00 AM

There is a bittersweetness to your writing. The title is called "Wishes" but the poem as a grit that is sharp and hits hard, rather than that of a wish to be uplifting, this has a bit of darkness in it. Thank you for the reading.

Damsel in Distress

Date: 8/5/2024 4:18:00 AM

Awww...Congrats, Ash!

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/7/2024 6:36:00 PM

Dear Ash, indeed, wishes are fragile. You believe they can come true till they don't. A yearning piece. Congratulations for your win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Di11y Da11y

Date: 7/6/2024 2:50:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement - short but leaves an lasting impact, as intended

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/6/2024 12:33:00 AM

Congrats and God bless you, love, Gina

thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/5/2024 6:51:00 PM

Congratulations on your win dear poet. Happy writing.

Craig Cornish

Date: 7/5/2024 12:09:00 PM

Ash, love your thoughts here

Beata Agustin

Date: 7/3/2024 2:55:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.