Weeping Willow

The weeping willow wept and withered.
Lovers swore their love, carving hearts.
Initials replaced her perfect bark. 
Pains of loves or lost loves embarked.
Each time young lovers sat beneath her bows,
She watched kissing and tender touches.
Then, out came the knife … OUCH!


44 words
5/20/2017
Written for ONE of FIVE-70 words or less - Poetry Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo

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Rowena Velasco

Date: 7/20/2025 6:28:00 AM

What a clever and poignant twist! The willow’s voice adds depth to the romance beneath its bows—bittersweet, wounded, and unforgettable. That last line made me wince and smile.

John Loving Iii

Date: 6/13/2023 7:29:00 PM

Remanissing the old poets I use to know that I was close to. Well I'm back. I was burned out for a while. maybe you'll find this. John.

Michael Tor

Date: 5/19/2020 5:40:00 PM

Nicely written and humorous at the end.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/4/2019 3:24:00 PM

Hello Dane Ann Smith Johnsen, the ending got to me. Wow! Have a nice day my friend.

Marsha Miller

Date: 6/19/2017 3:31:00 AM

I didn't expect that last line.....then I burst out laughing. You could enter this in a comical contest.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/13/2017 5:52:00 PM

I agree, they do feel pain and even bleed sap...wish those who carve could feel that pain. A beautiful poem Dane Ann! Congratulations on your win. : )

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/27/2017 5:23:00 PM

Excellent, Dane! Congrats!

Juli- Michelle

Date: 5/24/2017 2:19:00 PM

'wept and withered" It's like I'm watching the leaves slide down the trunk as it slowly dies down to the ground.. such beautiful imagery. Love, Juli-Michelle

James Marshall Goff

Date: 5/20/2017 4:14:00 PM

Dane Ann...surprisingly sharp ending! Smiling! jmg

Jan Allison

Date: 5/20/2017 2:12:00 PM

lovely personification - I winced at the dramatic ending I hate to see trees like that and often the trees last far longer than a relationship:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx