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Dogs bark as we are strangers on this block the night is not used to intruders like us the crickets don't even trust our footsteps just past eleven and the windows have eyes curious of our unfamiliar presence and I can't hardly blame them we don't spell trouble but the cicadas and their fellow creature's trust has worn thin a dark cat (I'm betting is black) is tiptoeing this way he's been sent to take a closer look the watchman of their darkness whose intentions are that we might possibly see him and feel the need to go away but the night is a puppy and we're not going anywhere it will take a much bigger spook than a (black?) feline to scare us away we've got tiger's blood and the dogs cats crickets cicadas creatures and neighbors all know it we called their bluff and it's getting late for them but its damn early for us grab me something cold to drink it's going to be a long night alright!

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Date: 12/16/2011 10:56:00 PM
This was another one of yours I really like./ WEll, I need to get upstairs. My eyes can hardly stay open!! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 12/16/2011 12:51:00 PM
Interested in this different type of write, will give me something to think about..) enjoyed reading this..
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Date: 12/10/2011 5:21:00 PM
Hey, are you around lately?
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Date: 12/10/2011 1:55:00 PM
Really enjoyed reading this Awesome x Dawnie :)
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Date: 12/8/2011 2:08:00 PM
What a very interesting write, Joey! I really like how you tried to think from their perspective here...and belated happy birthday to you ^_^!! Wish you an awesome month-- :D!
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Date: 12/7/2011 6:53:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your poetry today and hope to be back soon to read more JS. This time of year we all are so busy and I for one don't have a lot of time right now but I will try. I love reading the poetry of the many talented poets here at the Soup. Hope to be reading your poetry for many more years to come. Thank you for sharing your poetry with us and may you always find the inspiration to continue with your writing endeavors whatever they may be. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/7/2011 5:57:00 AM
so awesome,,a mastercraft of creative writing,,,and a great story,,enjoyed it so....,
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Date: 12/6/2011 11:15:00 PM
First i will wish you happy birthday... and glad you are back.. about the poem: I'm basically thinking on the trust we lack... anyways, its a quite intelligent poem.. I'm just gonna label everything.. and grab me that cold drink... ~.ENJOYED.. thank you for sharing your wonderful poem;-) Have yourself a very lovely day, always,..p.d.
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Date: 12/6/2011 10:39:00 PM
This one ROCKS, and I take it this is your first night in Florida!! So what brought you to that place of hurricanes? Are you on the coastline? I really like how you insert the images of cat and dog into this and how you say it's damn early while late for the others! Birthday greetings for you! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 12/6/2011 10:18:00 PM
Joey-Great poem (love the ending!) and happy birthday btw :) Hope you had a good one!
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Date: 12/6/2011 12:07:00 PM
It took me a couple times...But I finely got thru it without a hitch.Kinda hard without capital letters...But I like a challenge.Good one.
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