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Willow

Line of inquiry by contest sponsor:
"instrumentalising mind, I rested thought
employing it only when needed
shifting to heart, I became self-taught
gentling touch, voice of conscience heeded"

Oh, restless mind. Why can’t you sleep? A reel of film, you roll on and on sometimes all night and into early dawn. Were I a willow, would I always weep? Oh, rattling voice inside my mind, please pause so I may enjoy peace. My consciousness I need to release. Tranquility I wish to find. Willow – in silence – is able to dwell though she trembles when strong winds blow. Of unwanted thoughts I need to let go. They are tempests that I must quell. My mind must become as a calm breeze breathing soft words of a love that sweetly whispers from above caressing willow with gentle ease. In God’s light I wish to abide. With beauty born of listening to the voice that teaches mindfulness is the wise choice. Then love’s shelter, as a willow, I might provide.
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Date: 8/21/2024 2:43:00 PM
Love it.
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Date: 8/17/2024 8:18:00 AM
Willow trees, we always feel are sad and weep, but in truth you are quite right as you ask yourself 'were I a willow would I weep '. They give shelter and God whispers under the willow tree with love and in a gentle voice from above, gives it courage during a raging storm. Deep, sensitive poem friend Andrea, hope you are keeping well. Hugs, blessings Jennifer
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Date: 8/15/2024 9:40:00 PM
Oh, amazing write. I just love this. God bless you sweet lady. much love, Gina
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Date: 8/15/2024 4:44:00 AM
I could really relate to your words Andrea: I use a white noise machine set on ocean waves. Try to switch off the thoughts and then around 2am a light sleeper every other night helps me catch up on Zzzzz'S
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Date: 8/12/2024 12:15:00 PM
Great use of form here, Andrea.. It flows so well..
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:16:00 PM
Thanks, S.O.
Date: 8/12/2024 11:49:00 AM
Tranquility i wish you would find sweet andrea! I love this and i love also love the line “ Were I a willow, would I always weep?” what a creative line! The alliterations and cleverness of wordplay there is impressive! I think i must be a willow cus i weep alot. You did this prompt very well in such a sincere manner which is soulfully moving! Love it! Fave it is
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:16:00 PM
Thanks so much, Sweetie.
Date: 8/12/2024 11:15:00 AM
Beautiful poem.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:16:00 PM
Thanks, Jay
Date: 8/12/2024 9:58:00 AM
Wonderful poetry. Yep, I think artists all burn late into the night. Seems to come with our creative turf, creativity more an inspiration than a schedule -- Love willows! They weep, they seep, in my heart there they leap, a luxurious bouquet of lavishing feelings.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:16:00 PM
I love willows too. Thanks, Joe.
Date: 8/12/2024 8:33:00 AM
We seem locked in such a timeframe Andrea.' Great writing.!! How I value your prescence on soup.' I can't Open your mail of the 11th.. All the earlier ones Open maybe it will tomorrow? All my best Joe.)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:16:00 PM
Joe. Don't worry about that email. i was simply answering you that the link you gave me did not permit me to open the link.
Date: 8/12/2024 6:06:00 AM
Andrea, very nicely composed and very thoughtful. The activity level of our minds definitely can make us uncomfortable. How to find a good balance? The image of the willow tree can definitely help us visualize how we should be. Making this a favorite. Smiling!!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:18:00 PM
Yes, how to turn off the mind. It's very hard for me. I am getting to sleep by listening to a show on tv with very low volume. As I focus on hearing it, I forget my random thoughts and usually fall off to sleep, but I am right back up a few hours later, so that's when I use my sleeping pill!
Date: 8/12/2024 3:01:00 AM
Well written and thought provoking Andrea. Best of luck in the contest. Enjoy your week ahead. Tom
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/12/2024 8:18:00 PM
thanks, Tom
Date: 8/11/2024 4:51:00 PM
Andrea, if we were a willow for sure we’d weep, for all the reasons that we can’t sleep. Lovely poetry… Beryl
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/11/2024 8:24:00 PM
I would be a goner without my sleeping pills!
Date: 8/11/2024 3:28:00 PM
Inspiring, love your metaphor for the contest- good luck! <3
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/11/2024 8:24:00 PM
Thanks, Paige
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