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"...and every morning I awake the world looks strangely new...

including you"

- Poet

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Whose Daughter

I know the living room shifted
when you visited—
lamp there, easy chair there,

the half-scrolled—
    her scrib—
turning its face.
Why

Your soft hand in mine—
a broken latch—won’t… catch—
a backdoor
    left open
        for someone who never comes—
            him… maybe—

Your grief leaks through me,
    ghost…draft—chills
I can’t—


My pink blanket—
    was it here—
        was it—


your voice… somewhere—

I am the ho— home… was… I—
    you grew up in.

The lintels groan.
Loose.

The basement—bins—boxes—
    blue wedding al—
        satin ribbon—faint of wet cedar—

faded—

bleached walls—

dark… pond—
    seeping up through the floorboards

your felt-pen on the wall,
    small shoes on the stairs

the widow’s candle—winnowing—
    the garden gone to weeds—

fresh bread Saturday mornings—
    I smell it baking
        though I can’t—

I am not.
Not yet.

But something is slipping—
    through me
        past me
            hiding
                out of reach—
                    out of touch—


olly olly
    in—
        free


Come… find me.
    Get me.


Please.


Before the living rooms dissolve
    and forget you—
        my big girl—
            my—

my tears
    fade with them.
        warm… buttermilk—


You’re—


whose…
    daughter
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Johnson Avatar
June 9, 2026 at 12:09 AM
Hi Daniel. Thanks for sharing this poem. I lost a granddaughter at the age of 22. The poem reminds me of her. Her childhood visits; holding her hands when she was little; her calling me 'Grams'. Blessings my friend.
Legros Kelley Avatar
May 7, 2026 at 3:56 PM
Daniel, this haunting poem, and the image you coupled with it left an ache in my heart. My father-in-law began the sad journey into dementia, but, as his kidneys had already failed, and his dialysis was unable to continue because of vascular disease, his cognitive decline was cut short before his graduation to heaven. It hurt to see him failing. This poem makes me cry, thank you for penning it.
Crandall Avatar
April 14, 2026 at 9:16 PM
Is this about dementia?
Crandall Avatar
April 14, 2026 at 9:14 PM
I can feel profound sadness, longing and grief
Roper Avatar
April 14, 2026 at 2:53 PM
Daniel, enjoyed reading your poem. The verse reminds me of a person growing old is having problems with their recollection of the day and maybe focusing on bits and piece of the past. Thank you for visit on my poem today. Hugs for the comment.
Hind Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 10:14 PM
This is so haunting, it grasped for me!! Wow, Daniel.
Bayles Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 7:52 AM
Daniel, you did a great job of taking me into the grief of a woman, and into the world of someone who's trying to understand her. The door left open is such a great metaphor of both hope and despair, mostly despair. So haunting like her memories.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 7:06 AM
A raspy tone, one of grief, losing something, grasping at something, warm memories, … ghost…draft—chills…come find me’ haunting…warm buttermilk like something happy drenched in tears…
One Avatar
April 12, 2026 at 1:55 AM
You create a haunting, intimate sense of loss by blending memory and identity into a voice that feels like it’s slowly dissolving. trying to hold onto a daughter while slipping into confusion, language mirroring fading memory and emotional disintegration. Warm images are overshadowed by decay and absence, with the fear of being forgotten. By the end, the narration collapses into the question “whose daughter,” leaving a deeply emotive impression of love that persists even as the self disappears.
Dietrich Avatar
April 11, 2026 at 3:40 PM
This is hauntingly beautiful and so poignant, Daniel. Love the picture and quote you put with it too
Rodgers Avatar
April 11, 2026 at 5:41 PM
Dear Andrea, I appreciate your gracious words. I wanted to capture the mother’s declining health that dementia brings. I have had several people who had Alzheimer’s and/or dementia, some passed away and others still alive and have mentally reached the point if no return. I pray for a cure one day. Blessings, Andrea, Daniel
Buehler Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 3:50 PM
Dear Daniel, your sad, haunting poem delves into the world of one stricken with a degenerative brain disease, and does so with empathy and understanding. It was a pleasure to read this beautifully written poem. Best wishes.
Rodgers Avatar
April 11, 2026 at 2:51 PM
Dear Evelyn, thank you for seeing and understanding the poem my friend. It is a world where we have debilitating diseases and we pray for cures. Blessings, Dear Evelyn, Daniel
Edmonds  Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 2:09 PM
That’s so sad Daniel, a lonely soul looking for her home, leaves the reader wandering, is she a vision, or is she for real. Maybe a figment inside a confused mind. A most intriguing write, enjoyed… Beryl
Rodgers Avatar
April 11, 2026 at 2:48 PM
Dear Beryl, thank you my friend, she is a mother with dementia late stage sitting with her visiting daughter. Having lived through several family members with early onset and early death. Brain decline is devastating to watch with no cure insight. Sad and filled with grief for all family members. Blessings, Dear Beryl, Daniel
Anaya Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 9:07 AM
Cognitive decline, Daniel, you've captured its cruelness "a broken latch—won’t… catch—" and the childlike playful setting most difficult to watch. Who are you? They question. It's saints work to step up to the plate and take care of our own, a test of faith. This is one the masses should see. Btw, I always wondered if alcoholism enduces alzhiemers. April's blessings
Rodgers Avatar
April 11, 2026 at 2:43 PM
Dear Anaya, thank you my friend, being a drug and alcohol therapist as part of my overall counseling, substance can do quite a bit of long term damage to the brain. However cognitive decline has a number of attributes such as genetic, overall health, diet, lack of exercise, smoking, lack of mental stimulation etc… unfortunately my family members who were affected did not drink, smoke, were overall general healthiness. Maybe one day there will be a cure. Blessing Anaya, Daniel
Kendrick Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 8:08 AM
Well, I am not sure exactly what this one is about. It could be loss of memory, an old house falling apart visited by ghost of a family who once lived there. You left so many questions for the reader so a good work. Thank you for sharing it with us. Way to go. Sara K
Kendrick Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 5:39 PM
Okay, thank you for letting me know. My mother had what the doctor called organic brain disease which caused her metal decline or dementia. It was sad to see for sure. It was a long slow process for her. Sara K
Rodgers Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 8:52 AM
Dear Sara, I hope you had a blessed Easter! Thanks for your comments and I love hearing from you. The poem is my experience of watching a number of family members who declined due to dementia/Alzheimers. It has to be one of the greatest sadnesses for them and for us the family. Blessings, Daniel
Winter Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 1:24 AM
Dearest Daniel, humans create so many memories, good and bad. We try to forget the bad ones and cherish the good ones. How beautiful are the good memories. But how heartbreakingly sad it is when they start to fade especially because of a disease. With love and respect always, Anne
Rodgers Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 8:49 AM
Dearest Anne, as I age I see more and more family members losing or already lost the battle to these diseases. I once had a client in counseling who I know was never going to get better and was declining each month. She enjoyed coming in and the session gave her a sense of peace. Eventually she couldn’t come anymore due to her impairments. May your ending semester be filled with wisdom, peace and joy. Blessings, Daniel
Buhagiar Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 1:17 AM
So often our memories disappear in a sort of mist. The worst are those that deal with family.
Rodgers Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 8:44 AM
Hello Victor, unfortunately age is not kind to most of us especially when it comes to the brain. I have seen several family members who had severe dementia and/or Alzheimer’s. It is painful to watch and we who are watching are trying to be loving and acting like nothing is happening, yet fully accepting the person in each stage. Thank You! Blessing, Daniel
Onclaud Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 5:20 PM
a gritty, experiential approach to thoughts on real absence or illusion, prompting the audience to walk with you in your own world of unknowing...an elevated moment for me, daniel!
Rodgers Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 5:39 PM
Dear Nette, thank you my friend and I am appreciative of your visit. Blessings, Nette, Daniel
Cunningham Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 10:46 AM
I sense a loss in your emotional write Daniel, I hope it's a fictional write. You write with such emotion it's hard to tell. Brilliant writing. Tom
Rodgers Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 5:33 PM
Hello Tom, my grandmother, my wife’s mother, had Alzheimer’s that took their life, and now two of my cousins have the same thing. It is a sad slow creeping disease. I was very involved in caring for both my grandmother and especially my wife’s mom. It broke my heart but for their sake we were present in the most healthiest way walking beside them until the end. The big girl reference is what I call my oldest daughter from a baby and till now at 34. Thank you my friend! Blessings, Tom, Daniel
Goldsmith Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 9:43 AM
Your "Whose Daughter" is another wonderful write/story/quote/picture. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a great day writing away...............
Rodgers Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 5:27 PM
Dear Paula, welcome to my latest poetic story and thank you! Blessings, Daniel
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