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When the Rain Fell

The sky changed as darkness stole away light
A vision of clouds overhead made a blight
Balmy air descended into a chill
As the sun faded losing all its will
A sound of pitter-patter all around
As the rain lightly played beats to the ground
 
A sense of foreboding was now brewing
As a storm appeared to be pursuing
Like the sea in its full current and swell
That’s how it felt when rain heavily fell
The flood gates of emotion opened up
Spilling over contents from a fragile cup

Mirrored puddles reflected much sorrow
Ripples of darkness clouded tomorrow
Be gone gloomy self - be anew today!
Let the heavenly rain wash it away
Cease this mournful brooding and repining
For a smile reflects like the sun shining

Copyright © Christina Bowring | Year Posted 2023

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Gary Radice Date: 3/21/2024 7:21:00 AM Love this Christina. You've written this in the style of how a director might direct a rain scene in a film. You build the atmosphere up so well. Cheers - Gary Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 3/21/2024 3:14:00 PM Dear Gary, I loved your comments. Put a big smile on my face. Thank you so much for your visit and encouragement:):) Action and cut ! :)

Christopher Grieves Date: 3/20/2024 9:41:00 PM We poets love rain! It says so much and it has so many moods of it's own. This is another honest and descriptive poem.. even becoming a prayer: "Let the heavenly rain wash it away" (for me). I love rain. I love this poem too. Please do more, Christina :) (brolly up - fav) Cx Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 3/22/2024 4:21:00 AM Dear Chris, many thanks to you once again for your supportive visit which is so appreciated. Rain is a wonderful poetic subject! You are right - I did have a prayer in mind with that line. I’m honoured my friend that you loved it and for your fav. That’s so generous of you.Thank you :) Always got my brolly to hand. Have a great weekend with hopefully not too much rain :) x

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/27/2024 11:15:00 AM Christina, this is really nice and I liked how you related rain to human emotions. Good to see this oldie! Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 3/1/2024 3:31:00 AM Dear Andrea, hello again. Heartfelt thanks to you for your valued, encouraging support with the older poems too. So sweet and kind of you. Your visits always brightens all our pages and are so warmly received. Bless you. Hugs and wishes for a lovely weekend xx

Speaks Volumes Date: 1/13/2024 2:34:00 PM Here in Australia the rain heralds joy and relief from blistering sun. Quite the opposite of your wonderful poem. I can relate in reverse. Understanding the emotion pouring over your words. A moving poem dear Chris. Enjoyed. Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 1/15/2024 2:27:00 AM Dear SV, I know a while back that you had terrific heat (way more than I could cope with) so I can appreciate how rain is a blessing to lovely Australia. I can’t cope with heat at all and I’m dreading it as temps are slowly creeping up here in England. A lot of people welcome summer but for most, I dread it when it becomes unbearable. I go round looking a bit like a ghost :) as I don’t sit in the sun at all. I hope you have rain in abundance this year. Thank you for such lovely , supportive comments. Always valued. Xx

Charlie Mackenzie Date: 9/19/2023 9:42:00 AM I really loved the assonance and rhyme in this poem. It painted a vivid picture for me and I appreciate poetry that does that. Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 9/19/2023 12:58:00 PM Thank you so much Charlie for your visit and leaving a very much appreciated response to the poem. I’m so glad you liked it. I look forward to reading more of yours :)

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 8/20/2023 11:33:00 AM Hello Christina, I love the rain. I enjoy listening to the pitter patter of the rain hitting the window. the sound of the rain pouring with the wind blowing. It sounds like the waves coming to shore. Enjoy your day my friend./Darlene\ Login to Reply Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 8/25/2023 11:28:00 AM Hello Christina, Yes rain does makes a glorious sound. Blessings to you. /Darlene\ Christina Bowring Date: 8/22/2023 12:03:00 PM Thank you so much Darlene for your visit. I too love the rain! It makes a glorious sound. Blessings to you.

Valsa George Date: 5/10/2023 10:22:00 PM With the rain, the dark clouds from the sky are displaced. Like the clear sky, let the mind too become clear with all sorrow washed away. Let a smile sprout like the sun appearing in a clear sky. Lovely analogy ! Thank you for your kind visit to my page, Login to Reply

Deb M Date: 4/23/2023 8:36:00 PM What a truly beautiful poem Christina! Debx Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 4/26/2023 1:13:00 PM Thank you so much Deb for your lovely comment. Much appreciated.

Daniel Turner Date: 4/13/2023 5:19:00 PM This is very well written, Christina. Cool metaphor too:) Login to Reply Christina Bowring Date: 4/15/2023 12:36:00 PM Thank you so much Daniel for reading the poem and leaving a lovely comment. Very much appreciated. Warmest wishes.