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When Dark Clouds Overshadowed the Sun's Ray

When dark clouds overshadow the sun’s ray And gloom spreads over the countryside While the daisies bowed their heads to pray, Knowing they have this last somber day Before their golden petals are thrust aside When dark clouds overshadow the sun’s ray. After the rain, I stroll the meadow highway In early afternoon, happy and wide-eyed, While the daisies bowed their heads to pray. The meadow is no longer in grand array As autumn soon summer’s blooms override When dark clouds overshadow the sun’s ray Rainbow spotted during my afternoon getaway Adorned like a midsummer’s waiting bride, While the daisies bow their heads to pray The morning was a gloomy, disappointing gray Watching the season changed, I admit I cried When dark clouds overshadow the sun’s ray, While the daisies bow their heads to pray. written September 15, 2021

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Date: 10/3/2021 2:16:00 PM
Yeah I like this villanelle. I think you definitely took advantage of the repetition yet each idea almost seem unique on it's on while still referring back to the continual theme. Great writing.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 10/3/2021 7:26:00 PM
Aw, Wayland, thanks a "bunch" for your kind and thoughtful comment on my villanelle. I love the form and have written several of them over the years. I would encourage you to give it a try!
Date: 9/20/2021 11:11:00 AM
This is a gorgeous metaphoric write - "Rainbow spotted during my afternoon getaway Adorned like a midsummer’s waiting bride, While the daisies bow their heads to pray" Not easy to do, and yet, here she is! So bravo!
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/20/2021 1:32:00 PM
Aw, thanks, Caren. I love the format, and I am always so happy when the muse gives me one. Wow! Your bravo is something to treasure!
Date: 9/19/2021 2:13:00 AM
So lovely, I'm gonna fave this beauty of a poem, Milton:)
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/19/2021 8:34:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Jo, for your thoughtful response to my poem.
Date: 9/17/2021 3:59:00 AM
"While the daisies bow their heads to pray." nicely done...Delice
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/19/2021 9:49:00 AM
Thank you so much, Delice. I, too, thought that was a memorable line, so when it popped into my head, I knew I had to use it.
Date: 9/15/2021 9:52:00 PM
Lovely, a feel of want
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/16/2021 8:12:00 AM
Thank you so much, Eve. I appreciated your read and your comment. Have a wonderful weekend.
Date: 9/15/2021 5:13:00 PM
I simply LOVE this! A fave! Amazing write. Love fall and your verse. God bless you always, Love, Gina
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/15/2021 5:58:00 PM
Thanks so much, Gina. I'm so glad you liked it. I've been going through a "blue funk" the last few days (had a tooth pulled) when I wrote this.

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