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We Are Water

Like water, we flow incessantly Since birth along the path of destiny Adjusting, assimilating, Serving our body, senses, ego, others Mindlessly meandering Pure and clean to earth from sky Now polluted, tasteless Brainlessly existing, copying others Flowing along with wind, destination unknown Used by other in the worst manner Still living for them, trying to please them Wherever we go, we become them Following others, copying, changing Our brain sleeps, we choose not to think Unaware of what we are doing Where we are heading Finally, we merge in the ocean Our identity lost, our individual existence unknown Brain is idly tossing with waves Enjoying its stupor 16.06.2021 For: The Shape of Water, craig cornish Winner 13th place 1st place Brain Strand contest

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/2/2021 8:03:00 AM

Nice Title and beautiful write. Congratulations!

Beata Agustin

Date: 6/28/2021 6:23:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent... with this as a proof. God bless you.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/28/2021 6:25:00 AM

Thanks for the compliment. Have a wonderful day ahead friend. Take care, God bless!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/26/2021 11:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative write. Enjoyed It. Have a blessed day/weekend with your win................

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/26/2021 11:17:00 AM

Thanks Paula. Have a wonderful weekend friend

Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/25/2021 10:18:00 PM

Rama It's a nice poem and should be placed in higher rank.. Love.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/25/2021 10:56:00 PM

Thanks for the compliment. Have a wonderful weekend friend. Love, Rama

Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 6/18/2021 5:55:00 AM

A fine poetry flowing with the subject matter, all the best dear poet

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/18/2021 11:13:00 AM

Thanks for your wonderful comments. Take care, God bless!

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/16/2021 1:28:00 PM

Profound poetry that harmoniously combines the metaphysical, psychic, and physical worlds. This is a one-of-a-kind and lyrical poetry; My warmest wishes for the competition, Rama. There are some parallels, but they are not identical; I was inspired by the 2017 film GUILLERMO DEL TORO and the famous poet Jalal al-Din Rumi. Because I cannot locate the original poem, here is an excerpt: (Unable to discern your form, I find you all about me). Blessings and best regards

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 10:36:00 PM

The parallels struck me. How amazing, two persons thinking on similar lines for a contest. Interesting observation. The quote is wonderful. Thanks for your wonderful comments. Take care, God bless!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/16/2021 6:50:00 AM

Rama you are a good, kind and loyal friend. Your poetry comes straight from the heart and this shows in everything that you post, genuine writes which mean a lot to you and which you share with us - thank-you. this is a fav. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:55:00 AM

Thanks for your wonderful comments and favourite. Take care, God bless!

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/16/2021 5:52:00 AM

WoW! Rama, You have penned such a thought-provoking write on water. Good contrasting views on water as a whole. I don't think I’ll see the “role” of water the same way. Best wishes on the contest. PS, Thanks for your recent visits to my page; I appreciate the kind and encouraging comments that you left;-) Alexis

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:54:00 AM

Those comments were because of your wonderful, inspiring poems. Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Judy Ball

Date: 6/15/2021 8:10:00 PM

Sort of like lemmings rushing to the cliff to stampede over killing the whole herd. Great job. Hope it's a winner for you. God Bless, JB

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:53:00 AM

Enjoyed writing, doesn't matter if it looses. Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/15/2021 2:02:00 PM

You captured the theme of the contest well Rama, quite a thought provoking write. Best of luck in the contest. Tom

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:52:00 AM

Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/15/2021 12:31:00 PM

A profound poem that brings together the spiritual, the mental, and the physical world in a harmonious way, my friend, Rama! Excellently done!

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:51:00 AM

Thanks. Take care, God bless!

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 6/15/2021 12:24:00 PM

So rich in imagery, your poem does a fine job with the contest theme. Good luck! :D

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 6/16/2021 11:51:00 AM

Thanks. Take care, God bless!