When Older Siblings Or Younger Step In Love

It was her sixteenth birth year...
She was madly in love with an elderly goon
I forbade her to step forward
She denied being backward.

Yelling at me, she insulted me in all possible ways,
My poor little angel, my lovely sweet sissy,
I saw her, drowning to dark hole bit by bit
I smelled danger, as if, it was like-
A raven rushing at her……
To suck her blood to the death
She wanted to taste all the way life
But it was too wild, the moron was devilish
He had his own wife with three kids!
I warned again my sweet little sis,
‘Don’t love’! She never looked back and drowned;
Continued sipping the nasty blood and blood sucked her
Until the raven attempted to kill her
She fled then, emptied, broken hearted.

Written by-Tasmina Hayat Khan
9th January 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 2/7/2016 9:31:00 AM
thanks for the nice reply
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Date: 2/7/2016 1:29:00 AM
TASMINA, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. LOVE LINDA
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Tasmina Hayat Khan
Date: 2/7/2016 8:33:00 AM
Thanks Linda, loving your inspiration...
Date: 1/28/2016 7:10:00 AM
Subjective indeed
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Tasmina Hayat Khan
Date: 1/28/2016 2:00:00 PM
Thanks for your time for my poem...
Date: 1/26/2016 10:02:00 PM
TASMINA, Congratulations on your awesome sibling win. XOX - LINDA -
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Date: 1/28/2016 2:01:00 PM
Thanks ..
Date: 1/18/2016 8:40:00 AM
Tasmina, Congratulations on your lovely win. Love the subject..... SKAT **
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Tasmina Hayat Khan
Date: 1/21/2016 10:03:00 PM
Thanks dear SKAT for your read..
Date: 1/15/2016 5:02:00 PM
Tasmina , congratulations on your placement on my “When Older Siblings or Younger Step In”... contest. You were such a good sister to your sister, sometimes we are blind to evil because it taste so good so we cannot see what others see. Hugs
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Date: 1/21/2016 10:05:00 PM
Thanks Eve, for ur thoughtful comment..
Date: 1/9/2016 2:37:00 PM
Oh Tasmina this is such a sad poem am so glad you stepped in and tried to advise her although at the time I'm sure she didn't appreciate it:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/9/2016 10:05:00 PM
Thanks Jan for your comment.
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