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We Are Water

Like water, we flow incessantly
Since birth along the path of destiny
Adjusting, assimilating, 
Serving our body, senses, ego, others
Mindlessly meandering

Pure and clean to earth from sky
Now polluted, tasteless

Brainlessly existing, copying others
Flowing along with wind, destination unknown

Used by other in the worst manner
Still living for them, trying to please them

Wherever we go, we become them
Following others, copying, changing

Our brain sleeps, we choose not to think
Unaware of what we are doing
Where we are heading

Finally, we merge in the ocean
Our identity lost, our individual existence unknown
Brain is idly tossing with waves
Enjoying its stupor

16.06.2021
For: The Shape of Water, craig cornish
Winner 13th place
1st place Brain Strand contest

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/2/2021 8:03:00 AM

Nice Title and beautiful write. Congratulations!

Beata Agustin

Date: 6/28/2021 6:23:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent... with this as a proof. God bless you.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/28/2021 6:25:00 AM

Thanks for the compliment. Have a wonderful day ahead friend. Take care, God bless!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/26/2021 11:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative write. Enjoyed It. Have a blessed day/weekend with your win................

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/26/2021 11:17:00 AM

Thanks Paula. Have a wonderful weekend friend

Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/25/2021 10:18:00 PM

Rama It's a nice poem and should be placed in higher rank.. Love.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/25/2021 10:56:00 PM

Thanks for the compliment. Have a wonderful weekend friend. Love, Rama

Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 6/18/2021 5:55:00 AM

A fine poetry flowing with the subject matter, all the best dear poet

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/18/2021 11:13:00 AM

Thanks for your wonderful comments. Take care, God bless!

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/16/2021 1:28:00 PM

Profound poetry that harmoniously combines the metaphysical, psychic, and physical worlds. This is a one-of-a-kind and lyrical poetry; My warmest wishes for the competition, Rama. There are some parallels, but they are not identical; I was inspired by the 2017 film GUILLERMO DEL TORO and the famous poet Jalal al-Din Rumi. Because I cannot locate the original poem, here is an excerpt: (Unable to discern your form, I find you all about me). Blessings and best regards

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 10:36:00 PM

The parallels struck me. How amazing, two persons thinking on similar lines for a contest. Interesting observation. The quote is wonderful. Thanks for your wonderful comments. Take care, God bless!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/16/2021 6:50:00 AM

Rama you are a good, kind and loyal friend. Your poetry comes straight from the heart and this shows in everything that you post, genuine writes which mean a lot to you and which you share with us - thank-you. this is a fav. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:55:00 AM

Thanks for your wonderful comments and favourite. Take care, God bless!

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/16/2021 5:52:00 AM

WoW! Rama, You have penned such a thought-provoking write on water. Good contrasting views on water as a whole. I don't think I’ll see the “role” of water the same way. Best wishes on the contest. PS, Thanks for your recent visits to my page; I appreciate the kind and encouraging comments that you left;-) Alexis

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:54:00 AM

Those comments were because of your wonderful, inspiring poems. Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Judy Ball

Date: 6/15/2021 8:10:00 PM

Sort of like lemmings rushing to the cliff to stampede over killing the whole herd. Great job. Hope it's a winner for you. God Bless, JB

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:53:00 AM

Enjoyed writing, doesn't matter if it looses. Thanks. Take care, God bless!