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Feelings flood in seismic waves when soul mates drift apart, fits of anguished sobbing tear stained stress a shattered heart, doleful voices splutter we were doomed right from the start, passion in its twilight is this weeping rainy day, deep regrets so lachrymose for love that slipped away, mellow drama’s woeful tragic plot or empty play, morose violinist raises eyebrows with her tune, couples in dispute whose wild scream wakes the dead at noon, how that first flush eerie sadness wrecks their honeymoon, heartache piles on heartache ain’t that a crying shame, all that friction counts for nought as partners share the blame
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