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Dogs bark
as we are strangers on this block
the night
is not used to intruders like us
the crickets
don't even trust our footsteps

just past eleven
and the windows have eyes
curious
of our unfamiliar presence

and I can't hardly blame them

we don't spell trouble
but the cicadas 
and their fellow creature's trust
has worn thin

a dark cat 
(I'm betting is black)
is tiptoeing this way
he's been sent to take a closer look
the watchman of their darkness
whose intentions are
that we might possibly see him
and feel the need to go away

but the night is a puppy
and we're not going anywhere
it will take a much bigger spook
than a (black?) feline
to scare us away

we've got tiger's blood
and the dogs
cats 
crickets
cicadas 
creatures
and neighbors
all know it
we called their bluff

and it's getting late 
for them
but its damn early 
for us

grab me something cold to drink
it's going to be a long night alright!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 12/16/2011 10:56:00 PM
This was another one of yours I really like./ WEll, I need to get upstairs. My eyes can hardly stay open!! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 12/16/2011 12:51:00 PM
Interested in this different type of write, will give me something to think about..) enjoyed reading this..
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Date: 12/10/2011 5:21:00 PM
Hey, are you around lately?
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Date: 12/10/2011 1:55:00 PM
Really enjoyed reading this Awesome x Dawnie :)
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Date: 12/8/2011 2:08:00 PM
What a very interesting write, Joey! I really like how you tried to think from their perspective here...and belated happy birthday to you ^_^!! Wish you an awesome month-- :D!
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Date: 12/7/2011 6:53:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your poetry today and hope to be back soon to read more JS. This time of year we all are so busy and I for one don't have a lot of time right now but I will try. I love reading the poetry of the many talented poets here at the Soup. Hope to be reading your poetry for many more years to come. Thank you for sharing your poetry with us and may you always find the inspiration to continue with your writing endeavors whatever they may be. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/7/2011 5:57:00 AM
so awesome,,a mastercraft of creative writing,,,and a great story,,enjoyed it so....,
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Date: 12/6/2011 11:15:00 PM
First i will wish you happy birthday... and glad you are back.. about the poem: I'm basically thinking on the trust we lack... anyways, its a quite intelligent poem.. I'm just gonna label everything.. and grab me that cold drink... ~.ENJOYED.. thank you for sharing your wonderful poem;-) Have yourself a very lovely day, always,..p.d.
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Date: 12/6/2011 10:39:00 PM
This one ROCKS, and I take it this is your first night in Florida!! So what brought you to that place of hurricanes? Are you on the coastline? I really like how you insert the images of cat and dog into this and how you say it's damn early while late for the others! Birthday greetings for you! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 12/6/2011 10:18:00 PM
Joey-Great poem (love the ending!) and happy birthday btw :) Hope you had a good one!
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Date: 12/6/2011 12:07:00 PM
It took me a couple times...But I finely got thru it without a hitch.Kinda hard without capital letters...But I like a challenge.Good one.
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