Wisdom Collaboration With Jeannie Minor

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Thank you once again to Mrs. Jeannie Minor for collaborating with me to write this poem.This is our third poem together and look forward to working with her again. We hope you enjoy the read. Peace and God bless:)

I'm lost inside a feeling I thought had disappeared In a state with a see through ceiling With walls of pain and fear The blueprint seemed to be flawless From materials unknown to man For those of us seeking solace From a life of selfish demands There are no doors or windows With only one way to escape The design is totally enclosed To leave you must change shape All I see around me is based on how I feel which begs myself the question "Is any of this real?" All of life's reminders only come from looking back Memories are the binders to this vicious painful track The barriers around me are all I choose to see To change my view prospectively just might be the key Perhaps upon a second look there might be something more past the pain and fear I took to fight this evil war My apprehensive prison cell will one day set me free when I decide to see my hell as possibility With wisdom I could live my life outside these walls of fear I'd say goodbye to days of strife and never shed a tear.

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/22/2016 9:28:00 AM

You both did this so well. I like the feel and the message.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 9:31:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. I gotta tell you, she has a lot of talent. I enjoy working with her. I always appreciate your kindness. Peace my friend:)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/22/2016 5:33:00 AM

- A wonderful co-write with wisdom and key to many questions in life, Daniel and Jeannie - I wish you a lovely Easter :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 8:56:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise. You are always so sweet and kind. I always look forward to your visits. Peace sweet lady:)

Brian Davey

Date: 3/22/2016 1:13:00 AM

All of life is full of learning experiences it is up to us to teach ourselves the lessons from them. Wonderful write by you Mrs. Minor I thoroughly enjoyed it! 7+

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 8:54:00 AM

Thank you, Brian. If we don't learn we continue to make the same mistakes. One must be willing to change their perspective and not confine themselves to rigid beliefs. I appreciate the visit and your friendship. Peace my friend:)

Tom Quigley

Date: 3/21/2016 10:09:00 PM

We sure do build walls...great write.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 8:49:00 AM

Yes we do, usually when they are not needed, sort of like government work. LOL peace my friend:)