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Wind Trio

wind sets leaf dancing waving up and down on twig pulls and tugs it loose whipping up water into colourful bubbles spraying them afar scuttling clouds racing across the endless blue sky leaving wisps behind

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Kp Nunez

Date: 6/28/2015 11:53:00 AM

Lovely. The effect of the wind on the leaf, water and cloud is unarguable! Great imagery. Is this how you expect the entries for your traditional haiku contest, Shadow?

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 7/11/2015 8:37:00 AM

ty Kim and yes but only one haiku hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/25/2015 7:31:00 AM

Last haiku consider "fluffy clouds racing" your first line breaks from the form. I so enjoyed the first two and got a bit stuck on the third.

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 7/11/2015 8:36:00 AM

ty Rick hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2015 11:35:00 PM

this is clever. I especially like the imagery of that first one, shadow. Say, I am on a trip Friday and in case you don't hear back from me in the near future, it's because I can't find internet. Hopefully I will have it though!

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 7/11/2015 8:35:00 AM

ty Andrea hugs