Vijay Pandit Poet Verse

When the Lone Bird Flees

Though she holds his hands, he feels all alone 
As moonlit desires sense his dissonant vibes
Emanating from pulses beating in discord
Plundering away ambiance to vacant thoughts
When a cogent conversation becomes a task.

Silence he placates discarding her prompts
Preferring the dark over company of stars 
As a lone-bird sits forlorn on a leafless branch
Awaiting for daybreak to build a new nest.

Steadfastly she holds on to her view of galaxy
Undeterred by forces of invisible black holes
Comforting his woes till he rejects her call,

Deciding resolutely to abandon her place
When the lone-bird flees before daybreak.

November 5, 2018
Placed first in contest #520 by Brian Strand

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Valsa George December 10, 2022 at 5:29 AM "As a lone-bird sits forlorn on a leafless branch Awaiting for daybreak to build a new nest." Beautiful Comparison. Let her flee to open skies...! Beautiful as ever.

Suzanne Delaney December 6, 2018 at 7:31 AM Such mood and tone and strong imagery. Love your lone bird poem. Hugs, dear friend. SuZ Vijay Pandit December 7, 2018 at 8:45 AM Thank you SuZ.

Carolyn Devonshire December 3, 2018 at 11:12 AM "Preferring the dark over company of stars," is such a poignant line and gets to the heart of this lone bird's nature, Vijay. I like the descending number of lines in each verse and sensed the loneliness throughout. Beautifully written and well deserving of a first-place win, my friend. Sorry my congrats are so late. Hugs, Carolyn Vijay Pandit December 7, 2018 at 8:44 AM Thank you Carolyn..appreciate the kind remarks.

Darlene De Beaulieu December 1, 2018 at 3:06 PM Hello Vijay, I am so happy you got a placement in the contest.This is a lovely poem. have a nice evening my friend. Vijay Pandit December 7, 2018 at 8:44 AM Thank you Darlene.

Carole Duet December 1, 2018 at 2:28 PM Congrats on your placement in the contest with this expressive poem, Vijay. Vijay Pandit December 7, 2018 at 8:43 AM Thank you Carole.

Kenisha Shines December 1, 2018 at 11:44 AM congratulations!loved your poem.have great time!:) Vijay Pandit December 7, 2018 at 8:43 AM Thank you Kenisha.

Robertina B. November 26, 2018 at 12:16 AM Belated Congratulations on your win, my friend.. Such an exquisite Verse!! So inspirational and filled with so much emotion.. Bravo !!! Many blessings!! Vijay Pandit November 27, 2018 at 6:30 AM Thank you Robertina.

Brandy Nicole November 24, 2018 at 1:21 PM Congratulations Vijay, on this win. Your thoughts hold so many emotions, and they always caress gently around me. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit November 24, 2018 at 1:48 PM Appreciate your generous feedback..many many thanks, Brandy.

Paul Callus November 24, 2018 at 9:51 AM Beautiful, and yet so sad, Vijay. Belated congratulations on you win,,,truly merited. Regards // paul Vijay Pandit November 24, 2018 at 1:47 PM Thank you Paul..appreciate the kind remarks.

Connie Marcum Wong November 13, 2018 at 12:37 PM Sometimes loss may be our gain Vijay. I loved this soulful deep metaphor. : ) Vijay Pandit November 13, 2018 at 1:51 PM Thank you Connie.

Andrea Dietrich November 8, 2018 at 6:23 PM Hi, again at this poem,Vijay . My umbrella poem was fictional though i had a first boyfriend at age 13 who was a Johnny. He did not kiss me like the Johnny in my poem!! I sure wonder what happened to Johnny Spencer! Just saying hello . Can't wait to see your next new poem. Vijay Pandit November 9, 2018 at 8:50 AM Hello..thanks for stopping by, Andrea.

Janice Canerdy November 8, 2018 at 1:52 PM So descriptive of strong emotion, Vijay! Janice Vijay Pandit November 8, 2018 at 1:56 PM Thank you Janice..appreciate your visit and comments.

Alexis Y. November 8, 2018 at 11:14 AM Hi Vijay, I agree with Joseph, this is such a sad write me With that being said, you are such a talented poet. I found every word and every line so poetic. This was well excited:-) Alexis Vijay Pandit November 8, 2018 at 1:55 PM Thank you Alexis..appreciate your kind remarks.

Joseph May November 8, 2018 at 6:54 AM Such a sad tale of despair...Well written Vijay.. Vijay Pandit November 8, 2018 at 1:55 PM Thank you Joseph..appreciate your feedback.

Joanna Daniel November 8, 2018 at 5:06 AM Lonely little write, sometimes one needs the me time, Vijay, nice one:) Vijay Pandit November 8, 2018 at 6:08 AM Yes--lonely for sure. Thanks Jo.

Chris Hagy November 7, 2018 at 9:52 PM Beautiful, sad, and soulful... as poetry should be :) Have a wonderful day Vijay :) Vijay Pandit November 8, 2018 at 6:07 AM Thanks for your visit..many many thanks, Chris.

Vladislav Raven November 7, 2018 at 6:22 PM Hi Vijay, another excellent piece of poetry from your golden pen. The metaphor sing out in this piece my friend. Sometimes when things are not working it is better to move on. Such gentle words with a strong message. Beautiful as always my friend. A deep write, written from the heart, A fave. have a wonderful Thursday. Your friend always....Mike. Vijay Pandit November 8, 2018 at 6:06 AM Thank you Mike. I really appreciate how you take the time to provide detailed feedback to all writers. I'm always happy to read your comments.

Harry Horsman November 7, 2018 at 3:09 PM Beautiful and inspiring poetry.. Vijay Pandit November 7, 2018 at 5:16 PM Thank you Harry--appreciate the kind remarks.

Winged Warrior November 7, 2018 at 10:49 AM A little birdie told me...great verse Vijay...you are soaring my friend...love & birds...^WW^ Vijay Pandit November 7, 2018 at 5:15 PM Thank you WW. Appreciate the visit and comments.

Demetrios Trifiatis November 7, 2018 at 7:00 AM Sorry to have missed this extraordinary poetic rapture of your my friend, Vijay! A Fav! Vijay Pandit November 7, 2018 at 5:15 PM Thank you my friend. Appreciate the visit and comments.

Mystic Rose Rose November 6, 2018 at 1:55 PM The lone bird flees before day break, who can truly understand the ways of the bird or human nature, well read and well received Vijay, thanks for sharing your pen in such a pliable way Vijay Pandit November 7, 2018 at 6:24 AM Thank you Pixie..appreciate the visit and comments.

Liam Mcdaid November 6, 2018 at 4:54 AM i always look to silence as the birth of winter wisdom vijay your pen drew this deep and touching excellent piece flying high with emotions a lonely bird always travels isolated upon the branch forever searching to build the nest without leaves gives of a coldness very inspiring picture drawn in your golden pen Vijay Pandit November 6, 2018 at 7:01 AM Glad to see that you made a note of the leafless branch..astute observation..many thanks my friend.

Lawrence Sharp November 5, 2018 at 10:24 PM Excellent piece, Vijay, a perfect portrayal of disconnection in the presence of those ostensibly closest. Very well worded, fave. Vijay Pandit November 6, 2018 at 6:59 AM Yes..quite a silent discord there..many thanks Lawrence.

Andrea Dietrich November 5, 2018 at 6:17 PM Awsome extended metaphor in this one. Some lone birds you just have to fly away from. Vijay Pandit November 6, 2018 at 6:59 AM Glad you mentioned the metaphor..your comment is spot on Andrea. Many thanks.

Nette Onclaud November 5, 2018 at 3:54 PM touched by the mood of this scene so pensive and eloquently relayed, vijay... missed sending you comments.. i was in morocco for more than a week... spill ink!...huggs Vijay Pandit November 5, 2018 at 5:51 PM Never been to Morocco..I have heard its a great place..hope you had a wonderful time. Thank you nette, for your comments.

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