Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen Poet Free verse

Weeping Willow

The weeping willow wept and withered.
Lovers swore their love, carving hearts.
Initials replaced her perfect bark. 
Pains of loves or lost loves embarked.
Each time young lovers sat beneath her bows,
She watched kissing and tender touches.
Then, out came the knife … OUCH!


44 words
5/20/2017
Written for ONE of FIVE-70 words or less - Poetry Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo

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Darlene De Beaulieu July 25, 2026 at 3:16 PM Hello Dana Ann Smith Johnson, I enjoyed your poem the Cat. I like the willow trees. On a hot hum id day this tree has a lot of shade. Enjoy your evening. /Darlene/

Karen Croft May 30, 2026 at 6:22 PM very beautiful poem. I love weeping willows.

Rowena Velasco July 20, 2025 at 6:28 AM What a clever and poignant twist! The willow’s voice adds depth to the romance beneath its bows—bittersweet, wounded, and unforgettable. That last line made me wince and smile.

John Loving Iii June 13, 2023 at 7:29 PM Remanissing the old poets I use to know that I was close to. Well I'm back. I was burned out for a while. maybe you'll find this. John.

Michael Tor May 19, 2020 at 5:40 PM Nicely written and humorous at the end.

Darlene De Beaulieu January 4, 2019 at 3:24 PM Hello Dane Ann Smith Johnsen, the ending got to me. Wow! Have a nice day my friend.

Marsha Miller June 19, 2017 at 3:31 AM I didn't expect that last line.....then I burst out laughing. You could enter this in a comical contest.

Connie Marcum Wong June 13, 2017 at 5:52 PM I agree, they do feel pain and even bleed sap...wish those who carve could feel that pain. A beautiful poem Dane Ann! Congratulations on your win. : )

Kim Rodrigues May 27, 2017 at 5:23 PM Excellent, Dane! Congrats!

Juli- Michelle May 24, 2017 at 2:19 PM 'wept and withered" It's like I'm watching the leaves slide down the trunk as it slowly dies down to the ground.. such beautiful imagery. Love, Juli-Michelle

James Marshall Goff May 20, 2017 at 4:14 PM Dane Ann...surprisingly sharp ending! Smiling! jmg

Jan Allison May 20, 2017 at 2:12 PM lovely personification - I winced at the dramatic ending I hate to see trees like that and often the trees last far longer than a relationship:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen May 20, 2017 at 2:05 PM - A beautiful poem, with a dramatic ending - Good luck in the contest, Dane Ann - // Anne-Lise :)