We Tried Time

we tried time

for many of our own discrepancies
there is not enough we bellowed
from cave to condominium
grabbed disrespectfully its minutest
portion and dragged it to court.

there is the job lined up, 
on the line or maybe in line 
the latest craze to master
 
the kinder need camp
planning for the future 
and must keep up with those Jones
whom ever they may be
no one has ever found them, yet.

untouched time moved on
as it always will
pitying we poor folks.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 12/31/2017 2:20:00 PM
I really like the line "we bellowed from cave to condominium". A challenging, thought provoking poem that oozes with figurative speech.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/31/2017 6:06:00 PM
Thank you Richard. Happy New Year!
Date: 12/31/2017 1:03:00 PM
All the very best for the forth coming New Year, Patricia...may it be both rewarding and fulfilling. Hope your Christmas was a happy and contented one - I am quite certain it was! My warmest wishes and my very finest regards as always of course. Your good friend. :) john
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/31/2017 6:05:00 PM
Sent you a cared. Happy New Year.
Date: 12/25/2017 4:01:00 AM
Hi Patricia. Excellent. Happy Christmas. Sorry I wasnt too active here lately. Things to do people to see.
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Date: 12/22/2017 1:27:00 PM
So true, in the end, all we had was time.
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Date: 12/21/2017 5:31:00 PM
Sometimes we have to forget the Jones's...Nicely penned Patricia
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/21/2017 6:48:00 PM
Yep suredoo!! Thank you Joseph.
Date: 12/21/2017 6:16:00 AM
uhm ... does time pitty ... hmm ...
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/21/2017 8:31:00 AM
Perhaps, I guess it is an individual thing. Thank you for reading and commenting. Welcome to my home.
Date: 12/19/2017 6:54:00 AM
This is very deep, I can see it is a personal poem.. Emotively expressed with your wonderful pen..
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/19/2017 7:29:00 AM
Personal in so far as I was caught up in it foe a while, luckily I woke up. Thanks Slent One.
Date: 12/19/2017 5:47:00 AM
A deep message in your poem Patricia--touched by the ending.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/19/2017 7:27:00 AM
Thank you Vijay.
Date: 12/19/2017 12:39:00 AM
I've got to come back to this one tomorrow, heavier than my heavy head. Have a good night my dear. xo sistah
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/19/2017 2:05:00 AM
You too big hug!
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