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When the Carnival Came To Town

The fancy carnival carousel caught my eye
Twelve wooden horses went prancing on by
I clambered on one, and enjoyed a horse ride
But when I had to dismount, oh how I cried!

When Mama and Papa tucked me into bed
Carousel horses galloped inside my head
I dreamed of riding through a fluffy cloud
My horse led the way; I felt ever so proud!

Every carousel horse has now been set free
With reins held tight, we cantered across the sea
When I woke from my dream I was on dry land
I won’t tell my folks .. grown-ups don’t understand!

Carousel Picture Prompt Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Eve Roper

04/06/20

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Lindsay Laurie

Date: 4/8/2020 7:58:00 PM

Very good Jan. Brought back memories of the merry-go-rounds we so enjoyed as children - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Eve Roper

Date: 4/7/2020 7:43:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jan, with great imagery, rhyme and content. Yes, parents don't understand a child's world. Thank you for entering my contest! Hugs Eve

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/7/2020 10:44:00 AM

Took me back to my childhood years Jan, a well written verse, good luck. Hope alls well Tom

Curtis Moorman

Date: 4/7/2020 9:54:00 AM

Jan, how captivating!! Some may say they are surprised, but not I. Your talent is clearly evidenced even in your 'bawdy' poems and it is elevated to a greater height when you express yourself in a beautiful piece of work like this one. You are so versatile and that is what sets you apart from the majority of people on Soup. Congrats!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/7/2020 9:29:00 AM

Jan, what a beautiful WINNING poem! Love that last line especially. Janice

Mark Koplin

Date: 4/7/2020 8:22:00 AM

Wow! That was a spectacular read. Good job my friend. You truly have a talent.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:29:00 AM

aww Mark it makes a change from my usual poop poems:-) I do enjoy writing poems suitable for children:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt

Date: 4/7/2020 3:50:00 AM

It's true, Jan, when we grow up we lose a fair share of that imagination set free that allows us to soar on wings of wonder. Well you haven't lost that childlike imagination - this is a sweet ride through a child's dream and so fanciful. Congrats on your top placement, dear friend!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:29:00 AM

Thanks John, I worked with children for many years and marvel at their imagination:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/7/2020 2:50:00 AM

This is magnificently done for Eve's contest. Beautiful words my friend. I hope all is well in the Isle of Man.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:28:00 AM

Thanks Caren, we are fine but unfortunately the cases of the virus are increasing and i worry our small hospital won't cope - they only have 6 ventilators:-( hugs jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/6/2020 7:39:00 PM

Oh, is this ever sweet. You have really gotten into your child's skin again. Just a perfect contest entry, Jan! Smiles and Hugs, Gershon

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:27:00 AM

Thanks GW:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 4/6/2020 1:40:00 PM

jan - your poem matches the picture perfectly! a charming write! best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:26:00 AM

Thanks Ilene, I got the top place:-) I am delighted Eve liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 4/6/2020 1:30:00 PM

What a magical dream land you rode your horse through, I hope they are all running free and happy! A charmer for the contest, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:26:00 AM

Thanks Michele it certainly was fun to create the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/6/2020 1:24:00 PM

Nicely done, Jan! Carousel or rocking horses always give children a boost! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2020 8:25:00 AM

when my son was small we took him to a holiday center and they had a 'fairground' with a carousel, dodgems etc etc and he LOVED it, we booked a second year, it has changed ownership and the fair was gone, he coped with it well - he was only about 5, but we were gutted for him as he had looked forward to it for so long:-( hugs jan xx