Rama Balasubramanian Poet Free verse

We Are Water

Like water, we flow incessantly
Since birth along the path of destiny
Adjusting, assimilating, 
Serving our body, senses, ego, others
Mindlessly meandering

Pure and clean to earth from sky
Now polluted, tasteless

Brainlessly existing, copying others
Flowing along with wind, destination unknown

Used by other in the worst manner
Still living for them, trying to please them

Wherever we go, we become them
Following others, copying, changing

Our brain sleeps, we choose not to think
Unaware of what we are doing
Where we are heading

Finally, we merge in the ocean
Our identity lost, our individual existence unknown
Brain is idly tossing with waves
Enjoying its stupor

16.06.2021
For: The Shape of Water, craig cornish
Winner 13th place
1st place Brain Strand contest

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Christuraj Alex July 2, 2021 at 8:03 AM Nice Title and beautiful write. Congratulations!

Beata Agustin June 28, 2021 at 6:23 AM Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent... with this as a proof. God bless you. Rama Balasubramanian June 28, 2021 at 6:25 AM Thanks for the compliment. Have a wonderful day ahead friend. Take care, God bless!

Paula Goldsmith June 26, 2021 at 11:14 AM Congratulations on your win. What a creative write. Enjoyed It. Have a blessed day/weekend with your win................ Rama Balasubramanian June 26, 2021 at 11:17 AM Thanks Paula. Have a wonderful weekend friend

Anisha Dutta June 25, 2021 at 10:18 PM Rama It's a nice poem and should be placed in higher rank.. Love. Rama Balasubramanian June 25, 2021 at 10:56 PM Thanks for the compliment. Have a wonderful weekend friend. Love, Rama

Aniruddha Pathak June 18, 2021 at 5:55 AM A fine poetry flowing with the subject matter, all the best dear poet Rama Balasubramanian June 18, 2021 at 11:13 AM Thanks for your wonderful comments. Take care, God bless!

Sotto Poet June 16, 2021 at 1:28 PM Profound poetry that harmoniously combines the metaphysical, psychic, and physical worlds. This is a one-of-a-kind and lyrical poetry; My warmest wishes for the competition, Rama. There are some parallels, but they are not identical; I was inspired by the 2017 film GUILLERMO DEL TORO and the famous poet Jalal al-Din Rumi. Because I cannot locate the original poem, here is an excerpt: (Unable to discern your form, I find you all about me). Blessings and best regards Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 10:36 PM The parallels struck me. How amazing, two persons thinking on similar lines for a contest. Interesting observation. The quote is wonderful. Thanks for your wonderful comments. Take care, God bless!

Jennifer Proxenos June 16, 2021 at 6:50 AM Rama you are a good, kind and loyal friend. Your poetry comes straight from the heart and this shows in everything that you post, genuine writes which mean a lot to you and which you share with us - thank-you. this is a fav. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 11:55 AM Thanks for your wonderful comments and favourite. Take care, God bless!

Alexis Y. June 16, 2021 at 5:52 AM WoW! Rama, You have penned such a thought-provoking write on water. Good contrasting views on water as a whole. I don't think I’ll see the “role” of water the same way. Best wishes on the contest. PS, Thanks for your recent visits to my page; I appreciate the kind and encouraging comments that you left;-) Alexis Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 11:54 AM Those comments were because of your wonderful, inspiring poems. Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Judy Ball June 15, 2021 at 8:10 PM Sort of like lemmings rushing to the cliff to stampede over killing the whole herd. Great job. Hope it's a winner for you. God Bless, JB Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 11:53 AM Enjoyed writing, doesn't matter if it looses. Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Tom Cunningham June 15, 2021 at 2:02 PM You captured the theme of the contest well Rama, quite a thought provoking write. Best of luck in the contest. Tom Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 11:52 AM Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Demetrios Trifiatis June 15, 2021 at 12:31 PM A profound poem that brings together the spiritual, the mental, and the physical world in a harmonious way, my friend, Rama! Excellently done! Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 11:51 AM Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Evelyn Judy Buehler June 15, 2021 at 12:24 PM So rich in imagery, your poem does a fine job with the contest theme. Good luck! :D Rama Balasubramanian June 16, 2021 at 11:51 AM Thanks. Take care, God bless!