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I walked home alone in the dampening mist as the pastel colored sky blanketed the sun His rays sank into the sea for their daily tryst Resting among the waves, his work was done And now the moon will rise in splendid glory bringing lovers together in her lustrous light while the mist hides the tears of my sad story My heart is broken and my spirit is contrite My cottage hearth will hold no warming fire It's to darkness that I'll open my creaking door No smiling face or welcome words will transpire Twilight's become the time of day I most abhor She would run and greet me when I neared home But no longer do her laughing eyes meet mine Her eyes now shine where she chose to roam Bitter on my tongue is the taste of finest wine Pity is not an emotion in which I choose to wallow One day when the sun no longer drowns in the sea perhaps then my wine will be pleasant to swallow and memories of lost love will no longer torture me

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Date: 1/11/2018 6:26:00 PM
So deeply romantic and melancholy ... like a smile with a tear, my favorite combination, though it's a hard line to walk with words. You have done so sublimely, and I have to fav this one. Wonderful, Dear Friend! :-) <3
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Date: 1/11/2018 6:32:00 PM
How very kind of you, Greg. Your comments have always been delightful to read.
Date: 1/9/2018 11:28:00 AM
Lin, this is a great write. I enjoy reading your poetry so much. Thank you for sharing it. John
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Date: 1/10/2018 5:07:00 AM
merci, John. Your comments are always encouraging to me.
Date: 1/8/2018 9:40:00 AM
THIS GEM GRABBED ME FROM START TO FINISH MY FRIEND. You truly do write such exceptional poetry! A fav,,,,
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Date: 1/8/2018 11:51:00 AM
You have my gratitude for reading and the terrific comments, Robert.
Date: 1/5/2018 5:10:00 AM
Wonderful write, Lin. Very passionate and touching.
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Date: 1/5/2018 10:08:00 AM
Thanks so very much, Subimal.
Date: 1/5/2018 4:28:00 AM
Lin this really resonates, first how anyone could accuse you of writing I cant even say it, but they should seek within their own hearts their own resolutions, this is truly a wonderful and well written poem! I loved the title and how its a line of the poem!
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Date: 1/5/2018 10:08:00 AM
Thank you for the sincere and many insightful comments, Arthur.
Date: 1/5/2018 2:22:00 AM
Such sad sad but beautiful imagery of heartbreak Lin and unfortunately people do drown their sorrows with alcohol:-( a lovely poem am adding it to my faves it flows so wonderfully and the pic is stunning:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/5/2018 10:07:00 AM
Thank you for your thoughts, Jan. It's a pity that drinking only brings about more sadness and grief.

Book: Shattered Sighs