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When the Sun Drowns In the Sea

I walked home alone in the dampening mist
as the pastel colored sky blanketed the sun
His rays sank into the sea for their daily tryst
Resting among the waves, his work was done

And now the moon will rise in splendid glory
bringing lovers together in her lustrous light
while the mist hides the tears of my sad story
My heart is broken and my spirit is contrite

My cottage hearth will hold no warming fire
It's to darkness that I'll open my creaking door
No smiling face or welcome words will transpire
Twilight's become the time of day I most abhor

She would run and greet me when I neared home
But no longer do her laughing eyes meet mine
Her eyes now shine where she chose to roam
Bitter on my tongue is the taste of finest wine

Pity is not an emotion in which I choose to wallow
One day when the sun no longer drowns in the sea
perhaps then my wine will be pleasant to swallow
and memories of lost love will no longer torture me
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 1/11/2018 6:26:00 PM
So deeply romantic and melancholy ... like a smile with a tear, my favorite combination, though it's a hard line to walk with words. You have done so sublimely, and I have to fav this one. Wonderful, Dear Friend! :-) <3
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2018 6:32:00 PM
How very kind of you, Greg. Your comments have always been delightful to read.
Date: 1/9/2018 11:28:00 AM
Lin, this is a great write. I enjoy reading your poetry so much. Thank you for sharing it. John
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2018 5:07:00 AM
merci, John. Your comments are always encouraging to me.
Date: 1/8/2018 9:40:00 AM
THIS GEM GRABBED ME FROM START TO FINISH MY FRIEND. You truly do write such exceptional poetry! A fav,,,,
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/8/2018 11:51:00 AM
You have my gratitude for reading and the terrific comments, Robert.
Date: 1/5/2018 5:10:00 AM
Wonderful write, Lin. Very passionate and touching.
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/5/2018 10:08:00 AM
Thanks so very much, Subimal.
Date: 1/5/2018 2:22:00 AM
Such sad sad but beautiful imagery of heartbreak Lin and unfortunately people do drown their sorrows with alcohol:-( a lovely poem am adding it to my faves it flows so wonderfully and the pic is stunning:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/5/2018 10:07:00 AM
Thank you for your thoughts, Jan. It's a pity that drinking only brings about more sadness and grief.
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