What Makes You Feel

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Malabika Ray Choudhury's Contest: What Makes You Feel...3 Apr 25

# 2: mist hushes throes of lament as kin's shadow leaves...my breath fails to rise.

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/10/2025 11:00:00 AM

Nette, sounds like a magic mist. The interplay between the mist and breath makes me think about what it all means and how something is left behind and something is lost. Take care!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/5/2025 8:53:00 PM

Exquisitely penned, Nette. A surefire winner. Moves me greatly too. ~ Gershon

Maria Williams

Date: 4/5/2025 3:27:00 AM

Dear Nette,your one line is hauntingly beautiful—so much emotion in so few words. It feels like a quiet moment of grief suspended in time. Deeply moving...Hugs

CayCay Jennings

Date: 4/4/2025 1:42:00 PM

Oh, I was instantly transported to the good-bye memories that I have for all my relatives. Everyone lived in the same state, Mom and Dad's peps, while we moved a great deal. My parents did their best to visit them every summer. Oh, the dreaded good-byes, it is good that I still share them with some cousins. I goofed this contest's instructions all kinds of up. I must laugh. Loved this ... CayCay