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When I'm No More

A play ends just, a wretched play, that I’m no more. And you yourself, with vex, dismay, that I’m no more? Bleeding grass, burning air, woods ashen, and you weeping, It’s a bit too convenient, nay, that I’m no more? The letter with the rhymeless elegy-- it’s soaked, I hardly muse now, what you’ll say, that I’m no more! Stranded and shifting, quite like light on water, Dew, Reflection mine, why do you stay, when I’m no more? -Pin Dew (02/05/2017) Note: Experimental Ghazal- The lines are in Iambic Hexameter. Usually, English Ghazals follow Syllabic Prosody, but here I am using Accentual-Syllabic Prosody.

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Date: 5/26/2017 8:28:00 PM
Hi Pin, your ghazal is beautiful and correct. You need to add one more couplet to have the minimum number of couplets for a ghazal which is 5 couplets....Pashang
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Date: 7/3/2017 1:08:00 AM
Yes, I'll try :) Thank you..
Date: 5/21/2017 4:48:00 PM
Beautiful!
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Date: 7/3/2017 1:08:00 AM
Thank you :)