When

when I was young I went to sea I met a pelican she needled me when I was brave I went to field I saw my shadow she turned to me When I was lost I journeyed within I found a love she sang with me when I was tired I sat me down I left this house she carried me

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/30/2013 4:46:00 PM

Hello Ralph, reading this one again, this endures a good flowing verse, enjoyed your poem. Many Blessings with your Featured Poem of the week. By the way no matter my blue color or tune I am always here, spreading the colorful cheer.....Happy Easter!" xox~ LINDA

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 3/25/2013 10:28:00 AM

Congrats on "WHEN" being featured.

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 11/9/2012 11:52:00 PM

Those that stick with us unconditionally, are they who matter most. Keep writing Ralph!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/10/2012 7:34:00 PM

Ralph, allow me, to tell you, i love everything about this poem. I can imagine your thoughts and company come from a dear loved one... I love the nature jotted in your poem. A woman's love is the best trust you have in and out of this world.. it will always follow... a sweet poem, to enjoy...xox~PD

Ralph Mason
Date: 9/11/2012 6:31:00 AM

So happy you liked it. I think you're right about a woman's love (very well expressed) although at some level I think we all have a feminine side in us. Warm thoughts, Ralph

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/8/2012 7:11:00 AM

A guardian angel (pelican). Sweet poem, I like it. Have a peaceful weekend. - // Anne-Lise :)

Ralph Mason
Date: 9/8/2012 10:36:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise. My weekend is already feeling better:) Warm thoughts, Ralph