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Winter Whites

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*Image of Snow Winter White by Pixabay.

Winter Whites

Master winter's crystalline zephyrs brisk,
studies o'er its righteous domain quickly,
promptly the seasonal occurrence whisk,
frost wintry breath dust a field o' calmly.

Eggshells ahead, once a rocky meadow,
Snow hovers across a restless highway,
Wall posts look like porcelain afterglow,
Cable radars are bone chinaware splay.

Alabaster Venuses ... snowstorm lamps,
Snow White elucidate the dwarfs a song,
Daisies dozing 'neath powdery revamps,
Cottonfields-rice patties, trees chiffon.

Ivory pearls, wilt on places, creamed rich,
Winter Sunday's finest whites are the pitch.

2022 January 18
*1st Place*
A BRIAN STRAND STRUCTURED
~~Brian Strand: Judged 2022 March 08
*3rd Place*
Winter Wonders Within Nature
~~M. L. Kiser - Judged 2022 January 23

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David Mohn Date: 1/24/2022 3:14:00 PM wonderful Sonnet William...thick with imagery...congrats :) Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 1/24/2022 7:56:00 PM A hearty thanks, David, instinctively my friend, Aloha!

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/23/2022 9:01:00 PM I did not know about your last line but read what you said to Jules answered my question. Your use of metaphors and imagery make this poem exceptional William. Congratulations on your win. Blessings xxoo Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 1/23/2022 9:38:00 PM As I mention to Jules, my complex nature at times can be unclear and overwhelming, and if be the case, I'm open to criticisms, and thanks a whole lot, Connie, mahalo nui loa!

Eve Roper Date: 1/23/2022 8:01:00 PM Congratulations on your win, William, you always have a uniform verse . Hugs and blessings for a better year in your life Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 1/23/2022 9:25:00 PM Thank you kindly, Eve, truly, as this is the course that all of us will go through in our lifetime, we tread forward in reflection thereof. Again, thank you, Aloha!

Jules Rose Date: 1/23/2022 10:44:00 AM Where would the Volta in this sonnet be? And what do you mean by Venuses? Goddess of love? Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 1/23/2022 9:33:00 PM You and your critiques are welcomed, TRULY! I can be complex at times, but appreciative to clarify, thank you and Aloha! Jules Rose Date: 1/23/2022 6:16:00 PM Thank you! It’s a wonderful sonnet Hilo Poet Date: 1/23/2022 12:00:00 PM 1st HALF: This sonnet correlates the character that winter takes on, making a field of rocks look like eggshells, alabaster venuses that the snowstorm lamps take on in appearances. Hilo Poet Date: 1/23/2022 11:59:00 AM 2nd HALF: As for the volta, in the good old days, Christians would dress in their Sunday whites, and as such, it's a done deal and that Sunday's takes on the wintry look regardless of the season, hence the title winter takes on whiteness persona/pitch.

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 1/18/2022 4:05:00 PM Hello William, yes this is winter. It is cold and sometimes stormy. To shovel snow is not always easy. when the snow is heavy. That is when you shovel slowly to get the job done. Aloha! Darlene Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 1/23/2022 11:37:00 AM I was stuck in Montreal, I missed my flight but took another a little later. We stayed at the Marriott In-Terminal Hotel for free since I've got an employee lifetime status card. The men folks and the boys did the dirty work, even if it is snow. Aloha! Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 1/19/2022 10:11:00 AM Your friend. Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 1/19/2022 10:10:00 AM Hello William, did you enjoy Montreal? How long did you stay? Heavy shoveling is hard on some people, when the snow is heavy. Good thing the grandkids did the shoveling. Aloha! Darlene Hilo Poet Date: 1/18/2022 6:57:00 PM I recently visited my family in Montreal and Connecticut, Darlene, as you described it, yes, very much so but the kids and grandkids did the heavy-duty stuff. Stay safe my friend, Aloha!

Vijay Pandit Date: 1/18/2022 5:41:00 AM Much enjoyed your winter white imagery, William. Well done my friend. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 1/18/2022 5:55:00 AM I appreciate you, Vijay, for your wonderful innate nature my friend, Aloha!