Winter Sunbeams

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While driving, a strong sunbeam hit my hands and revealed my mother's hands on the steering wheel..They could not have been mine for they were too old and wrinkled..

winter's sunbeams flow
through dotted cumulus clouds...
ancient hands revealed  

For PD...

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 10:42:00 PM

SARA, Congratulations on your awesome win. Thank you for participating in my contest. Stop by my latest blog "POETS" if you'd like. Enjoy the win and honorable mention. <3 <3 LOVE LINDA <3 <3

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 2/21/2015 5:24:00 AM

I think it is a haiku oh sooo great "ancient hands revealed " wow Sara..so sensational.God bless.Rated 7++++++ ad infinitum..

James Fraser

Date: 2/20/2015 1:06:00 PM

Love the warmth in your Senryu Sara, hugs, James :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/19/2015 11:30:00 AM

this you, sara... soft, deep and sensitive.. what a fine senryu.. huggs

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/19/2015 10:03:00 AM

Nice flow of words and a pleasant sounding poem with all the right syllable count. Good Job!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 2/19/2015 8:59:00 AM

This is a simply stunning senyru, Sara. Your words are the visual and the pictures a mere accompaniment.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/19/2015 6:27:00 AM

- Oh, so beautiful - I wish you a wonderful day, dear Sara :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Laura Leiser

Date: 2/18/2015 11:35:00 PM

Oh, I like this! What a creative analogy, too! A 7 from me! :)

Nathan D.

Date: 2/18/2015 10:32:00 PM

hope you decide to slam me back, no pressure im not re slamming anyone and I promise I wont get offended or cry. already some great lines that got me good its all in fun.

Nathan D.

Date: 2/18/2015 10:30:00 PM

I like the last line great senryu. very profound.