While

While bouquets flaunted their fullest bloom:
roses and lilies I assume,
I only saw gray, black, and white,
consumed in disbelief. 

While friends and kin folks gathered around,
with hugs and gentle words profound,
my heart was cast into the night,
dull conversations brief.

While we beheld his bodily form,
no longer was his presence warm.
Decay had set like deadly blight,
the demise of a leaf.

While moments hold the weight of years,
collections of ten thousand tears,
I dream we'll meet, beaming with light,
redeemed from life's fierce thief.

7-14-2023
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Brul Avatar
August 31, 2023 at 2:49 AM
Oh, I love the ten thousand tears! Mesmerizing piece, I'd love to read again and again.
One Avatar
August 28, 2023 at 2:02 AM
oh wow, the imagery in this is so vivid, what an amazing poem.. definitely a fave for me... love so many lines in this poem and that ending is just brilliant... amazing poetry.
Wolf Avatar
August 27, 2023 at 7:48 PM
'life's fierce thief' -- excellent!! Love it. Only what's there to steal? ....
Bowring Avatar
August 20, 2023 at 11:13 AM
This is such a beautiful poem Juliet. Very touching. So well written. Enjoyed reading it.Thank you for sharing.
Ligon Avatar
August 25, 2023 at 7:10 PM
Thanks, Christina.
Situation Avatar
August 19, 2023 at 1:42 PM
All fit except the last word. It's a beautiful piece of art. I have to fav it but i wish you'd change that last word.
Ligon Avatar
August 19, 2023 at 5:15 PM
Thanks for faving, even though you don't like that last word. I'm content with how it is, but was curious if you had any suggestions.
One Avatar
August 16, 2023 at 9:08 AM
I'm a gardener and a writer also... there is no pain like this.. hope all is well..
Ligon Avatar
August 18, 2023 at 6:54 PM
Yes, I remember you're a fellow gardener. It's so amazing and rewarding to watch things grow. Thanks for stopping by even with your busy life. It's been crazy busy for me as well. Writing is seldom incorporated into the schedule.
Faulkner Avatar
August 2, 2023 at 7:54 PM
So evocative of the grief of losing a loved one, I am glad to see a new poem from you~
Ligon Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 4:00 PM
Thanks for your support. I'm more of a gardener than a writer, so I haven't been here much these days. Always great to hear from you.
Rolland Avatar
July 14, 2023 at 3:45 PM
wonderful poem, deep moment that we can share, thanks yann
Ligon Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 4:02 PM
Thanks
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