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When Silent Tears Fall

When silent tears of her aching heart fall Cry of the lonely night is seldom heard Muffling her sound against a callous wall Facing choice stark in dread of fate’s call Alone she bemoans of dreams deferred When silent tears of her aching heart fall Enduring deep pain her emotions squall Concealing the blows of bashing incurred Muffling her sound against a callous wall Sensing signs of impending harm, fears befall As bawl of her laments remains unheard When silent tears of her aching heart fall Her stone-cold beats in servitude thrall From passions parched and love interred Muffling her sound against a callous wall Shattered tones of her heartbeats appall Repelled by futility of the vows conferred When silent tears of her aching heart fall Muffling her sound against a callous wall January 19, 2020 HM: Strand choice 10 contest by Brian Strand

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/2/2020 4:40:00 PM

A sad story well written, Vijay. I love the style you chose for this :)

Indiana Shaw

Date: 1/28/2020 12:06:00 PM

A first for me a Villanelle - its style gives passion to the sad emotions here, strong write Vijay . . .

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 3:18:00 PM

Thank you Indiana--much appreciate.

Hello There

Date: 1/26/2020 11:24:00 PM

Powerfully penned piece, Vijay, of a heart in need.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/27/2020 7:19:00 AM

Thank you HT--haven't seen your poems in a while--much appreciate.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 1/25/2020 3:02:00 PM

your pen sparkles in this piece vijay wishing you a blessed weekend

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/26/2020 9:28:00 AM

Much appreciate Liam--many thanks.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/24/2020 9:44:00 AM

A sad beautiful poetic gem Vijay - you always write beautifully but the repetitiveness of certain lines makes the poem all the more emotive - kudos my friend, a wonderful poem. Blessings, Jennifer.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/24/2020 3:55:00 PM

Much appreciate the kind remarks Jennifer--many many thanks, my friend.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/22/2020 1:35:00 PM

A sad villanelle but very well done. I hate writing them but, they read so well. Good luck in the contest!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/22/2020 3:28:00 PM

Much appreciate MLK--many thanks for your visit and comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 1/22/2020 10:40:00 AM

These lonely souls who live in pain and fear, I can hear and feel their story when an adept poet meticulously and beautifully gives a sound to her "silent tears" and "heartbeats"! You put a lot of life and feel into your artistic work, dear Vijay! You have composed a wonderful sad music, Villanelle! So much enjoyed! The best of luck! A win and a FAV! My deepest regards and blessings

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/22/2020 3:27:00 PM

So happy to read your cheerful comments--much appreciate, Besma, as always. Many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Regards and blessings!

Charlie Smith

Date: 1/22/2020 12:25:00 AM

Bravo my friend. Well done as always and in such a tuff form, best wishes...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/22/2020 7:39:00 AM

Much appreciate Charlie--many thanks. All the best to you for a speedy recovery.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/21/2020 6:48:00 PM

So sad and romantic , but so beautiful, Vijay, good luck in the contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/22/2020 7:38:00 AM

Thank you Eve--much appreciate.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 1/21/2020 10:18:00 AM

Oh, this is so sad. It sounds as though she is in a now-loveless--perhaps abusive-- marriage (mention of vows). Vividly descriptive poem--her misery crying out from each line. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 1:41:00 PM

Yes indeed--that is the theme. Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.

Laura Leiser

Date: 1/21/2020 9:51:00 AM

Wow, what an amazingly well written Villanelle you have penned, Vijay! I can just feel her ache and sadness..this piece should do well in the contest.. :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 1:40:00 PM

A very nice thing to say, Laura--much appreciate--many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/21/2020 9:32:00 AM

Excellent! A winner perhaps! Love it, Vijay! You capture the soul of a wife in her bitter moment. How she does not want her husband to hear her somber cries, yearns that the callous wall would fall but fears it never will.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 1:39:00 PM

Much appreciate the kind remarks--happy to read your feedback Kim--many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/21/2020 5:05:00 AM

The silent moans of a weeping heart are heard only by poetry's sensitivity! A profound understanding of matters of heart! Excellent writing dearest, Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:05:00 AM

Very happy to read your glowing comments my friend--much appreciate, as always, Demetrios--many many thanks.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/20/2020 4:14:00 PM

From the stone-cold beats to the callous wall, you have created the sad feelings that sometimes overwhelm us. Funny, but I make no noise when I cry. Brilliant writing! Best wishes in the contest. Hugs for you, Carolyn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:04:00 AM

So very kind of you Carolyn--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/20/2020 1:10:00 PM

- A pain only she could feel in her loneliness ... sad and beautifully written, Vijay - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:03:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise--much appreciate, as always.

Karen Croft

Date: 1/20/2020 10:04:00 AM

absolutely beautiful! i can feel every pain that she holds. Thank you for reading my poetry too! many blessings for you today.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:03:00 AM

Much appreciate Karen--many thanks for your visit and comments.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/20/2020 9:00:00 AM

Overwhelming pain from a broken heart is felt with every line in your sad poem Vijay. I can relate and I never want to revisit. Excellent entry! xxoo

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:02:00 AM

So very kind of you Connie--appreciate, as always--many thanks.

Ann Foster

Date: 1/20/2020 8:47:00 AM

Like tears that follow one after another alike and not alike at all... every stanza held both the hope and sadness of the one before and reflected the one to follow. Excellent work. Simply .... "art". Ann

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:01:00 AM

Happy to read your glowing remarks Ann--much appreciate the kind feedback--many thanks.

Jenish Somadas

Date: 1/19/2020 9:13:00 PM

Tears are flowing everywhere.. Beautifully written poem dear poet.. The repeated lines are so marvelously welded.. Great entry in the contest.. good luck..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:00:00 AM

Much appreciate Jenish--many thanks.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/19/2020 9:12:00 PM

No better way to end the day then by reading your poems, Thank you Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 8:00:00 AM

That is a very nice thing to say--much appreciate, Pixie--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 1/19/2020 7:38:00 PM

Sometimes we hide our tears, so no one sees our pain. When the heart aches until it nearly breaks, droplets will caress the face. They will gently fall. Your thoughts wraps softly around me. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/21/2020 7:59:00 AM

So very true Brandy--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.