Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

Who I Thought You Were

WHO I THOUGHT YOU WERE

Collaboration Poem Dave Wood and Jan Allison

You've gone and broken my heart in two 
a thousand death night, I can't let it go
Now we're simply known as me and you 
and together forever we will never know 

Crushed and bleeding is my aching heart 
this moonlit sky just makes me weak 
Packed your bags, tore my world apart 
wishing on stars 'cause I just can't sleep 

Something so good, gone terribly wrong 
it was in this very park where "we" began 
I thought our relationship was oh so strong 
now a lonely night's muse without my man 

You walked out on me, you really didn’t care 
hidden heart of stone a dreamer's saboteur 
I pull out your photograph and simply stare 
no longer dying for you.. 
but who I thought you were! 

4-12-14 
By: Dave Wood and Jan Allison 

*heartless guy dumps his girl one night in the same park where their relationship began.

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Andrea Dietrich April 14, 2014 at 6:13 PM just saw this over at Dave's page. SO cool what you two did together. Keep it UP!!! Jan Allison April 14, 2014 at 6:22 PM Thanks Andrea - its all down to Jared Pickett's contest that I've collaborated with three amazing poets, Jack , Darren and Dave. Sadly we can't enter this poem as in the rules I can only collaborate on 2 poems - these have already been entered, but we had a great time and I've learned a lot about myself. Hugs Jan x

Casarah Nance April 14, 2014 at 8:05 AM I really enjoyed reading this poem. You two did a great work of writing here. I have been through the same event and ya'll nailed the situation. Awesome. Jan Allison April 14, 2014 at 9:57 AM Thanks Casarah - it's not written from my own personal experience - the poem just evolved with Dave and I writing two lines each and then Dave wove his magic to create this fabulous poem. Hugs Jan x

Paul Callus April 13, 2014 at 11:16 AM Beautiful...but sad end to a promising romance; last 2 lines convinced me to give max high rating :) another fine collaboration Jan ... and Dave :) glad to see two friends of mine working in unision! // paul Jan Allison April 13, 2014 at 11:24 AM Hi Paul thanks for the lovely comments. I am having the time of my life collaborating with awesome poets on here am so flattered they have agreed or asked to work with me. hugs Jan xxxxx

Anne-Lise Andresen April 13, 2014 at 7:45 AM - A well written poem .... but, heartbreakingly sad .... You and Dave, collaboration well together - Have a nice Sunday :))) - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison April 13, 2014 at 9:02 AM Thanks Anne Lise was great working with another fabulous poet. Hugs Jan xx