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Wistful, Write, Weep, Whisper Words Poetry Contest.

Sponsored by: Constance La France

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The balmy breeze wafted over the prairie, Where yellow cowslips huddled in patches. And here and there I heard a whisper echoing: Love her, love her, love her. But she seemed deaf and preferred the wounded wind. How easy it was to forget and never recapture All my wistful whisper, I would always love you. Those sweet nothings of past affections. We no longer trudged the path made up for two. Forgotten were those bygone days When we believed that thistledown tufts Were really friendly fairies in disguise. Thus she escaped my clutches And like a unicorn disappearing in an eclipse, I headed for a dull and empty living Blaming her uselessly for I still loved her. Weren't we the product of our time? We slammed the doors of love in our own faces, Building woeful walls around us Painting it with a tinge of misunderstanding, When we could lead such a colorful life, Giving our hearts a chance, Laughing at ourselves..... And sending a whisper, a woeful whisper to the moon above. Placed First

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Date: 4/23/2024 4:41:00 AM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful poem, I love the image too, Constance
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Date: 4/13/2024 8:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful/wonderful "Whisper" write. What a great picture/ending... Have a wonderful weekend.............
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Date: 4/12/2024 8:42:00 PM
Much happiness could have been gained had you been a little more careful. Now there is no point in 'crying over spilled milk.' This is the fate of every human being. Prudence with timely action saves lives. Enjoyed greatly this poem of wistfulness and longing. Congratulations on your first place win, dear Victor.
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Date: 4/11/2024 4:49:00 PM
Love the line," leading a colorful life, Giving hearts a chance". Well done my friend
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Date: 4/11/2024 10:06:00 AM
This is great word weaving, expressed so well as always..
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Date: 4/11/2024 5:22:00 AM
Wow you wisk me away to your passionate land of longing and lovely angst! What a wonderful write Victor!
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Date: 4/11/2024 4:07:00 AM
WOW! This is truly a great write, Victor. It's a winner in my book any day of the week. Well done and best wishes in the contest!
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Date: 4/11/2024 2:50:00 AM
Oh Victor this is a winner in so many ways. I will fav it, I love it when you write like this. Its special, :)
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Date: 4/10/2024 11:34:00 PM
Forgotten were those bygone days. appearing deaf, she chose to listen to the wounded wind instead of the whispers of steadfast love and sweet nothings of past affections. It's easy to forget and lose touch with the memories of love that once existed. And now, no longer trudging the path made for two, those bygone days are merely a distant memory. A wonderful poem capturing the essence of loves bitter sweet taste. Good luck in the contest dear Victor...Hugs
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Date: 4/10/2024 10:13:00 PM
Wow!!! This is wonderful...Lovely imagery throughout and I always love your narrating style.... This is simply beautiful and it is a winner for me and of course my fav...
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Date: 4/10/2024 9:33:00 PM
This stirring, evocative tale of love, missed opportunity and regret, is narrated with profoundly beautiful, haunting imagery. This is a fave for me. :)
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Date: 4/10/2024 6:55:00 PM
i love the talking moon who says love her, this is quite inspiring and true , the images are brilliant and sweet, enjoyed yann
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Date: 4/10/2024 5:44:00 PM
what a powerful write this is, Victor! This is a touching and melancholic poem of the heart and heartbreak. Sometimes we close walls and miss opportunities for love and then live with regret in slamming those doors. I appreciate the advice: give our hearts a chance...send a woeful whisper to the moon above. Exquisite, Victor, and a sure contest winner! Am faving, have a blessed evening, Sara
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Date: 4/10/2024 3:50:00 PM
Victor, this is a nice one to consider in my mind. Love poem, very touching, with ups and downs or maybe a lost love that never can be recovered. How to interpretate that? Something in this poem touches my heart. Thank you my dear friend to write poems that make us thinking. Blessings
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Date: 4/10/2024 2:01:00 PM
A forlorn dialogue of heartbreak--splendidly conveyed, Victor. --a woeful whisper to the moon above--yes, indeed!
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Date: 4/10/2024 11:58:00 AM
This is stellar work, Victor. What a gorgeous take on whispers!!
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Date: 4/10/2024 9:29:00 AM
"Weren't we the product of our time? We slammed the doors of love in our own faces, Building woeful walls around us Painting it with a tinge of misunderstanding," Too many things are said, in the heat of the moment, that had one more thought, silence would have been the preferred echo -- love like the thistle dry...love's horizons both dark and bright. Lovely write, Victor. Lots to think about and be inspired. blessings my friend.
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Date: 4/10/2024 8:48:00 AM
Hello Victor, your verses evoke a melancholic beauty of lost love and regret. I liked the imagery of the prairie and the whispered echoes of love create a haunting atmosphere. Your words reflect the bittersweet realization of missed opportunities and the pain of unrequited affection. May your heart find peace in the whispers of the moon above, and may you find peace in embracing the beauty of love's journey, despite its trials and tribulations. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 4/10/2024 8:15:00 AM
Oh, how achingly beauteous and tender, Victor. So very heartfelt. If the contest hasn't been judged yet, my very best wishes for the contest. Bounty of blessings to you. ~
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Date: 4/10/2024 7:07:00 AM
Impressive writing, Victor. Unfortunately, a potential love story was derailed by an oversight. At times, our hopes don't align with reality.
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Date: 4/10/2024 6:56:00 AM
Quite an emotional write Victor, best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 4/10/2024 5:26:00 AM
When we believed that thistledown tufts Were really friendly fairies in disguise… And like a unicorn disappearing in an eclipse…Your head in the clouds, poetically so! Love it!
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Date: 4/10/2024 3:42:00 AM
Victor, a sad emotive poem, well penned. -Hugs
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Date: 4/10/2024 3:09:00 AM
Ahhh!! So sad that love could have happened, but it was lost to a misunderstanding. Thanks for sharing this contest entry with us. Reads like a good contender to me . Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 4/10/2024 3:04:00 AM
What a powerful write this is dear victor, your slight alliterations to the way you’ve painted imagery and clevrr diction used throughout really stood out for me. And i couldn help but agree as you wrote “ We slammed the doors of love in our own faces, Building woeful walls around us” powerful! So very profound! Its sad that sometimes we shut light out on our own, while we deserve it! Best wishes for the contest
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