Pandita Sietesantos Poet Verse

When Love Is Lost

When Love is Lost

On the
dark side
of the 
moon, my 
wounded
heart limps
into 
the grip
of a
starless
abyss

From the 
void of 
love lost,
prayers fall
empty
upon
deaf sky 
clouded
by the 
grey of
despair

Like the
song of
the wind
strangled 
by black
linen
ribbons,
I mourn
I hurt 
I sob
I sob


My heart
shredding
ripping
bleeding
raw with
red pain 
until…
until…
you are
nothing
to me


12-08-2016

Contest:      Duplex
Sponsor:      Jan Allison
Placement:   1st

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Susan Ashley February 16, 2018 at 5:55 PM Wow! My dear Pandita, your poem is conveyed with such poetic power and poignancy that I ache to my very core. Beautifully sad metaphors and imagery brings you poem home to my heart where it resonates in residence there. Every line of every stanza weeps the sadness of lost love. I love it! A well deserved belated congrats for this expressive beauty. Warmest wishes and hugs my lovely friend.. ~Susan Susan Ashley February 17, 2018 at 7:45 PM You are so very kind my sweet friend and thank you for your wonderful words, but I am still an apprentice and I have a lot to learn and a long way to go.. I am in fine spirits these days and I hope the same for you dear Pandita. I hope you are enjoying a scrumptious weekend as well!! Love and hugs always ~Susan Pandita Sietesantos February 17, 2018 at 2:04 PM Hi Susan, thank you - thank you, my dear friend! I am still learning from true poets such as youself! You are indeed the "real deal". I treasure your comments and compliments. Hope you are doing well and enjoying a splendid weekend! Love and hugs. Pandita

Line Gauthier February 10, 2018 at 12:21 PM Beautiful presentation - can be interpreted as blood drops or tear drops. Well done, Pandita. Pandita Sietesantos February 10, 2018 at 12:31 PM Dear Line, thank you once again for your continued support and kind words! Pandita

James Inman November 29, 2017 at 6:44 AM Pandita, such an intense write. I could never imagine being hurt so badly that I would want to feel nothing for someone that I have loved (if you go by my writing that seems to be a ridiculous statement for me to make, lol). If things didn't work with those very few people I've loved in my life it hurt but it didn't stop my feelings. Pandita Sietesantos November 29, 2017 at 3:24 PM Dear James, thank you once again for your continued support and kind feedback! Pandita

Kika Ayala January 6, 2017 at 8:07 AM Hi Pandita, congratulations on your top win! This is a cool piece with a whopping punch at the end! Love it and a 7! Kika Pandita Sietesantos January 6, 2017 at 8:11 AM Thank you, thank you, Kika! Have a nice day! Pandita

Alexis Y. December 11, 2016 at 5:39 AM Hi Pandita, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win.It was well deserved:-) Alexis Pandita Sietesantos December 12, 2016 at 3:13 PM Dear Alexis, thank you once again for your continued support and kind words! Pandita

Darren White December 11, 2016 at 12:15 AM Lost love, it's so painful.... Congratulations! Pandita Sietesantos December 12, 2016 at 3:13 PM So very true, my friend! Thank you so much Darren for stopping by with your comments and kind congratulations! Pandita

Jan Allison December 10, 2016 at 7:05 PM Oh Pandita I am so delighted to see your name on my list. You expressed lost love brilliantly with your deep dark imagery:-) Many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx Pandita Sietesantos December 10, 2016 at 9:00 PM I am absolutely thrilled and honoured! Thank you for introducing this new form which I enjoyed trying and had a lot of fun with it! Have a great weekend! Hugs, Pandita.

Robert Lindley December 9, 2016 at 9:42 AM You have expressed the lonely hurt in love lost .. For far too often a deep love lost feels like a beloved life lost. Truly exceptional poetry my friend. Good luck in that contest.. Pandita Sietesantos December 9, 2016 at 11:24 AM Thank you - thank you, my dear Robert! I am still learning from true poets such as you! Hope you are doing well! Pandita

Alexis Y. December 9, 2016 at 9:19 AM WoW! Pandita, you really did justice to the form. You made the reader"feel" that love that is no longer there. And the imagery that you wove within in this write is top notche. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without seven:-) Alexis Pandita Sietesantos December 9, 2016 at 9:29 AM Thanks very much, Alexis! I appreciate your insightful comments and compliments! Have a great weekend! Pandita

Tim Smith December 8, 2016 at 5:36 PM I really like it Pandita...I'm thinking of doing this contest but not sure how...yet Pandita Sietesantos December 9, 2016 at 9:07 AM Hi Tim, thank you so much for stopping by and complimenting this piece. I really enjoyed trying this form. Please give it a try! Pandita