Water Falls

staring back seemingly motionless in her thunder she froths at the mouth  whips away at the serene background exposes her dominant nature the tears flow against a cheek bone hard that slowly erodes its stoic mask leaves its mark a vividly engraved  memory of many summers past Maurice Yvonne 27~10~2014 Sponsor: nette onclaud Contest Name: SOME FORM OF CRYSTALLINE
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Marcum Wong Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 4:56 AM
Maurice, the uniqueness in this poem is what makes you a poet of notice. A metaphor in flavors to savor. Excellent! Congrats on your win!
Callus Avatar
November 8, 2014 at 3:24 PM
Your dominant waterfall is powerful with a masochistic touch...yet a beauty to behold. Very creative take on this theme. Congratulations on your fine win. Merits a top rating. // paul
Kayode Avatar
November 8, 2014 at 8:43 AM
Congrtas Maurice,I read this and truly enjoyed it.
Meier-Hans Avatar
November 8, 2014 at 8:15 AM
Dropping back with my congratulations Maurice.
Mehta Avatar
November 8, 2014 at 4:50 AM
Wonderful poem, congrats on the win
May Avatar
November 7, 2014 at 9:52 PM
Well penned Maurice...Congrats on your win
Lamoureux Avatar
November 7, 2014 at 12:47 PM
A masterful write Maurice, one of my favorites frot the contest.
Onclaud Avatar
November 7, 2014 at 2:19 AM
riveting, forceful write, maurice... your waterfall is a dominant force!... thank you for being part of my contest with my cheery congrats!
Haight Avatar
November 6, 2014 at 10:06 PM
Maurice, I really enjoyed your poem and the way your imagery so powerfully paints the waterfall. Congratulations to you for you win! Sandra
Dietrich Avatar
November 6, 2014 at 10:04 PM
I have enjoyed all Nette's poems and her wisdom in the placements but for me, this is higher than a six!! As Debra says down here, it is so intuitive. Congrats on the winners' list. You deserved to be on it.
Squyres Avatar
November 6, 2014 at 9:46 PM
How intuitive and sensitive this poem is... I felt the lines that tears have traveled in the past ... in a good way though. Cleansing crystalline for all who let go in this manner. I love your take on the theme... wonderfully written !! Congratulations on your win !!
Allison Avatar
November 6, 2014 at 3:30 PM
dropping back with my congrats Maurice:-) hugs jan xx
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
October 31, 2014 at 6:45 AM
love the take you did with this poem.. :) wow!!! imagery wow and the verse so powerfull ad well as the title.. :)
Fraser Avatar
October 30, 2014 at 6:00 PM
Your words cascade like the waterfall Maurice, wonderful in gracing fall as I read, James :)
Deschler Avatar
October 30, 2014 at 1:33 AM
Often, when the tears fall in nature, so do ours.... This is a beautiful use of metaphor, and the imagery was so moving. Very well written, Maurice!
De La Luna Avatar
October 29, 2014 at 6:01 PM
wow! great imagery, Maurice!
Eastman Avatar
October 29, 2014 at 4:33 PM
Amazing imagery developed here... Amazing piece.
Trifiatis Avatar
October 29, 2014 at 4:25 PM
What an imagery! Imposing and majestic measuring itself against the might of time! Excellent work, cher Maurice!
Mcdaid Avatar
October 29, 2014 at 1:28 PM
truly very beautifully penned maurice
Kendrick Avatar
October 29, 2014 at 11:53 AM
I believe that you have got a winner here..Enjoyed reading your expressive work today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Gifford Avatar
October 28, 2014 at 9:31 PM
You put me there, Maurice! I can feel the mist on my face. Excellent! Also, thank you for liking my poem, "A poet's Day." There is a glitch somewhere on my site. And I cannot access this poem. When you sent me a comment e-mail, I clicked on it and instead of my site, I was taken to the poem search engine area. And this has happened when I try to click on other sites, too. If this has ever happened to you, let me know. I contacted staff but 2 days now and I have not heard back! Darlene
Hamilton Avatar
October 28, 2014 at 6:52 PM
gorgeous imagery Maurice I love it hugs 7
Dietrich Avatar
October 28, 2014 at 3:35 PM
wowowow, YES, you improved it. GOOD For YOU!!!! Let me see your latest. Think i will fave this one now!
Callus Avatar
October 28, 2014 at 1:08 PM
Great write Maurice...I can visualize it all...metaphorically speaking. Merits a top 7 rating. This is a poem that leaves its mark. // paul
Austin Avatar
October 28, 2014 at 10:06 AM
Like a beautiful, moody tearful female, eh? This should get high points in the contest, Maurice. Nette will be impressed as am I. Love, daver
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