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When the Rains Ended

When the Rains Ended

When the rains came,
you cocooned yourself
between my breasts,
into the branches of my heart,
feeding off my love,
drinking my life’s blood…
like a vampire,
growing stronger,
as I grew weaker.

When the rains ended,
you fluttered your 
newly-grown wings  
and swiftly flew away,
never looking back, 
to perch on a rainbow
painted on cobalt blue sky…
just as black birds
foretold.

05-20-2019


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Date: 10/7/2019 8:08:00 PM
Hello Pandita. Nice work. But simile of vampire did not suit me. Visual imagery can be seen in 2nd, 4th, 11th and 12th lines. Good work. Keep in touch.
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 10/19/2019 8:23:00 PM
Thank you, Sanket, for stopping by and leaving your feedback! Have a wonderful weekend! Pandita
Date: 5/23/2019 12:16:00 PM
Stunning work Pandita
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/23/2019 12:39:00 PM
Hi Allen, I truly appreciate your lovely complimentary words! Thank you so much! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 5/23/2019 7:54:00 AM
Great write Pandita...Good to see you!
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/23/2019 9:01:00 AM
Awwww - thank you, my friend, Joseph! It's really good to hear from you! Hope your day is great! Love and hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/21/2019 5:43:00 PM
Hi Pandita, so glad you are back. Giving all to someone who just leaves without a care. Well written. All the best~Warren
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/21/2019 9:44:00 PM
Hello Warren, thank you so much my friend for your warm welcome and lovely compliments that I appreciate! Hugs and best wishes. Pandita
Date: 5/21/2019 4:50:00 PM
Enjoyed this enchanting poem immensely, Pandita. Nice to view your work again! It's a treat. Best wishes, Gershon
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/21/2019 9:42:00 PM
Hi Gershon, it is so nice to be back and to hear from you! I've been working on some academic projects that required my complete attention. But now I can devote more time here! Thank you kindly for your wonderful supportive compliments! Love and hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/21/2019 3:46:00 PM
Wonderful rendering to enlighten Pandita, Aloha wk
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/21/2019 9:38:00 PM
Hi William, thank you for visiting and leaving your kind compliment! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 5/21/2019 7:37:00 AM
When the rains came..and then when the rains ended..I see and feel that contrast you presented..Isn't life wonderful! A meaningful write, Pandita..don't see you much these days on Soup.
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Pandita Sanchez
Date: 5/21/2019 10:21:00 AM
Dear Vijay, thank you so much for your lovely comments/compliments which I appreciate! I should be back writing again as I just completed an academic program that needed my full attention. Hugs and best regards. Pandita