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Gina's New Voices Contest ~ January, 30, 2025

Moonlight will reign when twilight fades Skies darken and starlight cascades The world is poised, ready for sleep While my heart aches, and my eyes weep Tides continue to ebb and flow Grief chills my life like Winter snow Tears borne on waves into the deep While my heart aches, and my eyes weep Nights are long as I lie abed Memories of us fill my head Time moves slowly, seeming to creep While my heart aches, and my eyes weep In restlessness, I toss and turn For what I have lost, I still yearn From love we've sown, I cannot reap While my heart aches, and my eyes weep Muted in lament are my sighs So no one hears my mournful cries I pray to God, "My soul to keep" While my heart aches, and my eyes weep As dawn appears in morning light I'm thankful for passage of night Across my room, sunlight will sweep While my heart aches, and my eyes weep

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Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/24/2025 6:15:00 AM

Lin, CONGRATS on your win with this truly excellent kyrielle~~so descriptive and expressive! Janice

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 2/22/2025 10:22:00 AM

Awesome verse, vision, vista... completely amazed. Love it. Congrats and God bless you. love, Gina

Lin Lane
Date: 2/22/2025 10:39:00 AM

Thank you very much for finding a place on your winning list for my Kyrielle, Gina.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/5/2025 10:51:00 AM

Lin, this reflects the epitome of sadness and mourning. It's compelling and makes me want to jump into the page and offer some sympathy and company. I have been lucky to have a faithful companion for the past decades, but I can imagine what it could be like for either of us if one were to go. Hope you are well!!

Lin Lane
Date: 2/22/2025 10:39:00 AM

I am wayyy past due on responding to your wonderful comments, Duke. Your sympathetic heart is beating, and I hear it clearly. Thank you, kind friend. I'm well and hope the same for you.

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 1/30/2025 9:36:00 PM

Nights like waves, some ups some downs. Have a nice weekend dear lovely Lin!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/31/2025 9:42:00 AM

Thank you for your compliments, AA. I hope to have a fine weekend and wish the same for you. ;-)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 1/30/2025 8:41:00 PM

Lin, Yes, a little darkness in palatte shades is necessary in life, at least it's so for me. Without pains of heartache and strife, what use is ecstasy? -Richard

Lin Lane
Date: 1/31/2025 9:41:00 AM

Hi Richard and thank you so very much for your thoughts. We truly appreciate life more after we've felt the pain of heartache.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/30/2025 12:52:00 PM

A break up can be devastating, there is no joy and your mind tumbles down into a bleak abyss. I noticed your comment to Kim, so far I've fought in wars, fell on a railroad track and survived, slayed dragons and gone back in time. All this and still managing being mayor in a wild West Town lol. If its real I'd say so. Tom

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/30/2025 6:55:00 PM

LOL, Tom!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/30/2025 1:01:00 PM

Point taken and it is wise advice. Having lived through the reality of some experiences lends layers of truth to fiction. Thank you for such sage comments, Mayor Tom.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/30/2025 10:33:00 AM

Grief so personal to the mourner, whilst the world spins. Heartfelt write, dear Lin. Hugs ~ Kim

Lin Lane
Date: 1/30/2025 11:08:00 AM

Thanks very much, Kim. Maybe I should note this is fiction, as Gina has mentioned in a recent blog.