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October- 5.2023
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Jack Frost, Jack Frost, how we feel your icy touch. The earth lies under your freezing clutch. You are a sneaking thief coming to steal the russet sun, And mercilessly take away all our outdoor fun. Fluffy snowflakes on feathery wings unfurled, Fall gently and silently over the sleeping world. First they come slow and then in torrential showers fast, As if the snowing will never stop, but forever last. Busy streets and pavements are now lying bare. People stay indoors. To come out, they hardly dare. Rodents have gone into hibernation in their ditch. It seems life altogether has gone out of pitch. Birds sit with drooping wings in their woody nests. Within eyeshot, no trace of any roaming beasts. From nowhere comes the song of a single bird. On the slopes, one cannot sight the grazing herd. Inch by inch, foot by foot, snowflakes fall, Surrounding us on all sides like an oppressive wall. Tawny roof tops are crusted with flakes of milky snow, That the sun with golden beams alone can thaw. From the cobalt sapphire sky’s misty veil, Fall down the snowflakes like summer hail. Unpigmented piles get heaped on the ground, And the Earth lies inundated in a sea of milk churned. From the seamless sea of ice, strewn with scattered gems, Aureate, flaxen sunbeams make glittering diadems. Thus Nature creates variegated scenes, delighting the heart, Superseding every piece in a museum of man-made art!

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Date: 10/6/2023 8:59:00 AM
Valsa, your creation is truly a sight to behold. The way you've crafted your rhyme scheme is simply breathtaking, flowing effortlessly without feeling forced or artificial. The imagery you've painted with your words is absolutely captivating, transporting me to a winter wonderland where I can almost feel the chill in the air and hear the satisfying crunch of the ice beneath my feet as I navigate the sidewalks and pavements. Every line in your work is a gem, filled with brilliance and evocative emotions.
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Date: 10/6/2023 8:51:00 AM
So much imagery. Sure to please Silent One. This challenge wasn't so easy for me.
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Date: 10/5/2023 12:11:00 PM
beautiful and expressive images, snow is graceful indeed, and so quiet atmosphere to share, this is really an inspiring poem, thanks
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Date: 10/5/2023 9:40:00 AM
I can't say I'm a fan of the white stuff. Seen plenty in my lifetime. But you describe it beautifully, and falling snow or a snowscape can be really pretty. I especially like your penultimate stanza Valsa
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Date: 10/5/2023 7:58:00 AM
Wow this is brilliant for silent ones contest, your wordplay is excellent, using winter words, and imagery as well as , your use of colors is so captivating and magical! I felt like i was listening to a song here as i read those rhymes that create such a catchy cadence, i think i did see u mention somewhere that rhymes dnt come easy for u? But seems not these are profound and just beautiful! I love the ending the most museum of man made art! This definitely is a fave and m sure he will love it
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Date: 10/5/2023 7:40:00 AM
What a magnificent creation, Valsa. Your rhyme scheme is beautiful, not contrived, and your imagery is engaging. I felt the cold of winter and the icy crunch of the sidewalks and pavements. So many great lines here. "Inch by inch, the snowflakes fall" describes the snow accumulating. Well done, dear Valsa. Am faving this one...and have a wonderful October day, blessings, Sara
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