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Weeping Waters

New jacket, new bike.
Old man rode
Wobbling unsteadily
Straight into a pond,
Frustrating the ducks.

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Joe Dimino

Date: 8/23/2025 6:43:00 AM

They forgot to duck, move out of the way. What the heck, just a bit more spray. Nice one, Victor. Fun. Have a great writing day!

Paige Hind

Date: 8/22/2025 5:50:00 PM

Awww, no...hope you weren't hurt! Neat poem -

Yann Rolland

Date: 8/22/2025 5:09:00 PM

really a wonder, everything i like in life, waw impressive and so short poem thanks poet

Brenda Chiri

Date: 8/22/2025 6:58:00 AM

I do hope this is not true because then I would feel terrible for my laughter when I read it!;) loved this victor! You brought a smile to my lips and a chuckle from my belly!;)

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/22/2025 2:04:00 AM

That was bad luck for the old man and the ducks. An amusing write Victor… Beryl

Charles Messina

Date: 8/22/2025 1:50:00 AM

Sometimes if it walks like a duck, and looks like a duck, it's actually just an old man who rode his bicycle into a pond with his new jacket (lol). Have a nice weekend, Victor.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/22/2025 1:26:00 AM

- A fun one, Victor :))) - hugs

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 8/21/2025 7:53:00 PM

This was fun! I am faving it. Thanks for the laughs, Victor. :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 8/21/2025 5:05:00 PM

loved this clever and humorous piece! Smiling!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/21/2025 3:45:00 PM

So cute!

John Fleming

Date: 8/21/2025 1:48:00 PM

Love it! Last two lines had me howling. Lol. :) john

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/21/2025 9:46:00 AM

Great one Victor. I can see it. I like that last line too :)

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 8/21/2025 9:15:00 AM

LOL Victor. Poor guy...I understand balance difficulties, especially on a bicycle! And, he got his new things dirty! :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/21/2025 5:32:00 AM

Hope this didn’t happen for real. One wants to smile, to laugh except for the weeping waters. Great imagery and last line! Fave!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/21/2025 5:20:00 AM

Good one. LOL..I bet that was a rude awakening for the old man. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/21/2025 3:32:00 AM

While the spirit may dance with the vigor of energy, the body whispers of its bounds, a gentle reminder to those who have walked many seasons, excellent brevity, Victor

Valsa George

Date: 8/21/2025 2:46:00 AM

If you had put this into limerick form, it would have made an excellent limerick. Old people should know that they have some limitations, though their mind might be youthful. The ducks must have had a scare.