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She had a face like a fish fryer's basket, All stressed and creased and lined His like a bag of old spanners Abused, misused, misaligned. She jumped his place in the bar queue One Boozy Saturday Night Instead of taking the Hump He loved her at first sight. Two aging hippies Who’d never ever bricked it And when they met each other Felt they’d really clicked it They consummated their relationship In the yard outside the bar And once or twice more On the back seat of his car. They came down to earth together Laughing at life’s little joke Then he pulled out his baccy pouch And rolled them both a toke. Two ageing hippies who Quickly grabbed the chance To waltz their way together Through life’s oncertain dance They became a couple Saw each other more and more And when they looked at each other It was only beauty that each saw, With her face like a fish fryer’s basket All stressed and creased and lined, His like a bag of old spanners Abused, misused, misaligned

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Date: 4/5/2023 12:34:00 PM
Haha Terry, read this and thought it was funny fiction then read the comments to see the descriptions at least were true! I hate to say it but fish fryers basket might be in my head now as a description (I won't utter it though!) Great poem
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Terry Ireland
Date: 4/5/2023 12:42:00 PM
Thanks Dilly. Fish Fryers Basket just leapt into my mind for some reason and away we went
Date: 3/17/2023 7:36:00 AM
This is great Terry, more blunt and honest than your typical love poem but certainly no less love. A hippy romance for the books! Great descriptions and story
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Terry Ireland
Date: 3/17/2023 10:27:00 AM
Thanks Hat. I just couldn’t get over the way they looked at each other that day. Just had to write and let my imagination roam in a pleasant but truthful way.
Date: 1/23/2023 2:43:00 PM
Did l hear you say that beauty is in the eye of the beholder? Yup thank goodness true love looks beyond what it sees and relies on what it feels. Great poem Terry.
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Terry Ireland
Date: 1/24/2023 4:31:00 AM
Thanks Wen. Their love just shone out the day I saw them that day. Certainly influenced me.
Date: 1/23/2023 1:22:00 PM
Love the descriptions of their faces, great similes. And I'm so happy they found each other. Elizabeth
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Terry Ireland
Date: 1/23/2023 1:26:00 PM
Thanks Elizabeth. As I said to ilene, this was a couple I saw on the street and the poem was born.
Date: 1/23/2023 12:45:00 PM
there's so much to love about this poem, terry, and i love all of it!
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Terry Ireland
Date: 1/23/2023 1:24:00 PM
I saw this couple of a certain age walking down the street holding hands and looking at each other with such love, and the poem was born. Glad you like It ilene

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