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Whispers in the Wind

Written: February 03, 2025, for contest, Sponsored by: Oliver Mckeithan ~~~~~~~~~~~~ In breeze I smell your breath that rustle gleaming twigs of my forlorn wasteland of skimps you grasp In stars I spot your eyes that guard the transient beats of oxblood veins straight in the heart for you. In blooms I smell your scent toneless taste in the wild preserved in veiled domains of mind so still. In lakes your pictures wave along the autumn fronds of silver maple trees of mine by there.

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/10/2025 11:07:00 AM

SP, sounds like a tribute to someone worthy of affection of one kind or another. It's beautifully done. Take care and smiles!!

Paige Hind

Date: 2/7/2025 4:23:00 PM

Such beauty - and worthy of the win

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/6/2025 11:03:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your creative four Cinquain writes. Have a blessed day with your win as you write away..................

Silent One

Date: 2/4/2025 1:33:00 PM

I like how your poem uses rich sensory imagery and nature metaphors to convey a connection that transcends time and presence. The subtle longing, the stillness of the memories, and the way nature embodies the essence of this person all contribute to a tone of quiet yearning. It is intertwined with nature as they remember, feeling the presence of the person in the wind, stars, flowers, and lakes—a gentle, almost spiritual connection that remains ever-present despite physical absence.

Jay Narain

Date: 2/4/2025 10:30:00 AM

Great cinquains. Love the imagery in the heartfelt poem.

Sally Eslinger

Date: 2/4/2025 5:39:00 AM

Soto! I found this amazingly sensual! Not lying to tell you i felt actually a physical rush. Lately i love physical imagery, that is, “imagism” of senses along with sight… Deep, expounding poem of a great love! Hearing cheers

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/4/2025 2:08:00 AM

What a great effort to produce such brilliant cinquains. Best for a win.

Ink Empress

Date: 2/4/2025 12:06:00 AM

Ah dr sotto, what can i say, your string of cinquains are just beyond impeccable and so well woven in such a heartfelt manner! I love the way youv expressed such deep and profound love in such a seamless manner, i especially love the lines “ In stars I spot your eyes that guard the transient beats of oxblood veins straight in the heart for you.” and the last cinquain is stunning too and soulfully moving! Im sure this will be a top winner! Best wishes always! Sending you light

Miranda Hawley

Date: 2/3/2025 9:07:00 PM

Well, I think this might get a win in the contest that is going. Good luck.

Valsa George

Date: 2/3/2025 8:07:00 PM

I never knew that even cinquains can be made so profound and poetic with such chosen words and images. I don't know what to comment, but wish to reiterate that your poetic prowess is simply awesome. "In stars I spot your eyes" In blooms I smell your scent".... Wow, so romantic! All the best dear friend.