Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

When the Sun Set

There you're alone
Gazing blue waters
In emerald splendor
Embedded within
A romantic landscape.

Visions of sundown
Peeking through blossoms
Bow down to greet you
And caress in love
Hints of my message.

You look elsewhere
At script on horizon
Setting sun engraves
Upon twilight tender
In vermillion intents,
As it dips beneath
Dreams of hushed river;

And scatters its rays
In marigold spray
On magenta fabric
Embroidered purple.

Too late my love
To turn and face me--

I’m no longer there,

When the sun set
So did your shadow.

February 22, 2020
Placed 3rd: Strand #690 contest by Brian Strand

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Joseph May November 8, 2023 at 3:57 PM "Visions of sundown Peeking through blossoms" Very nicely penned Vijay, I enjoyed the read

Andrea Dietrich February 5, 2021 at 2:52 PM rereading this one. It's SO good and so visual.

Angela Crabtree October 27, 2020 at 4:42 PM A marvelous write, Vijay. The ending got me. :)

M. L. Kiser March 1, 2020 at 6:32 PM I love this piece, especially, "And scatters its rays In marigold spray On magenta fabric Embroidered purple." wonderful! Vijay Pandit March 2, 2020 at 7:40 AM Much appreciate--many thanks, MLK.

Jan Allison March 1, 2020 at 8:35 AM such marvellous imagery Vijay:-) hugs Jan xx Vijay Pandit March 2, 2020 at 7:40 AM Much appreciate the visit and kind remarks--many thanks, Jan.

Brandy Nicole February 25, 2020 at 10:09 PM Your thoughts hold me, until the very end. Love is in every moment, the sweet embrace of the sun, the wind moving upon the beauty of the earth. I feel lost in emotion, with this thought "When the sun set, so did your shadow" Sounds like it is over. Those moments shared. You always know how to touch my heart with your words. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit February 27, 2020 at 11:33 AM Much appreciate Brandy--enjoyed reading your comments. You are right to focus on that ending---yes it's over. Many thanks.

Connie Marcum Wong February 24, 2020 at 11:29 AM Your colorful imagery and sentiments mesh beautifully in this poem Vijay. Gorgeous! xxoo Vijay Pandit February 24, 2020 at 11:48 AM Thank you Connie--much appreciate, as always.

Jennifer Proxenos February 24, 2020 at 11:16 AM How could this person walk away from a beautiful sunset filled with love, what an absolute loser - her lose their gain! Penned awesomely - a fav. Vijay! Blessings, Jennifer. Vijay Pandit February 24, 2020 at 11:47 AM Much appreciate the kind remarks, Jennifer--many thanks.

Carolyn Devonshire February 23, 2020 at 1:47 PM Your description of the sunrise is amazing, Vijay. Those last two lines evoke compassion for the person who lost a loved one. Excellent writing, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn Vijay Pandit February 24, 2020 at 11:46 AM Thank you Carolyn--much appreciate your kind remarks.

Heidi Sands February 23, 2020 at 11:33 AM Beautiful poem, fully of feelings and beauty, Vijay and such a powerful ending. I think I have a certain interpretation of it. Masterfully written :) Vijay Pandit February 24, 2020 at 11:45 AM Appreciate the kind feedback Heidi--many thanks.

Janice Canerdy February 23, 2020 at 7:44 AM So beautiful--and so sad at the end, Vijay! Janice Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:05 AM Thank you Janice--much appreciate.

Paul Callus February 23, 2020 at 3:11 AM Beautiful...especially the colourful imagery and the final 5 lines, Vijay. Regards // paul Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:06 AM So glad you liked the poem Paul--much appreciate, as always--many thanks. Regards.

Jenish Somadas February 23, 2020 at 12:29 AM Like a wonderful painter, you used all the colours of your heart to paint the love and ended with a dark shade.. Subtle emotions.. Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:07 AM That is so very kind, Jenish. Much appreciate, as always--many thanks.

Hello There February 22, 2020 at 9:37 PM This one had me feeling so high and then so low. I've had to think about it... I'm thinking you would not want to be (in) love's shadow, because then you would be blinded from the sun yourself. Two in love should share its warmth side by side, and revel in the beauty of its setting, and the emerging moon and stars. Therefore, this must be about one's own shadow? Please say yes or my heart will break. Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:13 AM First let me say.. how much I appreciate you rooting for love. And I fully agree two in love should be enjoying the warmth of their surroundings. I don't want to break your heart so I won't say any more about the ending of this theme. Always a joy my friend to read your comments ..looking forward to reading your poetry soon. Many thanks, HT.

William Kelii Kekaula February 22, 2020 at 8:48 PM Beautiful, Vijay, expressively artful imagery that had entertained my eyes, much enjoyed, indeed -- Aloha!~@wk Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:05 AM So very kind of you William--much appreciate your visit and comments. many many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich February 22, 2020 at 6:52 PM wow, GREAT ending on this visually stunning poetry, Vijay. I really enjoyed this one. Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:04 AM Great honor--coming from you Andrea. Much appreciate, as always--many thanks.

Arturo Michael February 22, 2020 at 5:37 PM Gone...in the setting sun...I like the change and the feeling that is in the write... Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:03 AM I appreciate that---many thanks, Arturo for your thoughtful comments.

Charlie Smith February 22, 2020 at 3:26 PM Well done Vijay, very romantic... Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:02 AM Thank you Charlie--much appreciate. My best wishes to you for good health and recovery.

Alexis Y. February 22, 2020 at 11:11 AM WoW! Vijay You’ve penned such a heartfelt, romantic and sad write. The imagery just amazing. It was a pleasure to read you today. Have a wonderful weekend my friend:-) Alexis Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 8:00 AM Happy to read your cheerful comments my friend--much appreciate, as always, Alexis--many many thanks.

Besma Riabi Dziri February 22, 2020 at 10:24 AM Not alone, when we are in the presence of a bowing sun and his majesty, love!.. the shades of stunning colours.. the magic of unfathomable feelings.. the enchantment of a sweet dream.. It's dark when the charm is over, and no trace of his majesty! Wow, what an impressive image! What a powerful rendition! You amaze with your artistry, dear Vijay! So delighted by your great work! A poetry honoured to fave.. My deepest regards and blessings to you. Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 7:59 AM I am always delighted to read your comments, Besma. Much appreciate the kind remarks--many many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Regards.

Tom Cunningham February 22, 2020 at 10:18 AM Love the image you've painted with your words Vijay, splashes of colour throughout. Tom Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 7:56 AM Happy to read your kind remarks, Tom--much appreciate, as always--many thanks.

Sandra Adams February 22, 2020 at 8:28 AM wow… powerful write, poignant yet beautifully penned... the ending delivers the punch that can be felt Vijay! Excellent write my friend! hugs Vijay Pandit February 23, 2020 at 7:55 AM Thank you my friend for supportive comments--value your feedback, as always. Much appreciate, Sandy.