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Whimsicality

She had a face like a fish fryer's basket,
All stressed  and creased and lined 
His like  a bag of old spanners
Abused, misused, misaligned. 
She jumped his place in the bar queue
One  Boozy Saturday Night
Instead of taking the Hump 
He loved her at first sight.

Two aging hippies
Who’d never ever bricked it
And when they met each other 
Felt they’d really clicked it
They consummated their relationship 
In the yard outside  the bar
And once or twice more
On the back seat of his  car.

They came down to earth together
Laughing at life’s little joke 
Then he pulled out his baccy pouch 
And rolled them both a toke.
Two ageing hippies who
Quickly grabbed the chance
To waltz their way together
Through life’s oncertain dance

They became a couple
Saw each other more and more
And when they looked at each other 
It was only beauty that each saw,
With her face like a fish fryer’s basket 
All stressed and creased and lined, 
His like a bag of old spanners
Abused, misused, misaligned

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Date: 3/17/2023 7:36:00 AM
This is great Terry, more blunt and honest than your typical love poem but certainly no less love. A hippy romance for the books! Great descriptions and story
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Terry Ireland
Date: 3/17/2023 10:27:00 AM
Thanks Hat. I just couldn’t get over the way they looked at each other that day. Just had to write and let my imagination roam in a pleasant but truthful way.
Date: 1/23/2023 2:43:00 PM
Did l hear you say that beauty is in the eye of the beholder? Yup thank goodness true love looks beyond what it sees and relies on what it feels. Great poem Terry.
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Terry Ireland
Date: 1/24/2023 4:31:00 AM
Thanks Wen. Their love just shone out the day I saw them that day. Certainly influenced me.
Date: 1/23/2023 1:22:00 PM
Love the descriptions of their faces, great similes. And I'm so happy they found each other. Elizabeth
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Terry Ireland
Date: 1/23/2023 1:26:00 PM
Thanks Elizabeth. As I said to ilene, this was a couple I saw on the street and the poem was born.
Date: 1/23/2023 12:45:00 PM
there's so much to love about this poem, terry, and i love all of it!
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Terry Ireland
Date: 1/23/2023 1:24:00 PM
I saw this couple of a certain age walking down the street holding hands and looking at each other with such love, and the poem was born. Glad you like It ilene

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