We Tried Time

we tried time

for many of our own discrepancies
there is not enough we bellowed
from cave to condominium
grabbed disrespectfully its minutest
portion and dragged it to court.

there is the job lined up, 
on the line or maybe in line 
the latest craze to master
 
the kinder need camp
planning for the future 
and must keep up with those Jones
whom ever they may be
no one has ever found them, yet.

untouched time moved on
as it always will
pitying we poor folks.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Evans Avatar
December 31, 2017 at 2:20 PM
I really like the line "we bellowed from cave to condominium". A challenging, thought provoking poem that oozes with figurative speech.
Cresswell Avatar
December 31, 2017 at 6:06 PM
Thank you Richard. Happy New Year!
Fleming Avatar
December 31, 2017 at 1:03 PM
All the very best for the forth coming New Year, Patricia...may it be both rewarding and fulfilling. Hope your Christmas was a happy and contented one - I am quite certain it was! My warmest wishes and my very finest regards as always of course. Your good friend. :) john
Cresswell Avatar
December 31, 2017 at 6:05 PM
Sent you a cared. Happy New Year.
Breedt Avatar
December 25, 2017 at 4:01 AM
Hi Patricia. Excellent. Happy Christmas. Sorry I wasnt too active here lately. Things to do people to see.
Babbit Avatar
December 22, 2017 at 1:27 PM
So true, in the end, all we had was time.
May Avatar
December 21, 2017 at 5:31 PM
Sometimes we have to forget the Jones's...Nicely penned Patricia
Cresswell Avatar
December 21, 2017 at 6:48 PM
Yep suredoo!! Thank you Joseph.
Stars Avatar
December 21, 2017 at 6:16 AM
uhm ... does time pitty ... hmm ...
Cresswell Avatar
December 21, 2017 at 8:31 AM
Perhaps, I guess it is an individual thing. Thank you for reading and commenting. Welcome to my home.
One Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 6:54 AM
This is very deep, I can see it is a personal poem.. Emotively expressed with your wonderful pen..
Cresswell Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 7:29 AM
Personal in so far as I was caught up in it foe a while, luckily I woke up. Thanks Slent One.
Pandit Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 5:47 AM
A deep message in your poem Patricia--touched by the ending.
Cresswell Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 7:27 AM
Thank you Vijay.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 12:39 AM
I've got to come back to this one tomorrow, heavier than my heavy head. Have a good night my dear. xo sistah
Cresswell Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 2:05 AM
You too big hug!
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