Susan Ashley Poet Free verse

What If

There we were -
veiled in the sheer-yet-semi-private aura of morning twilight;
where only outlines can be seen
but where everything is felt in its full strength and purity.

In a sultry bed -
overstuffed with lost time
lost love and, now, repossessed love 
we embraced each other.

Years have a way of tenderizing even the toughest hearts
as fertile tears water emotions;
the beauty of what was - was still there -
ready to rupture its bubbled captivity..

but as the home star streamed in through the eastern window
the curtain came down.


Susan Ashley
April 16, 2019


~ Fifth Place ~
Contest: April 2019 Premier 9 (Fourteen Line Max)
Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Panagiota Romios May 7, 2019 at 11:01 AM Outstanding Poem! A FAV Panagiota Susan Ashley May 7, 2019 at 6:15 PM It please me greatly to know you enjoyed my poem, Panagiota. Thank you for the honor of your gracious comments and your fav. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Anisha Dutta May 2, 2019 at 9:03 AM Emerald emotions wonderfully displayed. I am charmed. BIG CONGRATS. Love Susan Ashley May 5, 2019 at 8:45 PM Your beautiful comments and kind congrats are a joy to receive, Anisha. I'm so pleased you were charmed by my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Mystic Rose Rose April 27, 2019 at 5:02 AM Congratulations Susan , your poetry is always so engaging and beautiful. Emotions are always on the forefront of every line, it was a pleasure delving into your pen's heart beat. Susan Ashley April 29, 2019 at 6:38 PM The beauty of your comments touch my heart, dear Pixie. Thank you for your inspiring comments and kind congrats. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier April 26, 2019 at 6:23 PM Wonderful blur of sensuous musings. Congrats on your most deserving win, Susan. Susan Ashley April 29, 2019 at 6:37 PM Your beautiful comments and kind congrats are a joy to receive, Line. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich April 26, 2019 at 6:20 PM gorgeous, Susan. Wonderful poem with a well deserved win. Congratulations. Susan Ashley April 29, 2019 at 6:36 PM I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Andrea. Thank you for your wonderful comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Juliet Ligon April 25, 2019 at 7:23 PM Enjoyed this sensual poem. Susan Ashley April 29, 2019 at 6:35 PM Thank you for your lovely comments, Juliet. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu April 22, 2019 at 5:02 PM Hello Susan, all I can say is if it happened you would be happy. It did not happen so you woder what if...What would have been. have a nice day my friend. Darlene De Beaulieu April 24, 2019 at 9:25 AM Hello Susan Ashley, thank you.I enjoy your poetry Susan. I wish you warmest wishes to you. Have a nice day. Susan Ashley April 22, 2019 at 6:22 PM Your perceptive comments are beautifully expressed, Darlene. Thank you for your your gracious visit and for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Ashley Conte April 20, 2019 at 10:48 AM Your inviting poem leaves much for the reader to ponder upon the end or restoration of love. Susan Ashley April 22, 2019 at 6:30 PM Thank you, Ashley, I’m so pleased that my poem led your imagination to wonder. Your gracious visit and insightful comments are a pleasure to receive. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus April 17, 2019 at 3:17 PM Unfortunately, even captivating dreams tend to come to an end too quickly for our liking, Susan. These same words apply to this beautiful poem which ended too soon! ~ Warm regards and hugs, my friend. // paul Susan Ashley April 19, 2019 at 8:48 PM Indeed, some dreams are not meant to last or come true, Paul, and sometimes maybe it's for the better.. Your insightful comments are such a joy to receive. Thank you for your encouraging and endearing presence, your thoughts are always captivating. Warmest wishes and hugs always, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley April 17, 2019 at 3:05 PM Exceptionally beautiful and deeply emotion revealing work my friend. Love whether it be new, old, regained or forever lost is the most precious and most powerful emotion. This truly is a gem shining in a well of heart's making! A fav .... Susan Ashley April 19, 2019 at 8:54 PM My dear friend, your generous and shining comments and fave are treasured gifts and are such a joy to receive. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Robert. Your esteemed thoughts and precious feedback is uplifting and means so much to me. Thank you for sharing your gracious heart and kindness with me, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes and blessings always.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael April 17, 2019 at 3:03 PM Show time...a nice build up...well expressed...Enjoyed...All the best Susan Susan Ashley April 19, 2019 at 8:51 PM It’s so wonderful to hear from you, Arturo. Thank you for your wonderful comments. Your lovely visit is most appreciated, mon ami.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit April 17, 2019 at 8:36 AM A charming write of lost and repossessed love..ready to rupture its bubbled captivity. You have a wonderful way with your words Susan..and you left it to the readers' imagination with your "what if" title and the ending line. A gifted writer you are! Susan Ashley April 19, 2019 at 8:40 PM Vijay, your generous praise inspires me to reach ever higher. I appreciate your lovely comments that truly touch my heart. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Lawrence Sharp April 16, 2019 at 11:38 PM As always, Susan, very evocative and involving poetry, very nicely done. Susan Ashley April 19, 2019 at 8:36 PM As always, your presence here is deeply appreciated and your valued insight is cherished, Lawrence. Thank you for your precious comments, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan