While I Was Sleeping

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Asleep in reverie, enrapt in lucid dreams Myriads of stars chase silver moonbeams You render kisses on the lids of my eyes I am being loved by you. In sleep, I sigh. Drifting with you all through the night Your arms around me, we've taken flight In amorous slumber, your breath at my ear, Voice barely a whisper, "I love you," I hear. Comes the morrow, I awaken to the day Lost is my dream, where I longed to stay Tonight when the sky turns midnight blue I'll be drifting in dreams, lost in loving you. May 1st, 2016

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James Inman

Date: 8/12/2016 12:35:00 PM

Hi Lin, hope you're well. This is a beautiful poem. It reminds me of moments when you are gently awakened by soft kisses and gentle touches and enjoy a sensual experience when you're half asleep, half dream, half reality.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/12/2016 2:06:00 PM

Hi James. I'm just fine and thank you for asking. This was one of my favorites and your description is exactly the way I feel about it. I'm such a romantic. Thank you for being so kind.

Phil Capitano

Date: 5/2/2016 9:09:00 AM

FANtastic !!! Dreams can reveal so much about our soul that we cannot comprehend with the waking mind. This is a beautiful poem.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/3/2016 12:04:00 AM

I thank you very much, Phil. I'm happy to know you like it so well.

Charlie Smith

Date: 5/1/2016 8:20:00 PM

Lovely Lin...

Lin Lane
Date: 5/2/2016 7:00:00 AM

Thanks bunches, Charlie.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 5/1/2016 3:22:00 PM

Hi Lin, another excellent write your heart does paint onto the canvas with its soft words of Love. Your dreams do sing into the readers heart Lin. What memories do flow in the Soul that revive themselves within our dreams. A golden write from a golden pen. This is beauty in a gentle twilight, a song of yesteryear come back to play. Let your heart ever sing Lin. A seven and a fave for this little gem. Hugs....Mike. XX

Lin Lane
Date: 5/2/2016 6:59:00 AM

You always leave the most endearing remarks. Thank you very much, Mike. It took a long time before I could even listen to music again. He wrote songs for me.