Vijay Pandit Poet Villanelle

When Silent Tears Fall

When silent tears of her aching heart fall
Cry of the lonely night is seldom heard
Muffling her sound against a callous wall	

Facing choice stark in dread of fate’s call
Alone she bemoans of dreams deferred
When silent tears of her aching heart fall

Enduring deep pain her emotions squall
Concealing the blows of bashing incurred
Muffling her sound against a callous wall	

Sensing signs of impending harm, fears befall
As bawl of her laments remains unheard
When silent tears of her aching heart fall

Her stone-cold beats in servitude thrall
From passions parched and love interred
Muffling her sound against a callous wall	

Shattered tones of her heartbeats appall
Repelled by futility of the vows conferred
When silent tears of her aching heart fall
Muffling her sound against a callous wall

January 19, 2020
HM: Strand choice 10 contest by Brian Strand

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Angela Crabtree November 2, 2020 at 4:40 PM A sad story well written, Vijay. I love the style you chose for this :)

Indiana Shaw January 28, 2020 at 12:06 PM A first for me a Villanelle - its style gives passion to the sad emotions here, strong write Vijay . . . Vijay Pandit January 31, 2020 at 3:18 PM Thank you Indiana--much appreciate.

Hello There January 26, 2020 at 11:24 PM Powerfully penned piece, Vijay, of a heart in need. Vijay Pandit January 27, 2020 at 7:19 AM Thank you HT--haven't seen your poems in a while--much appreciate.

Liam Mcdaid January 25, 2020 at 3:02 PM your pen sparkles in this piece vijay wishing you a blessed weekend Vijay Pandit January 26, 2020 at 9:28 AM Much appreciate Liam--many thanks.

Jennifer Proxenos January 24, 2020 at 9:44 AM A sad beautiful poetic gem Vijay - you always write beautifully but the repetitiveness of certain lines makes the poem all the more emotive - kudos my friend, a wonderful poem. Blessings, Jennifer. Vijay Pandit January 24, 2020 at 3:55 PM Much appreciate the kind remarks Jennifer--many many thanks, my friend.

M. L. Kiser January 22, 2020 at 1:35 PM A sad villanelle but very well done. I hate writing them but, they read so well. Good luck in the contest! Vijay Pandit January 22, 2020 at 3:28 PM Much appreciate MLK--many thanks for your visit and comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri January 22, 2020 at 10:40 AM These lonely souls who live in pain and fear, I can hear and feel their story when an adept poet meticulously and beautifully gives a sound to her "silent tears" and "heartbeats"! You put a lot of life and feel into your artistic work, dear Vijay! You have composed a wonderful sad music, Villanelle! So much enjoyed! The best of luck! A win and a FAV! My deepest regards and blessings Vijay Pandit January 22, 2020 at 3:27 PM So happy to read your cheerful comments--much appreciate, Besma, as always. Many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Regards and blessings!

Charlie Smith January 22, 2020 at 12:25 AM Bravo my friend. Well done as always and in such a tuff form, best wishes... Vijay Pandit January 22, 2020 at 7:39 AM Much appreciate Charlie--many thanks. All the best to you for a speedy recovery.

Eve Roper January 21, 2020 at 6:48 PM So sad and romantic , but so beautiful, Vijay, good luck in the contest. Vijay Pandit January 22, 2020 at 7:38 AM Thank you Eve--much appreciate.

Janice Canerdy January 21, 2020 at 10:18 AM Oh, this is so sad. It sounds as though she is in a now-loveless--perhaps abusive-- marriage (mention of vows). Vividly descriptive poem--her misery crying out from each line. Janice Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 1:41 PM Yes indeed--that is the theme. Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.

Laura Leiser January 21, 2020 at 9:51 AM Wow, what an amazingly well written Villanelle you have penned, Vijay! I can just feel her ache and sadness..this piece should do well in the contest.. :) Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 1:40 PM A very nice thing to say, Laura--much appreciate--many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues January 21, 2020 at 9:32 AM Excellent! A winner perhaps! Love it, Vijay! You capture the soul of a wife in her bitter moment. How she does not want her husband to hear her somber cries, yearns that the callous wall would fall but fears it never will. Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 1:39 PM Much appreciate the kind remarks--happy to read your feedback Kim--many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis January 21, 2020 at 5:05 AM The silent moans of a weeping heart are heard only by poetry's sensitivity! A profound understanding of matters of heart! Excellent writing dearest, Vijay! Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:05 AM Very happy to read your glowing comments my friend--much appreciate, as always, Demetrios--many many thanks.

Carolyn Devonshire January 20, 2020 at 4:14 PM From the stone-cold beats to the callous wall, you have created the sad feelings that sometimes overwhelm us. Funny, but I make no noise when I cry. Brilliant writing! Best wishes in the contest. Hugs for you, Carolyn Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:04 AM So very kind of you Carolyn--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.

Anne-Lise Andresen January 20, 2020 at 1:10 PM - A pain only she could feel in her loneliness ... sad and beautifully written, Vijay - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:03 AM Thank you Anne-Lise--much appreciate, as always.

Karen Croft January 20, 2020 at 10:04 AM absolutely beautiful! i can feel every pain that she holds. Thank you for reading my poetry too! many blessings for you today. Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:03 AM Much appreciate Karen--many thanks for your visit and comments.

Connie Marcum Wong January 20, 2020 at 9:00 AM Overwhelming pain from a broken heart is felt with every line in your sad poem Vijay. I can relate and I never want to revisit. Excellent entry! xxoo Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:02 AM So very kind of you Connie--appreciate, as always--many thanks.

Ann Foster January 20, 2020 at 8:47 AM Like tears that follow one after another alike and not alike at all... every stanza held both the hope and sadness of the one before and reflected the one to follow. Excellent work. Simply .... "art". Ann Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:01 AM Happy to read your glowing remarks Ann--much appreciate the kind feedback--many thanks.

Jenish Somadas January 19, 2020 at 9:13 PM Tears are flowing everywhere.. Beautifully written poem dear poet.. The repeated lines are so marvelously welded.. Great entry in the contest.. good luck.. Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:00 AM Much appreciate Jenish--many thanks.

Mystic Rose Rose January 19, 2020 at 9:12 PM No better way to end the day then by reading your poems, Thank you Vijay Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 8:00 AM That is a very nice thing to say--much appreciate, Pixie--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole January 19, 2020 at 7:38 PM Sometimes we hide our tears, so no one sees our pain. When the heart aches until it nearly breaks, droplets will caress the face. They will gently fall. Your thoughts wraps softly around me. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 7:59 AM So very true Brandy--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.

Running Wolves January 19, 2020 at 5:26 PM excellent write. this pulls at ones heartstrings with deep sadness and emotional anger.. Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 7:58 AM So nice to read your kind feedback--much appreciate...many thanks.

Silent One January 19, 2020 at 1:26 PM Sometimes no one notices our tears...especially when they are unaware they fall...deep and emotive poetry. Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 7:57 AM So true, SO--many thanks--much appreciate.

Andrea Dietrich January 19, 2020 at 12:59 PM the refrain lines are very poignant. The entire poem shows her huge sadness. Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 7:56 AM Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.

John Hamilton January 19, 2020 at 12:40 PM So much emotion and the repeating lines make it feel melodic, although of course a dire sad song. Loved this poetic dirge! Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 7:56 AM Nice to read your kind remarks John--much appreciate--many thanks.

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