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Tears... how brittle in the ruin of this heart Like dampened weeds burned into cinder , When maple trees turn ebon and droop As laughing winds do not return… nothing moves, Not even the sky in its hazy curves. * ` ) I watch my own body… it becomes a stranger, Melting into an anonymous phantom That enters the dark through crushed wails… But no one comes , not even a barn owl flapping While a eulogy of sudden demise goes unsung. * * ~ And midnight tears wash over me vanishing, That I gaze at the maple leaves slowly astir The way he would fix them in a vase, especially On this our anniversary… but cry I must, alone Waiting for a tender ghost-kiss to put me to sleep. Re- posted 1/4/2018 Free Verse: Winter Blues Contest for Laura Loo

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Date: 5/5/2018 9:11:00 PM
Belated congrats on your top win, nette.
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Date: 1/13/2018 1:50:00 PM
A gorgeous and sadly emotional write Nette. Congratulations on your excellent first place win.. Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Date: 1/13/2018 3:55:00 AM
such a beautiful poem sweet Nette, I really loved it! thank you and congrats ;)-luloo
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Date: 8/26/2016 3:24:00 PM
I like your poetry A lovely poem I enjoyed reading it.
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Date: 7/31/2016 6:59:00 PM
So sad...weeeep....weeeep..perfect for the contest :) well written and I love the layout and I know BW will love it too..good luck lady :)-luloo
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Date: 7/30/2016 11:24:00 PM
Magnificent and heart wrenching poetic words, Nette! I am in awe of your talent, 7++
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Date: 7/30/2016 7:56:00 PM
Once again your poetic prowess shines brightly in this melancholic write, Nette. Your analogies and descriptive images are vivid and easy to follow. Love this one!
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Date: 7/30/2016 7:20:00 PM
Wonderful imagery, Nette. REad the end of her rules. you forgot the word Tears!!!
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Date: 7/30/2016 6:24:00 PM
A lovely yet sad poem of lost love and how grief can paralyze. This is such a tender entry Nette. I hope it does real well in the contest. 7 ; )
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Date: 7/30/2016 6:01:00 PM
The beauty of this marvelous verse lies in your skill which describes a lonely scene with such power and nostalgia!
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Date: 7/30/2016 5:16:00 PM
Goodness, this staggering masterpiece is full of heart and soul ;it definitely hooked me into wanting more and paused to feel the depth of my favorite lines," I watch my own body… it becomes a stranger,Melting into an anonymous phantom."
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Date: 7/30/2016 5:01:00 PM
You've provided a strong poetic avenue for the reader to sense the 'feel' of this grief. This is an impeccable, touching poem!
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