While You Lay Breathing Quietly

Each night, while you lay breathing quietly,
I wander like a wraith through empty rooms
A phantom in both life and memory,
the ghost a long abandoned oath exhumes

I hover like a spirit over you
each night, while you lay breathing quietly,
so desperate to believe what isn't true,
I make the best of ambiguity

This specter in the mirror isn't me
These lines belong on someone elses face
Each night, while you lay breathing quietly,
it's loneliness that holds me in your place

My worth so long defined by your extremes;
extolled by love, or birched by perfidy,
I find it's just the first that haunts my dreams
each night, while you lay breathing quietly
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Ashley Avatar
December 22, 2022 at 6:54 PM
Dear Lycia, the dark beauty of your imagery is carried through your verses on a lovely lilting rhythm. An exquisite quatern where the repeated line fits effortlessly and precisely into each stanza. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Harding Avatar
December 23, 2022 at 5:31 AM
Thank you, Susan!
Watt Avatar
December 15, 2022 at 1:24 PM
Deep and dark. I like it! Congrats for your podium placement in the contest ~ John
Harding Avatar
December 19, 2022 at 3:51 AM
Thank you, John!
Dietrich Avatar
December 15, 2022 at 8:30 AM
this is so deep and lovely. Congrats for a top win
Harding Avatar
December 19, 2022 at 3:51 AM
Thank you, Dre!
Toney Avatar
December 14, 2022 at 11:08 AM
Lycia, you expertly weave your haunting simile/metaphor throughout each stanza, confirming our suspicions with "My worth so long defined by your extremes ~ extolled by love, or birched by perfidy, I find it's just the first that haunts my dreams ..." Oh my! Brilliant! And I love the iambic pentameter. Congratulations on your second-place podium finish on Mile 22 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 23 has already started.
Harding Avatar
December 19, 2022 at 3:53 AM
Thank you, Mark! I'm ready to run!
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