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When the Sun Set

There you're alone Gazing blue waters In emerald splendor Embedded within A romantic landscape. Visions of sundown Peeking through blossoms Bow down to greet you And caress in love Hints of my message. You look elsewhere At script on horizon Setting sun engraves Upon twilight tender In vermillion intents, As it dips beneath Dreams of hushed river; And scatters its rays In marigold spray On magenta fabric Embroidered purple. Too late my love To turn and face me-- I’m no longer there, When the sun set So did your shadow. February 22, 2020 Placed 3rd: Strand #690 contest by Brian Strand

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Date: 11/8/2023 3:57:00 PM
"Visions of sundown Peeking through blossoms" Very nicely penned Vijay, I enjoyed the read
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Date: 2/5/2021 2:52:00 PM
rereading this one. It's SO good and so visual.
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Date: 10/27/2020 4:42:00 PM
A marvelous write, Vijay. The ending got me. :)
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Date: 3/1/2020 6:32:00 PM
I love this piece, especially, "And scatters its rays In marigold spray On magenta fabric Embroidered purple." wonderful!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2020 7:40:00 AM
Much appreciate--many thanks, MLK.
Date: 3/1/2020 8:35:00 AM
such marvellous imagery Vijay:-) hugs Jan xx
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2020 7:40:00 AM
Much appreciate the visit and kind remarks--many thanks, Jan.
Date: 2/25/2020 10:09:00 PM
Your thoughts hold me, until the very end. Love is in every moment, the sweet embrace of the sun, the wind moving upon the beauty of the earth. I feel lost in emotion, with this thought "When the sun set, so did your shadow" Sounds like it is over. Those moments shared. You always know how to touch my heart with your words. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/27/2020 11:33:00 AM
Much appreciate Brandy--enjoyed reading your comments. You are right to focus on that ending---yes it's over. Many thanks.
Date: 2/24/2020 11:29:00 AM
Your colorful imagery and sentiments mesh beautifully in this poem Vijay. Gorgeous! xxoo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2020 11:48:00 AM
Thank you Connie--much appreciate, as always.
Date: 2/24/2020 11:16:00 AM
How could this person walk away from a beautiful sunset filled with love, what an absolute loser - her lose their gain! Penned awesomely - a fav. Vijay! Blessings, Jennifer.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2020 11:47:00 AM
Much appreciate the kind remarks, Jennifer--many thanks.
Date: 2/23/2020 1:47:00 PM
Your description of the sunrise is amazing, Vijay. Those last two lines evoke compassion for the person who lost a loved one. Excellent writing, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2020 11:46:00 AM
Thank you Carolyn--much appreciate your kind remarks.
Date: 2/23/2020 11:33:00 AM
Beautiful poem, fully of feelings and beauty, Vijay and such a powerful ending. I think I have a certain interpretation of it. Masterfully written :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2020 11:45:00 AM
Appreciate the kind feedback Heidi--many thanks.
Date: 2/23/2020 7:44:00 AM
So beautiful--and so sad at the end, Vijay! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:05:00 AM
Thank you Janice--much appreciate.
Date: 2/23/2020 3:11:00 AM
Beautiful...especially the colourful imagery and the final 5 lines, Vijay. Regards // paul
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:06:00 AM
So glad you liked the poem Paul--much appreciate, as always--many thanks. Regards.
Date: 2/23/2020 12:29:00 AM
Like a wonderful painter, you used all the colours of your heart to paint the love and ended with a dark shade.. Subtle emotions..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:07:00 AM
That is so very kind, Jenish. Much appreciate, as always--many thanks.
Date: 2/22/2020 9:37:00 PM
This one had me feeling so high and then so low. I've had to think about it... I'm thinking you would not want to be (in) love's shadow, because then you would be blinded from the sun yourself. Two in love should share its warmth side by side, and revel in the beauty of its setting, and the emerging moon and stars. Therefore, this must be about one's own shadow? Please say yes or my heart will break.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:13:00 AM
First let me say.. how much I appreciate you rooting for love. And I fully agree two in love should be enjoying the warmth of their surroundings. I don't want to break your heart so I won't say any more about the ending of this theme. Always a joy my friend to read your comments ..looking forward to reading your poetry soon. Many thanks, HT.
Date: 2/22/2020 8:48:00 PM
Beautiful, Vijay, expressively artful imagery that had entertained my eyes, much enjoyed, indeed -- Aloha!~@wk
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:05:00 AM
So very kind of you William--much appreciate your visit and comments. many many thanks.
Date: 2/22/2020 6:52:00 PM
wow, GREAT ending on this visually stunning poetry, Vijay. I really enjoyed this one.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:04:00 AM
Great honor--coming from you Andrea. Much appreciate, as always--many thanks.
Date: 2/22/2020 5:37:00 PM
Gone...in the setting sun...I like the change and the feeling that is in the write...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:03:00 AM
I appreciate that---many thanks, Arturo for your thoughtful comments.
Date: 2/22/2020 3:26:00 PM
Well done Vijay, very romantic...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:02:00 AM
Thank you Charlie--much appreciate. My best wishes to you for good health and recovery.
Date: 2/22/2020 11:11:00 AM
WoW! Vijay You’ve penned such a heartfelt, romantic and sad write. The imagery just amazing. It was a pleasure to read you today. Have a wonderful weekend my friend:-) Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 8:00:00 AM
Happy to read your cheerful comments my friend--much appreciate, as always, Alexis--many many thanks.
Date: 2/22/2020 10:24:00 AM
Not alone, when we are in the presence of a bowing sun and his majesty, love!.. the shades of stunning colours.. the magic of unfathomable feelings.. the enchantment of a sweet dream.. It's dark when the charm is over, and no trace of his majesty! Wow, what an impressive image! What a powerful rendition! You amaze with your artistry, dear Vijay! So delighted by your great work! A poetry honoured to fave.. My deepest regards and blessings to you.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 7:59:00 AM
I am always delighted to read your comments, Besma. Much appreciate the kind remarks--many many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Regards.
Date: 2/22/2020 10:18:00 AM
Love the image you've painted with your words Vijay, splashes of colour throughout. Tom
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 7:56:00 AM
Happy to read your kind remarks, Tom--much appreciate, as always--many thanks.
Date: 2/22/2020 8:28:00 AM
wow… powerful write, poignant yet beautifully penned... the ending delivers the punch that can be felt Vijay! Excellent write my friend! hugs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2020 7:55:00 AM
Thank you my friend for supportive comments--value your feedback, as always. Much appreciate, Sandy.

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