Wisdom Collaboration With Jeannie Minor

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Thank you once again to Mrs. Jeannie Minor for collaborating with me to write this poem.This is our third poem together and look forward to working with her again. We hope you enjoy the read. Peace and God bless:)

I'm lost inside a feeling
I thought had disappeared
In a state with a see through ceiling
With walls of pain and fear

The blueprint seemed to be flawless
From materials unknown to man
For those of us seeking solace
From a life of selfish demands

There are no doors or windows
With only one way to escape
The design is totally enclosed
To leave you must change shape

All I see around me
is based on how I feel
which begs myself the question
"Is any of this real?"

All of life's reminders
only come from looking back
Memories are the binders
to this vicious painful track

The barriers around me
are all I choose to see 
To change my view prospectively
just might be the key

Perhaps upon a second look
there might be something more 
past the pain and fear I took
to fight this evil war

My apprehensive prison cell
will one day set me free
when I decide to see my hell
as possibility

With wisdom I could live my life
outside these walls of fear 
I'd say goodbye to days of strife 
and never shed a tear.

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/22/2016 9:28:00 AM

You both did this so well. I like the feel and the message.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 9:31:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. I gotta tell you, she has a lot of talent. I enjoy working with her. I always appreciate your kindness. Peace my friend:)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/22/2016 5:33:00 AM

- A wonderful co-write with wisdom and key to many questions in life, Daniel and Jeannie - I wish you a lovely Easter :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 8:56:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise. You are always so sweet and kind. I always look forward to your visits. Peace sweet lady:)

Brian Davey

Date: 3/22/2016 1:13:00 AM

All of life is full of learning experiences it is up to us to teach ourselves the lessons from them. Wonderful write by you Mrs. Minor I thoroughly enjoyed it! 7+

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 8:54:00 AM

Thank you, Brian. If we don't learn we continue to make the same mistakes. One must be willing to change their perspective and not confine themselves to rigid beliefs. I appreciate the visit and your friendship. Peace my friend:)

Tom Quigley

Date: 3/21/2016 10:09:00 PM

We sure do build walls...great write.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 8:49:00 AM

Yes we do, usually when they are not needed, sort of like government work. LOL peace my friend:)