Paul Callus Poet Verse

What I Gave

I gave you everything
All that I possessed
You took my heart 
Grasping it with disdain 
Inflicting pain
What did you gain?
You squeezed with greed
The final drops
To quench your burning thirst.
	You took what I gave
	And made me your slave.

I gave you everything
All my inner self
You took my soul
Moulded it to your taste
With utmost haste
You chose to waste
Within your claws
In frenzied mood 
You stuck relentless fangs.
        You took what I gave
	And made me your slave. 

I gave you everything
All my reasoning
You took my mind
Stripping it to the ground
With deaf'ning sound 
Ripped all you found
Insatiable 
To nourish needs 
To fit your scheming plans.
        You took what I gave
	And made me your slave
	Forever.

	
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3 rd July 2014 
Contest: What I Gave
Sponsor: Sheri Fresonke Harper 
Placing: 5th

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Julia Ward March 21, 2015 at 1:59 AM "slave//forever" is sad and is the twist in the tale. Thank you for the dramatic read. Hugs, Julia, xx Paul Callus March 21, 2015 at 6:51 AM Thank you Julia. I'm not usually that dramatic!! Hugs // paul

Sasha Maharaj July 15, 2014 at 1:35 AM Love it Paul... :) Congrats on you win as well Paul Callus July 15, 2014 at 2:31 PM Thank you Sasha! You're welcome to visit anytime:) // paul Sasha Maharaj July 15, 2014 at 1:44 AM your*

Faye Gibson July 14, 2014 at 1:30 PM Great write...I read down the comments and see that this is fiction. So glad you didn't suffer in this way, but you wrote it like you did. Congratulations. Paul Callus July 14, 2014 at 2:59 PM When I was young I did acting and that required getting into the part; same thing with poetry. Thanks for the lovely visit, Faye. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 14, 2014 at 2:47 AM And back again with huge congrats Paul on your splendid winning poem ! Don't ever imagine such things ,, it makes reader sad ,, I had an emotional outburst when I read n prayed it wasn't true,, u indeed hv a great pen! Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 14, 2014 at 11:52 AM Thanks be to lord ! Greatly imagined,,n this fruit is sweet n sour,, more of sweet or more of sour can't now decide,, sweet maybe !! Paul Callus July 14, 2014 at 11:32 AM Many thanks Upma! You can put your mind at rest....'tis only fruit of my imagination! But these things do happen! txs for lovely comments! // paul

Angie Thomas July 12, 2014 at 4:23 PM What a beautiful write... expressive and powerful... Paul Callus July 13, 2014 at 4:50 AM Thank you Angie both for stopping by and the lovely comments. // paul

Lucilla Carrillo July 12, 2014 at 11:09 AM What a good poem Paul. That happens to a lot of good men and women. They give everything for nothing. I hope this is just a poem and it really didn't happen to you. Great for the contest.... Lucilla Paul Callus July 13, 2014 at 4:53 AM Good Sunday to you Lucilla! No, this did not happen to me, but I know of friends whose marriages became hell on earth! Thank you for the nice remarks. Take care. // paul

Aiyah Torres July 11, 2014 at 3:22 PM So true and realistically written.. very well done, my friend Paul.. I can relate.. hehe.. ^_^ I wish people would know how to take part for themselves,, :)) Paul Callus July 11, 2014 at 3:46 PM Hi Aiyah! How lovely to have you stopping by; hope things are looking brighter in life:) Yes, I think you can somewhat relate to this. Take care....oh! I like the no 28 :) // paul

Kristy Chun July 10, 2014 at 5:44 PM Captivating and expressive! So true in form to some today... some will never learn that it's a give and take. This points a finger at what some take for granted. Great write Paul! Paul Callus July 11, 2014 at 2:23 PM You read it well Kristy! and your comments are spot on. Thank you for stopping by:) // paul

Kelly Deschler July 9, 2014 at 12:25 AM I really like the flow of this. The short lines get right to the heart of the matter. Sometimes, poems can be too long when they have nothing to say. This was deeply emotional and expressive! Good luck in Sheri's contest, Paul! Paul Callus July 9, 2014 at 4:55 AM Thank you Kelly. I am not good at writing very long poems; I need to express myself as quick as possible...it's an urge that has to be dealt with fast; once written, I can sit back and re-read....and breathe! // paul

Andrea Dietrich July 6, 2014 at 8:45 AM whoa. I don't know if this is a good thing or a bad thing. It seems you kind of like it!!! Great entry, Paul. Soupmail. Paul Callus July 6, 2014 at 10:38 AM Thank you Andrea! There are all types of relationships in life! This one is based solely on imagination. // paul

Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2014 at 8:23 AM Wow it sounds like you gave a lot. I wouldn't mind being a slave for one night with the person of my choice *lol*. Paul Callus July 6, 2014 at 10:28 AM I wouldn't mind that either!:) Thanks for stopping by, Richard. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 4, 2014 at 4:28 PM How tragic that is I remember fifths shades of grey but eventually he gets healed... This one so sad, cruel selfish love..... To love isn't to have some slave but to love is to see someone equally or near equally completing you..:) so tired PAUL..:) Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 5:19 PM I agree with your reasoning Olive_eloi! The love in this write can only lead to a tragic end. Hope your Friday was filled with happiness and song. Goodnight:) // paul

Sara Kendrick July 4, 2014 at 7:49 AM Very expressive and emotive entry to the contest. Some people just don't have it in them to appreciate a good person..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 10:32 AM Thank you Sara. I agree with you. ideally it would be give and take, but one-sidedness fails to work. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 4, 2014 at 4:54 AM Paul this is an amazing write! U gave ur everything ,, to be a slave ,, made me sad,, be sure it was just an imagery ! Very emotive ,, a must winner! Gl in contest! Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 6:04 AM As you say, it is emotive; true, it's a creation from imagination, but I get into the part when I'm writing, so at that moment it was all real in my mind. Thank you Upma; appreciate both visit and apt comments. Have a nice day! // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen July 4, 2014 at 3:45 AM - Paul, so beautifully written - You gave everything you own .... your soul and your heart ... love!! - Good luck in the contest, I think this is a winning poem - first class! - Wish you a nice day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 5:59 AM Many thanks Anne Lise; so glad you see potential in what I have given! txs for the wishes...hope you too are having a nice day:) /x/ paul

Eileen Manassian July 3, 2014 at 9:47 PM Exquisite Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 6:00 AM I love your exquisite comment, Eileen; one word from you is abundant for me:) Have a nice weekend. // paul

Casarah Nance July 3, 2014 at 9:04 PM Wow, way to write Paul, this it going to be tops in the contest for sure, what an awesome poem! great job. Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 5:55 AM Hi Casarah! Now I sure needed some lovely words like yours this morning. Thank you for the encouragement:) // paul

Tim Smith July 3, 2014 at 8:05 PM Stunning Paul..I like where you take this....Tim Paul Callus July 4, 2014 at 5:53 AM Hi Tim! Thank you for your stunning remark. I feel that perhaps you might relate to this...take care. // paul

Jan Allison July 3, 2014 at 5:29 PM Ohh very deep and dark Paul. Good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xxx Paul Callus July 3, 2014 at 5:49 PM Thank you Jan. Glad you like it. Not my usual style, but makes a change:) Hugs. // paul

Frederic Parker July 3, 2014 at 5:01 PM well written Paul but not a healthy way to live..that's giving a lot ..good luck in the contest Paul Callus July 3, 2014 at 5:38 PM Yes, you are right Frederic...I went to extremes on this one...was in one of those moods! txs for stopping by. // paul

Ilene Bauer July 3, 2014 at 4:46 PM wonderful and beautifully written, paul! Paul Callus July 3, 2014 at 5:36 PM Glad you liked this write, Ilene! Thank you for the visit and support. // paul