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When the Lone Bird Flees

Though she holds his hands, he feels all alone 
As moonlit desires sense his dissonant vibes
Emanating from pulses beating in discord
Plundering away ambiance to vacant thoughts
When a cogent conversation becomes a task.

Silence he placates discarding her prompts
Preferring the dark over company of stars 
As a lone-bird sits forlorn on a leafless branch
Awaiting for daybreak to build a new nest.

Steadfastly she holds on to her view of galaxy
Undeterred by forces of invisible black holes
Comforting his woes till he rejects her call,

Deciding resolutely to abandon her place
When the lone-bird flees before daybreak.

November 5, 2018
Placed first in contest #520 by Brian Strand

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2018

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Valsa George Date: 12/10/2022 5:29:00 AM "As a lone-bird sits forlorn on a leafless branch Awaiting for daybreak to build a new nest." Beautiful Comparison. Let her flee to open skies...! Beautiful as ever. Login to Reply

Suzanne Delaney Date: 12/6/2018 7:31:00 AM Such mood and tone and strong imagery. Love your lone bird poem. Hugs, dear friend. SuZ Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/7/2018 8:45:00 AM Thank you SuZ.

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 12/3/2018 11:12:00 AM "Preferring the dark over company of stars," is such a poignant line and gets to the heart of this lone bird's nature, Vijay. I like the descending number of lines in each verse and sensed the loneliness throughout. Beautifully written and well deserving of a first-place win, my friend. Sorry my congrats are so late. Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/7/2018 8:44:00 AM Thank you Carolyn..appreciate the kind remarks.

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 12/1/2018 3:06:00 PM Hello Vijay, I am so happy you got a placement in the contest.This is a lovely poem. have a nice evening my friend. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/7/2018 8:44:00 AM Thank you Darlene.

Carole Duet Date: 12/1/2018 2:28:00 PM Congrats on your placement in the contest with this expressive poem, Vijay. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/7/2018 8:43:00 AM Thank you Carole.

Kenisha Shines Date: 12/1/2018 11:44:00 AM congratulations!loved your poem.have great time!:) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/7/2018 8:43:00 AM Thank you Kenisha.

Robertina B. Date: 11/26/2018 12:16:00 AM Belated Congratulations on your win, my friend.. Such an exquisite Verse!! So inspirational and filled with so much emotion.. Bravo !!! Many blessings!! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/27/2018 6:30:00 AM Thank you Robertina.

Brandy Nicole Date: 11/24/2018 1:21:00 PM Congratulations Vijay, on this win. Your thoughts hold so many emotions, and they always caress gently around me. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/24/2018 1:48:00 PM Appreciate your generous feedback..many many thanks, Brandy.

Paul Callus Date: 11/24/2018 9:51:00 AM Beautiful, and yet so sad, Vijay. Belated congratulations on you win,,,truly merited. Regards // paul Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/24/2018 1:47:00 PM Thank you Paul..appreciate the kind remarks.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 11/13/2018 12:37:00 PM Sometimes loss may be our gain Vijay. I loved this soulful deep metaphor. : ) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/13/2018 1:51:00 PM Thank you Connie.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/8/2018 6:23:00 PM Hi, again at this poem,Vijay . My umbrella poem was fictional though i had a first boyfriend at age 13 who was a Johnny. He did not kiss me like the Johnny in my poem!! I sure wonder what happened to Johnny Spencer! Just saying hello . Can't wait to see your next new poem. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/9/2018 8:50:00 AM Hello..thanks for stopping by, Andrea.

Janice Canerdy Date: 11/8/2018 1:52:00 PM So descriptive of strong emotion, Vijay! Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/8/2018 1:56:00 PM Thank you Janice..appreciate your visit and comments.

Alexis Y. Date: 11/8/2018 11:14:00 AM Hi Vijay, I agree with Joseph, this is such a sad write me With that being said, you are such a talented poet. I found every word and every line so poetic. This was well excited:-) Alexis Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/8/2018 1:55:00 PM Thank you Alexis..appreciate your kind remarks.

Joseph May Date: 11/8/2018 6:54:00 AM Such a sad tale of despair...Well written Vijay.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/8/2018 1:55:00 PM Thank you Joseph..appreciate your feedback.

Joanna Daniel Date: 11/8/2018 5:06:00 AM Lonely little write, sometimes one needs the me time, Vijay, nice one:) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/8/2018 6:08:00 AM Yes--lonely for sure. Thanks Jo.

Chris Hagy Date: 11/7/2018 9:52:00 PM Beautiful, sad, and soulful... as poetry should be :) Have a wonderful day Vijay :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/8/2018 6:07:00 AM Thanks for your visit..many many thanks, Chris.

Vladislav Raven Date: 11/7/2018 6:22:00 PM Hi Vijay, another excellent piece of poetry from your golden pen. The metaphor sing out in this piece my friend. Sometimes when things are not working it is better to move on. Such gentle words with a strong message. Beautiful as always my friend. A deep write, written from the heart, A fave. have a wonderful Thursday. Your friend always....Mike. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/8/2018 6:06:00 AM Thank you Mike. I really appreciate how you take the time to provide detailed feedback to all writers. I'm always happy to read your comments.

Harry Horsman Date: 11/7/2018 3:09:00 PM Beautiful and inspiring poetry.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/7/2018 5:16:00 PM Thank you Harry--appreciate the kind remarks.

Winged Warrior Date: 11/7/2018 10:49:00 AM A little birdie told me...great verse Vijay...you are soaring my friend...love & birds...^WW^ Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/7/2018 5:15:00 PM Thank you WW. Appreciate the visit and comments.

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 11/7/2018 7:00:00 AM Sorry to have missed this extraordinary poetic rapture of your my friend, Vijay! A Fav! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/7/2018 5:15:00 PM Thank you my friend. Appreciate the visit and comments.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 11/6/2018 1:55:00 PM The lone bird flees before day break, who can truly understand the ways of the bird or human nature, well read and well received Vijay, thanks for sharing your pen in such a pliable way Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/7/2018 6:24:00 AM Thank you Pixie..appreciate the visit and comments.

Liam Mcdaid Date: 11/6/2018 4:54:00 AM i always look to silence as the birth of winter wisdom vijay your pen drew this deep and touching excellent piece flying high with emotions a lonely bird always travels isolated upon the branch forever searching to build the nest without leaves gives of a coldness very inspiring picture drawn in your golden pen Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/6/2018 7:01:00 AM Glad to see that you made a note of the leafless branch..astute observation..many thanks my friend.

Lawrence Sharp Date: 11/5/2018 10:24:00 PM Excellent piece, Vijay, a perfect portrayal of disconnection in the presence of those ostensibly closest. Very well worded, fave. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/6/2018 6:59:00 AM Yes..quite a silent discord there..many thanks Lawrence.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/5/2018 6:17:00 PM Awsome extended metaphor in this one. Some lone birds you just have to fly away from. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/6/2018 6:59:00 AM Glad you mentioned the metaphor..your comment is spot on Andrea. Many thanks.

Nette Onclaud Date: 11/5/2018 3:54:00 PM touched by the mood of this scene so pensive and eloquently relayed, vijay... missed sending you comments.. i was in morocco for more than a week... spill ink!...huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 11/5/2018 5:51:00 PM Never been to Morocco..I have heard its a great place..hope you had a wonderful time. Thank you nette, for your comments.

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