When With Closed Eyes In Autumn's Eves of Gold

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When With Closed Eyes In Autumn's Eves Of Gold HARK, when with closed eyes in autumn's eves of gold, A wink ere throws saffron sparks straight together, When August incandesce ransomed stretched oft hold, Petals smoothly turned like some noiseless feather, The moment spent on pleats of these gown pauses, To combine some proposed begged renown causes, Here spread all sad chapters that had bled outward, Plus hold true some moving verse that drew inward. HAIL, a tale oft seasons means a chance vision, Said subjects that are echoed, mean beauty told, Their spun design e'er straightforward decision, Explaining that essence, in short, measured fold, Such use like a star show, travail its due course, That act as a common cause purposed, a force, My eyes meant showing that autumn still is bold, And that chief eve approaches picturesque gold. 2020 March 05 *Honorable Mention* STRAND CHOICE A,any form,any theme ~~Brian Strand Rhyme Scheme; ababccdd, ababccdd. Howmanysyllables; 16 lines x 11 syllables per = 176 syllables total

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/5/2020 7:46:00 PM

Your imagery is gorgeous and amazing.

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/5/2020 8:49:00 PM

Thanks, Caren, my thoughtful sharing friend -- Aloha!~@wk