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Waterfalls of Terror

It started as a nature hike - First sunny day in weeks It was me and my boyfriend Mike Upon the mountain peak All was good till we reached the falls Then Mike, with his dull shoes Lost his grip on the slimy walls And off the ledge we flew When I finally heard Mike’s voice I swam hard, like a fish But the rapids left me no choice And took me in their grip Without much air I gagged and gasped And tried to stay afloat But with fear I was sinking fast - I prayed for rescue boats Mike went over and then I went Headfirst into the rocks I came out bruised, battered, and spent Choking out water sobs I looked for Mike everywhere - “MIKE!” But I never found him Search and Rescue said, “You survived, Now don’t you be so grim” But what everyone didn’t know Was that this WAS MY FAULT Mike was on his knees to propose Before we both fell off Received 3rd place in p.d.'s "hardest form" assignment contest assignment: ballad form + "Waterfalls of Terror" title, write in 3 hours Received 11th place in "Your old Ballad or Rhyme, best of all time" contest

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Date: 7/25/2011 11:03:00 AM
Great story. There have been some in the news of late of folks being lost in a waterfall. congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 7/25/2011 9:51:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Don's "Old Ballad or Rhyme" contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/14/2011 8:19:00 PM
WAY to go. I think I recall reading this before, Susan. A big congrats to you! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 7/12/2011 10:59:00 AM
You really had me in suspense, Susan. Love the dark humor in the last verse. Congratulations on your win in PD's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/12/2011 10:58:00 AM
Oh shucks! Well, how sad is that! This sure is a gripping write, Susan :) Truly enjoyed this one, Super congrats on your awesome win :D and thanks for your inspiring comments in mine :D
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Date: 7/12/2011 4:58:00 AM
Congratulations Susan on your win in the "Assignment" contest of P.D. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/12/2011 4:57:00 AM
Congrats Susan on your amazing win with this dazzling assignment .. great one my friend..luv..
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Date: 7/12/2011 4:01:00 AM
My congratulations on this win in the contest of p.d., Susan
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Date: 7/12/2011 12:46:00 AM
swinging cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs
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Date: 7/12/2011 12:37:00 AM
Susan,,Congratulations on a poem well done! Thank you for supporting my contest~ I sure enjoyed every entry,..p.d.
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Date: 7/4/2011 12:18:00 AM
I love the humorous touch you put to this. VERY fun reading for me. Happy July fourth!
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Date: 6/29/2011 3:47:00 AM
An excellent tale, with gripping content! Hope it is fiction! Good luck in the contest! Love, Robert.
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Date: 6/17/2011 12:37:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry today Susan. Have yourself a wonderful inspiration filled weekend I will be back to read more Monday. Love, Carol
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