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Water Falls

staring back seemingly motionless in her thunder she froths at the mouth whips away at the serene background exposes her dominant nature the tears flow against a cheek bone hard that slowly erodes its stoic mask leaves its mark a vividly engraved memory of many summers past Maurice Yvonne 27~10~2014 Sponsor: nette onclaud Contest Name: SOME FORM OF CRYSTALLINE

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/9/2014 4:56:00 AM

Maurice, the uniqueness in this poem is what makes you a poet of notice. A metaphor in flavors to savor. Excellent! Congrats on your win!

Paul Callus

Date: 11/8/2014 3:24:00 PM

Your dominant waterfall is powerful with a masochistic touch...yet a beauty to behold. Very creative take on this theme. Congratulations on your fine win. Merits a top rating. // paul

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 11/8/2014 8:43:00 AM

Congrtas Maurice,I read this and truly enjoyed it.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/8/2014 8:15:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Maurice.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/8/2014 4:50:00 AM

Wonderful poem, congrats on the win

Joseph May

Date: 11/7/2014 9:52:00 PM

Well penned Maurice...Congrats on your win

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/7/2014 12:47:00 PM

A masterful write Maurice, one of my favorites frot the contest.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/7/2014 2:19:00 AM

riveting, forceful write, maurice... your waterfall is a dominant force!... thank you for being part of my contest with my cheery congrats!

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/6/2014 10:06:00 PM

Maurice, I really enjoyed your poem and the way your imagery so powerfully paints the waterfall. Congratulations to you for you win! Sandra

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/6/2014 10:04:00 PM

I have enjoyed all Nette's poems and her wisdom in the placements but for me, this is higher than a six!! As Debra says down here, it is so intuitive. Congrats on the winners' list. You deserved to be on it.

Debra Squyres

Date: 11/6/2014 9:46:00 PM

How intuitive and sensitive this poem is... I felt the lines that tears have traveled in the past ... in a good way though. Cleansing crystalline for all who let go in this manner. I love your take on the theme... wonderfully written !! Congratulations on your win !!

Jan Allison

Date: 11/6/2014 3:30:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats Maurice:-) hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/31/2014 6:45:00 AM

love the take you did with this poem.. :) wow!!! imagery wow and the verse so powerfull ad well as the title.. :)

James Fraser

Date: 10/30/2014 6:00:00 PM

Your words cascade like the waterfall Maurice, wonderful in gracing fall as I read, James :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/30/2014 1:33:00 AM

Often, when the tears fall in nature, so do ours.... This is a beautiful use of metaphor, and the imagery was so moving. Very well written, Maurice!

Hija De La Luna

Date: 10/29/2014 6:01:00 PM

wow! great imagery, Maurice!

Carol Eastman

Date: 10/29/2014 4:33:00 PM

Amazing imagery developed here... Amazing piece.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/29/2014 4:25:00 PM

What an imagery! Imposing and majestic measuring itself against the might of time! Excellent work, cher Maurice!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/29/2014 1:28:00 PM

truly very beautifully penned maurice

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/29/2014 11:53:00 AM

I believe that you have got a winner here..Enjoyed reading your expressive work today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Darlene Gifford

Date: 10/28/2014 9:31:00 PM

You put me there, Maurice! I can feel the mist on my face. Excellent! Also, thank you for liking my poem, "A poet's Day." There is a glitch somewhere on my site. And I cannot access this poem. When you sent me a comment e-mail, I clicked on it and instead of my site, I was taken to the poem search engine area. And this has happened when I try to click on other sites, too. If this has ever happened to you, let me know. I contacted staff but 2 days now and I have not heard back! Darlene

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 10/28/2014 6:52:00 PM

gorgeous imagery Maurice I love it hugs 7

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/28/2014 3:35:00 PM

wowowow, YES, you improved it. GOOD For YOU!!!! Let me see your latest. Think i will fave this one now!

Paul Callus

Date: 10/28/2014 1:08:00 PM

Great write Maurice...I can visualize it all...metaphorically speaking. Merits a top 7 rating. This is a poem that leaves its mark. // paul

Daver Austin

Date: 10/28/2014 10:06:00 AM

Like a beautiful, moody tearful female, eh? This should get high points in the contest, Maurice. Nette will be impressed as am I. Love, daver